I'm Sorry To Have To Tell You This
A tale of a woman trying to get over.23 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I was in retail for a while, years ago and managed 115000 sf. The loss by shoplifting is tremendous, and costs the honest patrons a fifty percent markup. The worse two episode was when I saw a suspect enter the first floor lift and a minute later arrive back down with an arm full of $250 suits. I gave chase and he strated throwing one at a time in to the bushes and I recovered all six sets saving Belks $1500 dollars. The other incident was finding a filthy pair of sneakers in a box that was supposedly be a $120 pair of NIkes. Ce bien. The culprit needed them more than we,I guess.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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I was in retail for a while, years ago and managed 115000 sf. The loss by shoplifting is tremendous, and costs the honest patrons a fifty percent markup. The worse two episode was when I saw a suspect enter the first floor lift and a minute later arrive back down with an arm full of $250 suits. I gave chase and he strated throwing one at a time in to the bushes and I recovered all six sets saving Belks $1500 dollars. The other incident was finding a filthy pair of sneakers in a box that was supposedly be a $120 pair of NIkes. Ce bien. The culprit needed them more than we,I guess.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the excellent review and stars. An armful of Armani suits? The store you worked for was lucky to have you. I had my own Mrs. Dumont. I was working in a fashionable clothing store, and this woman walked in with a dress she thought she was going to return. Guess again, sweetheart. The dress was a beautiful spaghetti strap, rhinestone number. She broke one of the straps, and I have no idea how you get pit stains on a dress like that. Jillian's dialogue was my response to her. I lied a little. I was no director, but she didn't know that, and it was Saks Fifth Avenue so she didn't put up too much of a fight but damn! the nerve of some people.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very good dialogue. I never once lost my place as Mrs. Dumont had a few facts of life explained to her. Jillian is very brave to refuse to accept the worn clothing Mrs. Dumont was trying to return, and she made very good sense explaining how it damages her business. Very nicely done. Best wishes in the dialogue contest.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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This is a very good dialogue. I never once lost my place as Mrs. Dumont had a few facts of life explained to her. Jillian is very brave to refuse to accept the worn clothing Mrs. Dumont was trying to return, and she made very good sense explaining how it damages her business. Very nicely done. Best wishes in the dialogue contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and stars. I'm pleased you enjoyed the dialogue-only aspect of this contest. This is a re-post. It was written some years ago. I'm happy it still resonates.
Sandollar
Comment from LJbutterfly
Hahaha! In this story, justice was served. You did an excellent job creating realistic dialogue that described a problem many stores deal with on a daily basis. Your story progressed to a very satisfying and humorous ending.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Hahaha! In this story, justice was served. You did an excellent job creating realistic dialogue that described a problem many stores deal with on a daily basis. Your story progressed to a very satisfying and humorous ending.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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I'm glad you enjoyed this story. I had fun writing it. Although it is a repost, it has been well received. Thank you for the review and the stars. I appreciate it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I enjoyed reading and unfortunately this sort of thing happens way too often. You did a wonderful job writing about it. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I enjoyed reading and unfortunately this sort of thing happens way too often. You did a wonderful job writing about it. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the fantastic review and stars. Although this story is a repost from many years ago, it was well-received on this site. I appreciate it. Thank you for the best wishes. Fraud is a problem for a lot of businesses, and there are not too many people like Jillian Atwood
Sandollar
Comment from Wayne Fowler
"You're lookin' at the supervisor, lady. Now git!"
Well written.
My mother-in-law is the queen of returning items, but she doesn't wear them first. I think it's just her way of having someone to talk to.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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"You're lookin' at the supervisor, lady. Now git!"
Well written.
My mother-in-law is the queen of returning items, but she doesn't wear them first. I think it's just her way of having someone to talk to.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the excellent review and stars. The stuff your mother-in-law does is minor b/c she doesn't wear the garments. Fraudsters better beware.
Sandollar
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is so credibly expressed in dialogue and is a very cathartic read when the owner takes the stand she does. The would-be fraudster with money becomes increasingly outmanoeuvred by the tenacity of her opponent. Thus honesty and justice prevail, sending out a strong message. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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This is so credibly expressed in dialogue and is a very cathartic read when the owner takes the stand she does. The would-be fraudster with money becomes increasingly outmanoeuvred by the tenacity of her opponent. Thus honesty and justice prevail, sending out a strong message. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much for the critique and rating. I always look forward to your insightful comments.
Sandollar
Comment from Wendy G
Good dialogue, very believable, and we can even tell the tone of voice being used by the precision of your clever writing. It's a fine entry for the contest, and I send you my best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Good dialogue, very believable, and we can even tell the tone of voice being used by the precision of your clever writing. It's a fine entry for the contest, and I send you my best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the fantastic review and star rating. This is a re-post. I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
Sandollar
Comment from sandragee
Mrs. Dumont is haughty and believes she can bully a 'mere' employee into doing her unlawful bidding. The other woman is businesslike and does not give in to Mrs. Dumont's bullying tactics. When denied a refund, Mrs. Dumont still tries to exert her superiority over the worker by asking to see her supervisor. Your dialogue is so convincing, I can picture Mrs. Dumont's jaw dropping when Jillian Atwater says, "I am the director of merchandising and owner of this establishment."
Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Mrs. Dumont is haughty and believes she can bully a 'mere' employee into doing her unlawful bidding. The other woman is businesslike and does not give in to Mrs. Dumont's bullying tactics. When denied a refund, Mrs. Dumont still tries to exert her superiority over the worker by asking to see her supervisor. Your dialogue is so convincing, I can picture Mrs. Dumont's jaw dropping when Jillian Atwater says, "I am the director of merchandising and owner of this establishment."
Well done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the five-star rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the back and forth between the two women. Mrs. Dumont won't be back there again.
Sandollar
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You're welcome.
Comment from jessizero
I have heard about people like this. I did enjoy reading your dialogue. I especially loved that last line! I was glad your customer got what she deserved. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2025
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I have heard about people like this. I did enjoy reading your dialogue. I especially loved that last line! I was glad your customer got what she deserved. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2025
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Thank you for your review and stars. Yes, some people out there feel they can get away with doing things like this, and they are so nasty to their employees. I felt Mrs. Dumont deserved what she got.
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
Hazle was an interesting character. If she was really o rich, why would she return the items? What a greedy person. It makes perfect sense that she could not return items to the store ever again. Jillian was also a great character keeping her cool the whole time. This was a nice back and forth. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2025
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Hazle was an interesting character. If she was really o rich, why would she return the items? What a greedy person. It makes perfect sense that she could not return items to the store ever again. Jillian was also a great character keeping her cool the whole time. This was a nice back and forth. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2025
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Thank you for your review and stars. Some people need to get over on their fellow man. Mrs. Dumont got what she deserved. Unfortunately, this is not the only store where she's done this.
Sandollar
