A Christmas Miracle?
Another songbird hits the window29 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
A tragedy averted. The Lord does answer prayer. I'm upset about the bird, but so happy that it was not fatally injured. Reminds me of the gospel song, "His eye is on the sparrow / And I know He watches me."
A typo: should be "I almost begin to cry" in accordance with the present tense used throughout the story.
Inspirational write, dear Realist.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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A tragedy averted. The Lord does answer prayer. I'm upset about the bird, but so happy that it was not fatally injured. Reminds me of the gospel song, "His eye is on the sparrow / And I know He watches me."
A typo: should be "I almost begin to cry" in accordance with the present tense used throughout the story.
Inspirational write, dear Realist.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Hi Julia!! Thank you so much! I changed this and sure appreciate your help! I am so glad to hear that you enjoyed this one! Happy New Year to you also!! ") Susan
Comment from Judian James
Oh, this was very effective. It may have been short but you covered a lot of ground. Oh, a little miracle for you on Christmas. Definitely, keep the faith, right? excellent
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Oh, this was very effective. It may have been short but you covered a lot of ground. Oh, a little miracle for you on Christmas. Definitely, keep the faith, right? excellent
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Hi Judian! Thank you, and all I do is try...but fail all too often, that's for sure! It's great that you liked this Jude, I love hearing your thoughts! Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
your flash fiction story is very written and an enjoyable read. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. Excellent narrative and great descriptive writing. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. We use to have birds hitting our sliding glass windows. Since my Mom put in French doors that practice has stopped. I'm gald the bird flew away. But when I had a cat and the bird hit the kitty got a nice bird lunch. Have a lovely 2011, my friend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Susan,
your flash fiction story is very written and an enjoyable read. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. Excellent narrative and great descriptive writing. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. We use to have birds hitting our sliding glass windows. Since my Mom put in French doors that practice has stopped. I'm gald the bird flew away. But when I had a cat and the bird hit the kitty got a nice bird lunch. Have a lovely 2011, my friend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Hi again! I have realized that these are the males and they see their reflections, so try to "dive bomb" their rival. At least that is how it is in the spring...now in winter it may be the dark area of a window and they think it's a doorway to shelter? I put pans in front of it and they stay back now! Just hang pie tins, and let the breeze move them around...it works! ") thank you for this great review Melissa. It's awful too, when cats get involved...but it's natural. "/ Suse
Comment from anne1204
Lovely story of the power of prayer and God's love for his nature. The picture is perfect and I am glad the cardinal lived. Hope you had a very good Christmas dinner. I did we all ate tooooo much. Anne
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Lovely story of the power of prayer and God's love for his nature. The picture is perfect and I am glad the cardinal lived. Hope you had a very good Christmas dinner. I did we all ate tooooo much. Anne
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi again! Oh me too, he is still around, I am sure...there are three males, one of which sits and sort of eyeballs the window. So, he is probably remembering his close call, I hope! Poor thing, I hung pie tins in front of that window...it has helped so far! OH and we overate too...twice! ") I am turkeyed out until next November! Susan
Comment from c_lucas
That window seems to be bringing you more sorrow than pleasure. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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That window seems to be bringing you more sorrow than pleasure. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi Charlie! Well, I hung pie tins in front of it a few days ago...they swing in the wind and sort of scare the birds away from the feeders, but they will grow accustomed? And so far none of the others have flown into them again. It's awful. Thank you for another wonderful review! ") susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from JW
Cute story. Having lived in the country during my youth, I could easily picture something like this happening. You did a great job in telling this story.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Cute story. Having lived in the country during my youth, I could easily picture something like this happening. You did a great job in telling this story.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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HiJonathon! Thank you! I have hung pie tins in front of the window...so far so good! ") Poor birds, this is the second incident in as many weeks. So, hopefully , no more! Great to hear from you!! KEEP WARM!! Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Cardinals are such beautiful birds. I am gld it flew away and is all right. You really need to put something in your windows so the birds know it's there.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Cardinals are such beautiful birds. I am gld it flew away and is all right. You really need to put something in your windows so the birds know it's there.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi again! I did! I hung two pie tins up and they swing and keep them back! SO FAR! It sort of scares them at the feeders but I think they will stay to eat and not fly over into the window anymore? I hope...I am going to do this for the front window too, they are both big windows...but the feeders are in the back, so that is where they are the most. Thank you my friend! Great to see you like this! xoxo! Susan
Comment from BethShelby
I guess needed some time to get his head straight or then again, maybe it was a miracle and result of the prayer. Thanks for sharing this lovely little Christmas story. I haven't had one crash into my windows in a while.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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I guess needed some time to get his head straight or then again, maybe it was a miracle and result of the prayer. Thanks for sharing this lovely little Christmas story. I haven't had one crash into my windows in a while.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi Beth! Who knows...I try to give credit? lol...and I have hung pie tins up that swing in the breeze so , I hope it doesn't happen anymore. Poor things...I love them so. In the spring the males see their reflection and try to "fight" the rival. So, just hang piepans up! ") Great to hear from you and am so sorry for this late reply!! xoxo, Susan
Comment from Trybuck
I guess the little feller flew into a window. God does answer prayers even those for the wildlife. A great little story. Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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I guess the little feller flew into a window. God does answer prayers even those for the wildlife. A great little story. Well done, Buck
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi Buck! I hung pie tins up! They swing in the breeze and have helped so far! Thank you for reading this! SO glad you enjoyed it!! Susan
Comment from misscookie
Oh this is short but beautiful some times you don't need to write much to get a message across. I love don't die to day on Christmas for it's the day Jesus was born. Very emotional piece of word and He does answer prayers!!!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Oh this is short but beautiful some times you don't need to write much to get a message across. I love don't die to day on Christmas for it's the day Jesus was born. Very emotional piece of word and He does answer prayers!!!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi Cookie! Thanks! I knew you would like this one...I thought of you when writing it too. I was SOOo relieved that that bird was okay....whew. AND I did hang pie tins up too! IT has helped so far!! Susan
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Your very welcome, those tin cans are a great idea.
