The Flicker
contest entry39 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The writer here urges people to start questioning themselves and also politicians, those in power, who seem to have lost any sense of morality. The poem ends powerfully with a warning that the young will lack a sense of justice and morality if we as individuals d not change!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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The writer here urges people to start questioning themselves and also politicians, those in power, who seem to have lost any sense of morality. The poem ends powerfully with a warning that the young will lack a sense of justice and morality if we as individuals d not change!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem, Sarah.
Joan
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Seems to me this is a recipe but how can we get the ingredients in the hands of the next generation for where we are we have too many vipers, rattails and snakes to intercept the Good Word.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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Seems to me this is a recipe but how can we get the ingredients in the hands of the next generation for where we are we have too many vipers, rattails and snakes to intercept the Good Word.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your comments and for all the stars, Tom.
Joan
Comment from jmdg1954
I f do not know what the poetry style is called, but I found the use of the A-B-C
Very skillful in the growth of our children.
These words were strong:
Voracious vigorous violence
Cheers, John
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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I f do not know what the poetry style is called, but I found the use of the A-B-C
Very skillful in the growth of our children.
These words were strong:
Voracious vigorous violence
Cheers, John
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your comments, John. It is called an abecedarian poem.
Joan
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is tremendous in its words to the wise as well as to the uninspired who don't know yet how they feel inside about religion or politics or focus on things that really matter. I love the way you use the alphabet to tell us important things we ought to know deep inside about the world in general and specifically the violence in this world.
Thanks for telling it like it is!
Jesse
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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This is tremendous in its words to the wise as well as to the uninspired who don't know yet how they feel inside about religion or politics or focus on things that really matter. I love the way you use the alphabet to tell us important things we ought to know deep inside about the world in general and specifically the violence in this world.
Thanks for telling it like it is!
Jesse
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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Hi Jesse,
I am honored by your six-star review. Thanks.
Joan
Comment from Alan K Pease
The poem if good alphabet soup for the faith contest. and I hope with more work you do well before it has finished. You use one word that doesn't fit except that it begins with a V - ( Vivacious ). You made a real miss overwriting that verse. "Question" should probably be "Questioning"
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
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The poem if good alphabet soup for the faith contest. and I hope with more work you do well before it has finished. You use one word that doesn't fit except that it begins with a V - ( Vivacious ). You made a real miss overwriting that verse. "Question" should probably be "Questioning"
Comment Written 18-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
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Thanks for the honest review and editing help. I have mead some changes. Would voracious fit better.
dragonpoet
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written alphabet poem. It has a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
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This is a very well written alphabet poem. It has a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
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Thanks for the generous review,kind comments and good luck wishes.
dragonpoet
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YOu're welcome, D. Charlie
Comment from chita
You have a good flow with your poem and you are descriptive-you praise the Lord from A to Z and I find this amazing --I love where you write(Needing to understand why-Depend on the feeling)--well done.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
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You have a good flow with your poem and you are descriptive-you praise the Lord from A to Z and I find this amazing --I love where you write(Needing to understand why-Depend on the feeling)--well done.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I am glad you enjoyed it.
dragonpoet
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Excellent use of this form of Acrostic poem( I know it has a specific name, but it escapes me for the moment)
You manage to get your message across without having to force any of the lines. A message that I think we all hope for.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2011
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Excellent use of this form of Acrostic poem( I know it has a specific name, but it escapes me for the moment)
You manage to get your message across without having to force any of the lines. A message that I think we all hope for.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2011
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THanks for the kind review and encouraging remarks.
Joan
Comment from The Stranger
I am indeed in awe at the sheer thought that has gone into producing this, a format that requires wach line to begin with the alphabet in running order
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2011
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I am indeed in awe at the sheer thought that has gone into producing this, a format that requires wach line to begin with the alphabet in running order
Comment Written 16-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2011
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Thanks for thr generous review and nice comments.
dragonpoet
Comment from Ariandel
A very clever piece. I have not seen one with the whole Alphabet running down the side like this and every line having a new letter in proper sequence. I loved the line "Vivacious vigorous violence" it gives it really strong meaning.
Read aloud this poem sounds good too. A very apt topic for the times in which we now live. Cheers from Ariandel.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2011
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A very clever piece. I have not seen one with the whole Alphabet running down the side like this and every line having a new letter in proper sequence. I loved the line "Vivacious vigorous violence" it gives it really strong meaning.
Read aloud this poem sounds good too. A very apt topic for the times in which we now live. Cheers from Ariandel.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2011
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I am glad you enjoyed it.
dragonpoet
