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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Legend of Lady Winter"A book full of story poems
6 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Mystery Writer,
your free style poem is very well written. You did a creative job. Effective use of personification, alliteration and metaphors. I especially enjoyed the lines: "gallant Prince Summer daily bade the beautiful blossoms to bloom the grass to breathe and sign." And the lines: "this spite, it angered Summer beyond repair and in his suffering and pain he created Spring and Autumn so he would never see Winter again." Your poem is an excellent entry in the Personification of Winter writing prompt contest. I wish you good luck in the contest and voting booth.
Missy.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Mystery Writer,
your free style poem is very well written. You did a creative job. Effective use of personification, alliteration and metaphors. I especially enjoyed the lines: "gallant Prince Summer daily bade the beautiful blossoms to bloom the grass to breathe and sign." And the lines: "this spite, it angered Summer beyond repair and in his suffering and pain he created Spring and Autumn so he would never see Winter again." Your poem is an excellent entry in the Personification of Winter writing prompt contest. I wish you good luck in the contest and voting booth.
Missy.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Hi Missy,
thank you so much for reviewing, for sharing your fave bits, for your luck wishes, and for the great rating! All very much appreciated :)
Comment from psalmist
An excellent entry for the contest. I enjoyed this beautiful story of the stormy lovers, and the creation of the seasons. A gorgeous myth with superb descriptions and contrasts of Summer and Winter.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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An excellent entry for the contest. I enjoyed this beautiful story of the stormy lovers, and the creation of the seasons. A gorgeous myth with superb descriptions and contrasts of Summer and Winter.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Hi psalmist,
thank you so much for your wonderful comments and thoughtful review :)
Comment from Jeanie
Wonderfully written. I hardly ever come across poems that include a sense of imagery, but this one did! Awesome job! keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Wonderfully written. I hardly ever come across poems that include a sense of imagery, but this one did! Awesome job! keep up the good work!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Hi Jeanie,
thank you so much for your kind review. I am touched by your lovely compliment - thank you! :)
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
A very creative poem which give Sun someone to love, but his love did not share Sun's loving and generous qualities. The rest of the difficulties shows how clever Sun can be.
A little error in this sentence
but alas, this Lady's power was great
as once there love was strong, [as once their love was strong]
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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A very creative poem which give Sun someone to love, but his love did not share Sun's loving and generous qualities. The rest of the difficulties shows how clever Sun can be.
A little error in this sentence
but alas, this Lady's power was great
as once there love was strong, [as once their love was strong]
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Hi Fiesty,
thank you so much for reviewing and for your kind comments.
Thanks also for the spag tip (now corrected) - it was very helpful! :)
Comment from Sharon Lee
I loved this story. The ending is so unique. Making spring and autumn so that summer and winter didn't have to meet. So refreshing to read. Nice job!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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I loved this story. The ending is so unique. Making spring and autumn so that summer and winter didn't have to meet. So refreshing to read. Nice job!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Hi Sharon Lee,
thank you so much for your enthusiatic and encouraging review!! :)
Comment from hfriscia
I enjoyed reading this work...The first stanza is awesome, it sets the tone of the peom and gets you interested from the start...
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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I enjoyed reading this work...The first stanza is awesome, it sets the tone of the peom and gets you interested from the start...
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for your reassuring and encouraging review :)
