Flash Fiction
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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Carol,
I don't know what inspired this story but I do like it. Though very short it says what it must and gets your point across very well. Knights in Satin is an apt title for a war where the women picked up the gauntlet. Well done. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Hi Carol,
I don't know what inspired this story but I do like it. Though very short it says what it must and gets your point across very well. Knights in Satin is an apt title for a war where the women picked up the gauntlet. Well done. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Chey,
Didn't have much time so I borrowed a few prompts from a contest and decided to write a story. Glad you enjoyed. Thank you as always. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Trybuck
I believe you like these flash fictions. You write them quite well and are enjoyable to read. As always very well done, Buck
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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I believe you like these flash fictions. You write them quite well and are enjoyable to read. As always very well done, Buck
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Buck,
Not my preference of writing, but when I only get thirty minutes or so to write or read, I must choose a shorter path..In time the renovtion will be complete and I can do what I really enjoy...write. Thanks--Smiles, Carol
Comment from eliz100
You do manage to tell powerful story in few words. I do not get who the knights in satin are. What comes to mind for me are the ladies of the night. I sure would like to know the answer.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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You do manage to tell powerful story in few words. I do not get who the knights in satin are. What comes to mind for me are the ladies of the night. I sure would like to know the answer.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Eliz,
Sorry I confused you..The Knights in Satin were the prim and proper ladies of the court, but when the battle required them to forget their manners and step up to the plate...they picked up the gauntlet and fought. Don't think their lace and satin dresses will ever be the same...lol Smiles, Carol
Comment from rama devi
Fine flash fiction write with good word economy and an inspired theme...Amazonian women win the battle. Good story-telling tone and pace. Vivid.
The closing line has a subtle twist
The roar of the meager crowd was strong.
Meager crowd...interesting...just a few brave ones saved the day.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Fine flash fiction write with good word economy and an inspired theme...Amazonian women win the battle. Good story-telling tone and pace. Vivid.
The closing line has a subtle twist
The roar of the meager crowd was strong.
Meager crowd...interesting...just a few brave ones saved the day.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Rama devi,
Like the shot heard around the world...Strength among the few.
Thanks jfor the generous and greatly appreciated review.
smiles, Carol
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Carol,
You do such a fabulous job with these short stories and this one is no exception. Your scene came to life as I could envision the deaths and the tattered threads of those still standing and the tear that the princess shed as she read the proclamation. A job well done. Thank you for sharing.
Becky
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Hi Carol,
You do such a fabulous job with these short stories and this one is no exception. Your scene came to life as I could envision the deaths and the tattered threads of those still standing and the tear that the princess shed as she read the proclamation. A job well done. Thank you for sharing.
Becky
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Becky,
Hurrah! I am thrilled that the short story came across showing the determination of those ladies of court and how they stepped up to the plate and fought the battle...Though their dresses will never be the same. lol Smiles, CArol
Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
your flash fiction story uses minimum number of words for maximum effect. You are really great at writing flash fiction. Your art work matched the theme. Excellent narrative, vivid imagery , great dialogue and very descriptive writing. The lines that stood out for me:
Princess Zorra gazed at her subjects. Her beleaguered heart filled with pride.
"You didn't hide in fear, but accepted the challenge. Standing beside fallen heroes, you fought. From this day forward, I pronounce you 'Knights in Satin, Freedom Fighters'.
I always look forward to reading you stories. Have a nice weekend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Carol,
your flash fiction story uses minimum number of words for maximum effect. You are really great at writing flash fiction. Your art work matched the theme. Excellent narrative, vivid imagery , great dialogue and very descriptive writing. The lines that stood out for me:
Princess Zorra gazed at her subjects. Her beleaguered heart filled with pride.
"You didn't hide in fear, but accepted the challenge. Standing beside fallen heroes, you fought. From this day forward, I pronounce you 'Knights in Satin, Freedom Fighters'.
I always look forward to reading you stories. Have a nice weekend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Melissa,
Thank you so much for all your kind thoughts and words. I always appreciate your comments. Smiles to you, CArol
Comment from Shirley McLain
I like your flash fiction. You caught my attention in the beginning and held it all the way through. You wrote with detail that brought pictures to my mind. Very good job.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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I like your flash fiction. You caught my attention in the beginning and held it all the way through. You wrote with detail that brought pictures to my mind. Very good job.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Texasgal,
I am thrilled you could picture the metamorphisis from lady in waiting to warrior in battle. Thank you...Carol
Comment from melyuki
such amazing imagery used here to relay the message to the reader.. A short and compelling story from the mouth of a genius with words. and dont you go disagreeing with me again. well written, emotional ride leading to devestation and tragedy, yet hope and pride.... great working.. hugs galore, mighty mel in armour... xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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such amazing imagery used here to relay the message to the reader.. A short and compelling story from the mouth of a genius with words. and dont you go disagreeing with me again. well written, emotional ride leading to devestation and tragedy, yet hope and pride.... great working.. hugs galore, mighty mel in armour... xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Sis,
Might mel in armour (is love on your mind?) because I know you'd never be able to be hidden in armor!!
smiles, Sis
Comment from patwannabe
Hi, Carol. This didn't strike me as one of your better works.
"The King and Queen lay in state." That means they were dead. How long ago did they die? It takes time to prepare for a funeral and they wouldn't leave the battle to prepare the bodies, would they? Why would the princess say the castle was safe if her parents were dead? She didn't mention them in her proclamation and maybe should have.
Last point, a meager crowd couldn't "roar", could they?
I'm not going to mark you down, because this is just the way I see it and I would never lower a rating because I didn't care for it.
I love your writings and read everything you give us. Take care of yourself and don't pay any attention to what I've said, OK? No errors as usual. pat
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Hi, Carol. This didn't strike me as one of your better works.
"The King and Queen lay in state." That means they were dead. How long ago did they die? It takes time to prepare for a funeral and they wouldn't leave the battle to prepare the bodies, would they? Why would the princess say the castle was safe if her parents were dead? She didn't mention them in her proclamation and maybe should have.
Last point, a meager crowd couldn't "roar", could they?
I'm not going to mark you down, because this is just the way I see it and I would never lower a rating because I didn't care for it.
I love your writings and read everything you give us. Take care of yourself and don't pay any attention to what I've said, OK? No errors as usual. pat
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Pat,
I guess I should have just said the King and Queen were dead, but lying in state seemed more fitting...Not much room to explain the fact that everyone was being killed and the Ladies of the Court donned in their fashionable satin dresses had picked up the gauntlet and fought the fight.
As for the roar of the meager crowd...like the sot heard around the world...it was more in their minds I guess. Success can be a deafening thrill.
thanks as always. I appreciate your viewpoint regardless if you agree with me or not...And you put it so kindly, how could I not say thank you.
Smiles to you, my friend...Carol
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Carol, I love you. pat
Comment from misscookie
This is some awesome artwork
It is perfect for your write.
I love the flows as read it I thought of Mighty men of Yesterday in King Arthur time.. This is a good write.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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This is some awesome artwork
It is perfect for your write.
I love the flows as read it I thought of Mighty men of Yesterday in King Arthur time.. This is a good write.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Cookie,
Yes, even the women can step up to the plate and defend what's theirs. Smiles to you, Carol
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Smiles back to you , take care.
