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Comment from Jewell McChesney
What a poignant heartcry to a loving father, so full of abundant grace and mercy. So righteous and pure that anyone in his true presence would fall on their face and weep. So loving, so perfectly forgiving we would not deem ourselves worthy ....
my dear brother,this write is pure. It is.honest. it does sound alot like David.
What always strikes my heart when I read the Psalms, is, how after we see lament, we will directly see the beautiful deliverance of God's love and mercy
Keep praising. Keep believing. Keep humbling yourself in prayer.Seek his face ....
Now, I saw one teeny error after the phrase,
'When you started to speak'...
Also, what's up with the spacing? ;)
Blessings & prayers -
Jewell
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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What a poignant heartcry to a loving father, so full of abundant grace and mercy. So righteous and pure that anyone in his true presence would fall on their face and weep. So loving, so perfectly forgiving we would not deem ourselves worthy ....
my dear brother,this write is pure. It is.honest. it does sound alot like David.
What always strikes my heart when I read the Psalms, is, how after we see lament, we will directly see the beautiful deliverance of God's love and mercy
Keep praising. Keep believing. Keep humbling yourself in prayer.Seek his face ....
Now, I saw one teeny error after the phrase,
'When you started to speak'...
Also, what's up with the spacing? ;)
Blessings & prayers -
Jewell
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Thank you JJ....Spacing, lol, several attempt atbasic editor and advanced editor to no avail.Used to be simpler for some reason.
Your review is amazing and thank you for connecting with it...
Comment from sizemore0409
Hi BlueStubby! This is a wonderful little personal psalm, which could be just as validly and wholeheartedly sing by each and every one of us. The depth of contemplation and emotion, and insight into one's spiritual condition, and insight into the spiritual nature of one's relationships, is very refreshing, much like those refreshing waters you mention. I very much enjoyed reading this! Andy
just a couple little items you may wish to attend to:
1st line: 'desserts' should be 'deserts'
2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: 'have drank' should be 'have drunk'
For ease of reading, it's best to have a full space separating each paragraph; with the FanStory editor, one must actually put TWO full spaces between paragraphs, in order for the finished product to have ONE full space between paragraphs.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Hi BlueStubby! This is a wonderful little personal psalm, which could be just as validly and wholeheartedly sing by each and every one of us. The depth of contemplation and emotion, and insight into one's spiritual condition, and insight into the spiritual nature of one's relationships, is very refreshing, much like those refreshing waters you mention. I very much enjoyed reading this! Andy
just a couple little items you may wish to attend to:
1st line: 'desserts' should be 'deserts'
2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: 'have drank' should be 'have drunk'
For ease of reading, it's best to have a full space separating each paragraph; with the FanStory editor, one must actually put TWO full spaces between paragraphs, in order for the finished product to have ONE full space between paragraphs.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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oh, thank you so much...I tried the basic and advanced editor, lol, such a simple thing to double space but to no avail. Uhg. Thank you for the fine review, very helpful.
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Oops! Looks like the editor messed up ALL your spacing now! You definitely don't want it to be the way it is, currently. I will take this and fix it, then send you a repaired version in your private message box. Then you can take that version, go to the ADVANCED EDITOR, and delete the CURRENT VERSION. Then, paste the repaired version into the advanced editor, and save it. That should leave you with a visually-appealing posted writing! Check your private message box. :-) Andy
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sizemore0409... it is perfect and published ... thank you. This is a first for me on FB, what a gracious effort and I sincerely appreciate it... check out your handy work, lol.
Thanks again.
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Excellent! :-) Andy
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a very promising piece of work but it is impossible to read in one solid block. It is very heavy on the reader's eye. Double spacing is much kinder and seems to be the preferred format on here. I would be happy to review and up the grading once the presentation is sorted out x
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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This is a very promising piece of work but it is impossible to read in one solid block. It is very heavy on the reader's eye. Double spacing is much kinder and seems to be the preferred format on here. I would be happy to review and up the grading once the presentation is sorted out x
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Awesome suggestion, lol. thank you
