Daddy's Little Girl
Relationship between father and daughter15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I'm wiping tears from my eyes. My dad passed too early as well, though at 65 I had 14 more years than you did. I was "Daddy's little girl" and saying farewell to him is still one of my most painful memories. Thank God I believe we will be reunited! There are whisps of moments when I feel his presence. At seventy, I have lived five more years than he had. I think of that often.
Blessed verse!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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I'm wiping tears from my eyes. My dad passed too early as well, though at 65 I had 14 more years than you did. I was "Daddy's little girl" and saying farewell to him is still one of my most painful memories. Thank God I believe we will be reunited! There are whisps of moments when I feel his presence. At seventy, I have lived five more years than he had. I think of that often.
Blessed verse!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Sorry for your loss. Always hard to lose a parent at any age. Thanks for reading my portfolio. I appreciate it.
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One of my favorite things to do is just go to one portfolio and walk in
the garden of posts... It was so much fun!
Comment from tati
Thank you for sharing your lifetime story in a poem, gramalot. So lovely, yet touching, interesting, entertaining, educational and very inspirational as well. I sincerely love every word written, you've cleverly crafted the beautiful relationship between Daddy's Little Girl - what a beautiful title - and her father. The ending brought tears to my eyes.
Good luck in the contest. Warmest wishes,
tati, June 21, 2010
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2010
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Thank you for sharing your lifetime story in a poem, gramalot. So lovely, yet touching, interesting, entertaining, educational and very inspirational as well. I sincerely love every word written, you've cleverly crafted the beautiful relationship between Daddy's Little Girl - what a beautiful title - and her father. The ending brought tears to my eyes.
Good luck in the contest. Warmest wishes,
tati, June 21, 2010
Comment Written 21-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comments.
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I'm the one to thank you, my dear friend. Enjoy a nice day.
tati
Comment from FredCollingwood
The most important thing a father gives his daughter isn't a home, money, or food. He creates a blueprint for the type of man she will seek to be with. Another excellent poem!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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The most important thing a father gives his daughter isn't a home, money, or food. He creates a blueprint for the type of man she will seek to be with. Another excellent poem!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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thank you for your comments.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is really beautiful. You have depicted very clearly the relationship you enjoyed with your father before death took him away. well done
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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This is really beautiful. You have depicted very clearly the relationship you enjoyed with your father before death took him away. well done
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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thank you for your comments
Comment from jwlee211
a very touching poem. Each line is filled with emotion that reaches out and grabs the reader. Great work. I like your descriptions and the last part of the poem is truly the best
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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a very touching poem. Each line is filled with emotion that reaches out and grabs the reader. Great work. I like your descriptions and the last part of the poem is truly the best
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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thank you for your comments
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a lovely tribute
to a much-loved, much-missed
father - even when we are
expecting a loved-one to
go, we are never prepared
when the time comes, and
certainly not at such an early
age.
But as long as we have memories,
love lives on.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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What a lovely tribute
to a much-loved, much-missed
father - even when we are
expecting a loved-one to
go, we are never prepared
when the time comes, and
certainly not at such an early
age.
But as long as we have memories,
love lives on.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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thank you for your message and comments, as always.
Comment from Nicki_Mist
This was so well presented and filled with emotion and love and memories. It reminded me of my daddy and I sitting on the front porch swing and looking at the stars at night. Good luck in the contest and keep writing like you do.
Nicole
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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This was so well presented and filled with emotion and love and memories. It reminded me of my daddy and I sitting on the front porch swing and looking at the stars at night. Good luck in the contest and keep writing like you do.
Nicole
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your wonderful review. I'm glad to have reminded you of your daddy also.
Comment from adewpearl
I used to dance on my daddy's feet too - you are evoking lovely memories :-)
each memory you share is filled with great descriptive detail and celebratory joy :-)
The final section about his loss also reached out to me - this poem will resonate with so many readers. Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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I used to dance on my daddy's feet too - you are evoking lovely memories :-)
each memory you share is filled with great descriptive detail and celebratory joy :-)
The final section about his loss also reached out to me - this poem will resonate with so many readers. Brooke
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your lovely words and rating.
Comment from jmdg1954
Very nicely detailed of your lifetime, short as it may have been was full of loving memories. Having a daughter of 25 and who has been given away to her Prince Charming I can only hope she has felt the same with me as you did with yours. Excellent poem amd look forward to reading more of your writing....
John
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Very nicely detailed of your lifetime, short as it may have been was full of loving memories. Having a daughter of 25 and who has been given away to her Prince Charming I can only hope she has felt the same with me as you did with yours. Excellent poem amd look forward to reading more of your writing....
John
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind comments and 5 star rating.
Comment from Colin Douglas
A beautiful account of your loving relationship with your father.
"Perched precariously on Daddy's feet, we'd twirl furiously fast then dreamingly slow,
Swaying to the melodious Gershwin sounds." Wonderful!
I always cringe a litte when I feel things are being spelled out for me, instead of being left as subtle:
(Though we both knew that wasn't entirely true,) in both cases, stands powerfully on its own without the explanation beneath it.
Speaking of which, using that line one more time nearer the beginning of the poem might work quite well.
Here's another case of too much explanation: ( in case you hadn't already guessed, I didn't want him hovering so near.)
"But then and again, when I was hurt, or sad. or just plain mad, I would regress and become" "or just plain mad" is not the best choice of words. It sounds like your forcing more into the line. Try "...hurt or sad or angry..." Also, remove the period after "sad."
I would give this one four and a half stars, if I could. Keep writing.
Colin
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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A beautiful account of your loving relationship with your father.
"Perched precariously on Daddy's feet, we'd twirl furiously fast then dreamingly slow,
Swaying to the melodious Gershwin sounds." Wonderful!
I always cringe a litte when I feel things are being spelled out for me, instead of being left as subtle:
(Though we both knew that wasn't entirely true,) in both cases, stands powerfully on its own without the explanation beneath it.
Speaking of which, using that line one more time nearer the beginning of the poem might work quite well.
Here's another case of too much explanation: ( in case you hadn't already guessed, I didn't want him hovering so near.)
"But then and again, when I was hurt, or sad. or just plain mad, I would regress and become" "or just plain mad" is not the best choice of words. It sounds like your forcing more into the line. Try "...hurt or sad or angry..." Also, remove the period after "sad."
I would give this one four and a half stars, if I could. Keep writing.
Colin
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your critique and helpful remarks. I'll consider all your suggestions. The period after sad is a typo.
