Spit, Gum and Shoe Laces
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Seeing Her As..."A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith
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Comment from Jewell McChesney
This write is greeting card perfect. I adore the comparisons to God's loveliness in creation.
It's a pleasure to see Him igniting a romantic spark in you.
I totally relate to your author's notes and remember your words awhile back, " Just start something." Good advice.
JJ
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2011
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This write is greeting card perfect. I adore the comparisons to God's loveliness in creation.
It's a pleasure to see Him igniting a romantic spark in you.
I totally relate to your author's notes and remember your words awhile back, " Just start something." Good advice.
JJ
Comment Written 05-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2011
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Jj, thank you for your encouragement, it is valuable coming from you... that you would even review these works... I have a pure respect for your giftings of talent, truelly none like you. God bless you. Again... I will be getting through more of YOUR work ASAP, it's always an honor to try and absorb something of them.
Comment from poetparman
Lovely tribute to a precious love. The only mistakes are in stanza 2 and 3. The word "Your" should be "you are" or "you're". Warmth of sunlight, sparkling crystals, life giving seawater, rains of love, all these descriptions are lovely to explain feelings. The last stanza puts tears in my eyes too. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2011
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Lovely tribute to a precious love. The only mistakes are in stanza 2 and 3. The word "Your" should be "you are" or "you're". Warmth of sunlight, sparkling crystals, life giving seawater, rains of love, all these descriptions are lovely to explain feelings. The last stanza puts tears in my eyes too. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2011
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thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece. The edits have been made and I again thank you.
Comment from mumsyone
Your poem is a beautiful tribute to the one you love. I like the picture of the once empty vase being filled with the heart's flowers, a bouquet brought about by that love.
your the sparkling crystals (you're)
your the life giving seawater (you're)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2011
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Your poem is a beautiful tribute to the one you love. I like the picture of the once empty vase being filled with the heart's flowers, a bouquet brought about by that love.
your the sparkling crystals (you're)
your the life giving seawater (you're)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2011
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thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece. The edits have been made and I again thank you.
Comment from SWANNY
Very nice poem. I enjoyed reading it. I noticed one thing that needs fixing:
your (S/B You`re) the life giving seawater
I have no other suggestions for improvemen. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2011
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Very nice poem. I enjoyed reading it. I noticed one thing that needs fixing:
your (S/B You`re) the life giving seawater
I have no other suggestions for improvemen. Nicely done.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2011
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thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece. The edits have been made and I again thank you.
