Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "The Perfect Story"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
38 total reviews
Comment from ladybird
Another well writen micro fiction.
I love the last line.
"Shut off the light. I like your story better." Nice romantic cameo.
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Another well writen micro fiction.
I love the last line.
"Shut off the light. I like your story better." Nice romantic cameo.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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ladybird,
Glad you enjoyed my little romance. Appreciate the comments. Carol
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You're welcome.
Comment from dmjones
Another good mini story. I think he was doing a little teasing there turning the light back on. Every word counted in this and that's how it's suppose to be. Regards, Donna
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Another good mini story. I think he was doing a little teasing there turning the light back on. Every word counted in this and that's how it's suppose to be. Regards, Donna
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Donna,
What would life be without a spark or two, right? Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from bayoupoet
Carol, this is a very provocative and interesting story that is well written in such a short story. I do enjoy reading for you.
sandra
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Carol, this is a very provocative and interesting story that is well written in such a short story. I do enjoy reading for you.
sandra
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Sandra,
A bit perky I suppose but meant for fun. Glad you enjoyed. Carol
Comment from RebelRose
Too bad you missed the contest. This is a good micro-story. Just like a man, get you all hot and bothered and then stop, ha ha. I guess he was just teasing her though when he turned the light back on.
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Too bad you missed the contest. This is a good micro-story. Just like a man, get you all hot and bothered and then stop, ha ha. I guess he was just teasing her though when he turned the light back on.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Paty,
I think it went right back off...Thanks so much. Carol
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Oh, I'm sure it did, after all that foreplay, ha ha.
Comment from misscookie
What a steamy piece of artwork and the poem kinda hot too.
this is another winner.
there iks a message within this write.
I read inbetween the lines and smile. I wonder how the other readers read it?
this is a good write.
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What a steamy piece of artwork and the poem kinda hot too.
this is another winner.
there iks a message within this write.
I read inbetween the lines and smile. I wonder how the other readers read it?
this is a good write.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Cookie,
Thanks so much for your generous encouragement. Smiles, Carol
Comment from flygirl254
Now that is cute and funny and quite sexy. I'm really, really glad now that you missed the entry - LOL again! Seriously, I do wish you had been able to enter, because you have another excellent piece. It's a wonderful love story, or lust story - either way it definitely works! Great job again! I don't have another six, but wish I did!
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Now that is cute and funny and quite sexy. I'm really, really glad now that you missed the entry - LOL again! Seriously, I do wish you had been able to enter, because you have another excellent piece. It's a wonderful love story, or lust story - either way it definitely works! Great job again! I don't have another six, but wish I did!
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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flygirl,
Thank you so much for your generous comments and the virtual stars...I truly appreciate every bit of it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
shame on you naughty writer teasing us with your purple prose style story. Sexy photo and story. Your story is excellent for the limited words. Wonderful descriptive writing:
A fire exploded inside me and I eagerly returned his kiss. Our breathing was ragged with desire.
Your writing is always awesome. Thanks for sharing. . .Melissa.
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Carol,
shame on you naughty writer teasing us with your purple prose style story. Sexy photo and story. Your story is excellent for the limited words. Wonderful descriptive writing:
A fire exploded inside me and I eagerly returned his kiss. Our breathing was ragged with desire.
Your writing is always awesome. Thanks for sharing. . .Melissa.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Melissa,
You started my "elderly" brain drifting this way when I right so what can I say...except thank you for giving me the courage to try just a little bit of your purple prose. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Belinda
Ha-ha, how funny. Or rather, not funny. The guy was teasing the woman's feelings. What's up, anyway? He senses that the woman's thoughts are elsewhere, or the problem is with him? Okay, you leave it to us. Interestingly humorous.
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Ha-ha, how funny. Or rather, not funny. The guy was teasing the woman's feelings. What's up, anyway? He senses that the woman's thoughts are elsewhere, or the problem is with him? Okay, you leave it to us. Interestingly humorous.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Belinda,
Just trying to set the mood or change it..not sure which. Thanks for reading and commenting. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ash Madox
Dang. Shame you missed the contest with this one, Carol. It's a great hot toddy with the imagery, sensuality and "happy" ending. *grin*. Great near entry, I enjoyed it. Wish I could write flash this well, but I'll enjoy yours instead from now on. Cheers. Ash.
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Dang. Shame you missed the contest with this one, Carol. It's a great hot toddy with the imagery, sensuality and "happy" ending. *grin*. Great near entry, I enjoyed it. Wish I could write flash this well, but I'll enjoy yours instead from now on. Cheers. Ash.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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Ash,
Thanks for the great encouragement. It's worth so much more when it comes from another great writer. Smiles, Carol
Comment from fionageorge
Carol, you wrote two stories, and still missed the prompt? I enjoyed this one too, although I imagine the mood would be gone if he implied he had finished! LOL:)
Thanks for sharing your flash fiction, and warmest regards, Marijke
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Carol, you wrote two stories, and still missed the prompt? I enjoyed this one too, although I imagine the mood would be gone if he implied he had finished! LOL:)
Thanks for sharing your flash fiction, and warmest regards, Marijke
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Marijke,
I didn't come back to the site in time to know it was posted. It filled up too fast. So I decided to write and post them anyway. Might even try the other three selections. It's kind of fun.
Smiles, Carol
