Spit, Gum and Shoe Laces
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Neither Fore Or Neither Aft"A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith
15 total reviews
Comment from Galadriel's Lyric
Absolutey awesome and I wish I had a 6th star left to give you. I am feeling like I'm on this journey YOU are taking. Such breadth and depth of sight and sound comes through the writing you have graced us with. This is excellent:
I am cutting new waves,
into the unknown that I go
discovering fearlessly
atop the currents I flow.
Faith pure be my compass;
'tis love fueling my lantern's wick
Thanks for sharing your awesomeness!
~Kristie Jo
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Absolutey awesome and I wish I had a 6th star left to give you. I am feeling like I'm on this journey YOU are taking. Such breadth and depth of sight and sound comes through the writing you have graced us with. This is excellent:
I am cutting new waves,
into the unknown that I go
discovering fearlessly
atop the currents I flow.
Faith pure be my compass;
'tis love fueling my lantern's wick
Thanks for sharing your awesomeness!
~Kristie Jo
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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silly Kristie Jo makeing me blush, lol... seriously, what a wonderful review... you made my day and its only noon'ish.
Thank you, I shall wander into your corner of the world and peek through the window of your work, again thanks much!!!
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You may not want to do that as it is much darker than your own. You've been warned :-)
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oh Kristie Jo, as many words flow my knowledge doth grow, of your's I've no fear, your warning doth endear. :)
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Come now, my friend
Join me 'round the bend,
Your thoughts can enter mine,
As we pour the wine,
And raise a glass for two,
Knowing me, as you.
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"Strolling Smartly With Reciprocity" â??Tis a journey of like thought
where wisdom is often taught,
when willing toward the face
the journey our minds embrace.
Shoulders aside in our stance
As weâ??re anxious for the chance
to learn of what we yet know
Eating of fruits we did not sow,
â?¦ into forests of knowledge burning a glow.
Comment from sweetsilversong
This was so well written, with a wonderful flow throughout.
A fantastic offering and one I enjoyed very much.
Best wishes.
SSS
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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This was so well written, with a wonderful flow throughout.
A fantastic offering and one I enjoyed very much.
Best wishes.
SSS
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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thank you much for your time and effort to review this piece.
Comment from Jewell McChesney
I read this through several times. With each viewing, a different stanza would stand freely om its own merit and when merged told the story of one avid sailor on the journey of life and love. Penning hid thoughts at bay, this emerges from beneath the mattress of this dedicated man.
I have to say, this is my favorite stanza:
But alas, I am adrift in still waters, On a vessel I be neither fore or neither aft, Wet finger waiting on the winds of change as I shall pack securely my life's new raft.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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I read this through several times. With each viewing, a different stanza would stand freely om its own merit and when merged told the story of one avid sailor on the journey of life and love. Penning hid thoughts at bay, this emerges from beneath the mattress of this dedicated man.
I have to say, this is my favorite stanza:
But alas, I am adrift in still waters, On a vessel I be neither fore or neither aft, Wet finger waiting on the winds of change as I shall pack securely my life's new raft.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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oh Jj... i am so glad you reviewed it, it is really an honor to have you even read it... so very cool, this was a different style and source... but i really liked it.
Thank you very much... blessings and as you keep stock piling your work and your going to be burried,lol
Comment from stephybs
A very nice and lovely worded piece here, has nice and enlightening verse. Very well written and well thought through great color choice and art work to compliment. Stephy
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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A very nice and lovely worded piece here, has nice and enlightening verse. Very well written and well thought through great color choice and art work to compliment. Stephy
Comment Written 31-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
Comment from moyramouse
Your author's notes were a delight - self depreciation and a good sense of humour lies here! So it was with your poem,at parts of which I laughed out loud 'Oh woe is me/that should not one see/me making my supper/of kidney bean' I nearly fell off my chair and then imagining you looking for a coin for the meter!
Who I am is none to(too) close' and latern's(lantern's) were two spags.
Loved the 'Wet finger waiting on the winds of change' - great alliteration and a marvellous image again. Loved 'I mustn't forget /my paddle/ pickled eggs/ paper/ or pen' I giggled and giggled about the pickled eggs. There's no chance of you stagnating. Can't wait to read your next post as I thoroughly enjoyed this one. xmouse
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Your author's notes were a delight - self depreciation and a good sense of humour lies here! So it was with your poem,at parts of which I laughed out loud 'Oh woe is me/that should not one see/me making my supper/of kidney bean' I nearly fell off my chair and then imagining you looking for a coin for the meter!
Who I am is none to(too) close' and latern's(lantern's) were two spags.
Loved the 'Wet finger waiting on the winds of change' - great alliteration and a marvellous image again. Loved 'I mustn't forget /my paddle/ pickled eggs/ paper/ or pen' I giggled and giggled about the pickled eggs. There's no chance of you stagnating. Can't wait to read your next post as I thoroughly enjoyed this one. xmouse
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Blue, truthfully I am not sure what I think of this one. It has moments of brilliance and then just seems to go on and on. You write honestly which is always a plkus. Hope that you will continue to write. This one is good. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Hi Blue, truthfully I am not sure what I think of this one. It has moments of brilliance and then just seems to go on and on. You write honestly which is always a plkus. Hope that you will continue to write. This one is good. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 30-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
Comment from WRITER1
Starting new adventures is always daunting. So many times it is the best thing a person can do. This is a poem that requires a good amount of thought, very well done.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Starting new adventures is always daunting. So many times it is the best thing a person can do. This is a poem that requires a good amount of thought, very well done.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
Comment from adewpearl
meter/unseat her - great rhyming pair
What a thoughtful commentary on the poetic process, my friend.
I like the extended ship metaphor. Lots to ponder on.
Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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meter/unseat her - great rhyming pair
What a thoughtful commentary on the poetic process, my friend.
I like the extended ship metaphor. Lots to ponder on.
Brooke
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
Comment from mumsyone
As poets and writers, we all flounder at times, wondering which direction we are really taking, if any at all. The trick is to just keep going, write whatever comes, and then work with it and mold it to your heart's content.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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As poets and writers, we all flounder at times, wondering which direction we are really taking, if any at all. The trick is to just keep going, write whatever comes, and then work with it and mold it to your heart's content.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
Comment from dr rupali
I think this is all about the journey of life.The poet is trying to find out his destination thus, he is still sailing wandering his inner peace.Skillful use of complex words to express the complexity of thoughts inside the writer which he himself sometimes found difficult to understand .
I really like the end which shows his belief in himself,fearlessly facing the coming challenges in life.
Its pleasure to read such a kind of abstract poetry.
Really commendable!
Thank you so much for sharing.
Rupali.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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I think this is all about the journey of life.The poet is trying to find out his destination thus, he is still sailing wandering his inner peace.Skillful use of complex words to express the complexity of thoughts inside the writer which he himself sometimes found difficult to understand .
I really like the end which shows his belief in himself,fearlessly facing the coming challenges in life.
Its pleasure to read such a kind of abstract poetry.
Really commendable!
Thank you so much for sharing.
Rupali.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
