Spit, Gum and Shoe Laces
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Rough Stones Will Smooth"A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith
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Comment from Gungalo
that look to feed off my aching corps. (corpse)
while it is even a labor to breath? (breathe)
It is all I can do to lay (lie) here still,
This verse, your last, is an amazing portrait of one waiting to take a journey of faith:
This is my spirit's lament in the raw
and from my seed of faith I'll draw
the living waters that soak to revive,
and even in sorrow,
... I'll thank God I'm alive!
Just beautiful!!!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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that look to feed off my aching corps. (corpse)
while it is even a labor to breath? (breathe)
It is all I can do to lay (lie) here still,
This verse, your last, is an amazing portrait of one waiting to take a journey of faith:
This is my spirit's lament in the raw
and from my seed of faith I'll draw
the living waters that soak to revive,
and even in sorrow,
... I'll thank God I'm alive!
Just beautiful!!!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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I guess you can tell I need to check spelling asI type to fast and post to quickly... not a speller, more an uneducated feller...thanks for your corrections...nobody seems to pick up on the SPAG... i certainly don't.
THANKS G
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LOL it's the first thing I see. Now note, I said see. It doesn't effect the content and tone of the write but it does show if the poet cares about his/her presentation.
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done! and i again appreciate your effort, a true review. my weakness...usually spellcheck.
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My smile has grown and you are welcome, poet. I enjoyed reading your work and will return for more as you write!!
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thank you G, elated that you would do so, I will brouse, browse or browz, lol, through your works with great anticipation. sincerely, ty
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LOL, oh but you are just a riot!!! Nice to meet you Blue!!!
Comment from Jewell McChesney
I had to come back to this to grasp it fully.
You have taken heartache and created a visual image in the mind's eye.
I know this feeling too well, having disappointment rip my heart out and
stomp on it a few times.
Even time has not healed the latest hope for love. Abrupt endings without true closure feel just as you have expressed.
Clearly, you have exposed an open wound.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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I had to come back to this to grasp it fully.
You have taken heartache and created a visual image in the mind's eye.
I know this feeling too well, having disappointment rip my heart out and
stomp on it a few times.
Even time has not healed the latest hope for love. Abrupt endings without true closure feel just as you have expressed.
Clearly, you have exposed an open wound.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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thanks Jj, I hope all is well and your family is comforted amongst one another.
What you recieved from this piece... this came from outside of myself and I wrote it as it came,sorta Job'esque, and with the sincerest of compassion... I offer a thank you for your review, a legitimate sorrow for your personal loss as your brother'S
s journey BEGINS AND A PRAYER OF HEALING AND CLOSURE, THAT THE LOVE THAT gOD HASFOR YOU...GRETAER THAN YOU IMAGINED, PRESENTS ITSELF/HIMSELF AND LIFTS YOU UP JUST JUST AS YOU HAVE ALWAYS DESERVED.
God bless...
Wayne :)
Comment from Akarva
A poem with a wonderful moral to be heeded and followed by us all. While it is true that life is full of trials and tribulations,God does help us to move on if we have faith and trust in him. A must read poem for all.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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A poem with a wonderful moral to be heeded and followed by us all. While it is true that life is full of trials and tribulations,God does help us to move on if we have faith and trust in him. A must read poem for all.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
Comment from sizemore0409
Hi Blue-Stubby! What a beautiful and thought-provoking poem! Its message to the mind and heart, its sharp potent imagery and powerful-yet-gentle emotion all weave together wonderfully well, flowing very smoothly through a superb free verse. Great job! Andy
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi Blue-Stubby! What a beautiful and thought-provoking poem! Its message to the mind and heart, its sharp potent imagery and powerful-yet-gentle emotion all weave together wonderfully well, flowing very smoothly through a superb free verse. Great job! Andy
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Ok, coming from you, as I have been around for a while... this review is something of an honor. Someday I may promote more... and bump these up, lol. Thanks... Wayne a.k.a. WCFL
