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Comment from RebelRose
This could be attributed to our women who are fighting beside the men in Iraq. They have definitely picked up the gauntlet and are fighying like men for our freedom. Good one.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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This could be attributed to our women who are fighting beside the men in Iraq. They have definitely picked up the gauntlet and are fighying like men for our freedom. Good one.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Patti,
Yes, I agree..They deserve as much credit as the men by their sides. Thank you so much...Carol
Comment from adewpearl
What a fascinating take on Knights in Satin -in just 110 words you depict a story of tragic warfare and overwhelming bravery by the citizenry of this kingdom. This is quite moving, especially considering the strict word limitations where you've made every word count. Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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What a fascinating take on Knights in Satin -in just 110 words you depict a story of tragic warfare and overwhelming bravery by the citizenry of this kingdom. This is quite moving, especially considering the strict word limitations where you've made every word count. Brooke
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Brooke,
Some have said that the meager crowd couldn't have roared..but I think the shot heard around the world defies that thought...In their minds, the cheers were deafening. Thank you...Carol
Comment from vandawalker
This is so different from your usual story lines. I really like the time and setting. I'd like to know more about the Princess and just what happened. Consider turning this into a longer writing. Good work!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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This is so different from your usual story lines. I really like the time and setting. I'd like to know more about the Princess and just what happened. Consider turning this into a longer writing. Good work!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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vandawalker,
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
Comment from RKagan
You have created a powerful sceene with trememdously well defined visuals. It is written so well that the reader is transported to the location. good job
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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You have created a powerful sceene with trememdously well defined visuals. It is written so well that the reader is transported to the location. good job
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Rkagan,
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
Comment from despiser
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Good story, picks up steam as it goes, though I'm not sure you can have a deafening roar from a meager crowd. Some suggestions:
The hard fought battle ended, cannons went silent and sporadic gunfire soon followed.
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Good story, picks up steam as it goes, though I'm not sure you can have a deafening roar from a meager crowd. Some suggestions:
The hard fought battle ended, cannons went silent and sporadic gunfire soon followed.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you...
Comment from dportwood
Begin Again,
I enjoyed reading this flash fiction. The writing is well done. I noticed no errors and applaud you for creating imagery in this short story to aid the reader.
Duane
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Begin Again,
I enjoyed reading this flash fiction. The writing is well done. I noticed no errors and applaud you for creating imagery in this short story to aid the reader.
Duane
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Duane,
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi Carol,
I read through your flash fiction hear, nice girl power, story. Good use of imagery to lay out the scene, I enjoyed reading this.
remaining knights; their dresses ripped and stained
(I think the semi-colon might need to be a comma)
--Turtle.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Hi Carol,
I read through your flash fiction hear, nice girl power, story. Good use of imagery to lay out the scene, I enjoyed reading this.
remaining knights; their dresses ripped and stained
(I think the semi-colon might need to be a comma)
--Turtle.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Turtle,
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
Comment from noland
Very interesting and well written---except for the last line. If the crowd was 'meager'(thin, lean, poor,), I doubt it could produce a deafening roar. Leave out 'meager' and it's fine.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Very interesting and well written---except for the last line. If the crowd was 'meager'(thin, lean, poor,), I doubt it could produce a deafening roar. Leave out 'meager' and it's fine.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written piece of flash fiction making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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A very well written piece of flash fiction making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Charlie,
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
