Spit, Gum and Shoe Laces
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "The Artificial Aristocrats"A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith
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Comment from dbmccarter
I really like this. Do I need to read the previous chapters to get the whole story or is each one a complete story by itself. Was suspenseful.
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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I really like this. Do I need to read the previous chapters to get the whole story or is each one a complete story by itself. Was suspenseful.
Comment Written 07-May-2011
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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The book is a collection of poems. Read all you are in the mood for, lol.
Thank you for the time and effort to review.
Comment from WilliamDeen
A very well written piece. It really flowed good while reading. It has good rhymes and I loved the medieval feel of it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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A very well written piece. It really flowed good while reading. It has good rhymes and I loved the medieval feel of it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-May-2011
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece, glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from LKM2009
Very nice. A pleasure to read and leaving me with a want for more. Your words and the way you placed them brought this to life for me. Clear imagery.
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Very nice. A pleasure to read and leaving me with a want for more. Your words and the way you placed them brought this to life for me. Clear imagery.
Comment Written 06-May-2011
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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thank you for your effort and time to review this piece.
Comment from The Stranger
this is very befitting, it describes exactly how my personal feelings relate to "the royal family", an over pivileged, disfunctional family who will stoop to any level in order to cling onto what little repect still exists for them
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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this is very befitting, it describes exactly how my personal feelings relate to "the royal family", an over pivileged, disfunctional family who will stoop to any level in order to cling onto what little repect still exists for them
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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thank you for your effort and time to review this piece.
Comment from fairydancer
Ooh, I do like this! Just sorry I haven't got any sixes left.
The language and word play is darkly elegant and rich.
The rhyming and cadence are extremely good, making it read aloud extremely well.
Excellent write - Cally :)
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Ooh, I do like this! Just sorry I haven't got any sixes left.
The language and word play is darkly elegant and rich.
The rhyming and cadence are extremely good, making it read aloud extremely well.
Excellent write - Cally :)
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Thank you for your time and effort in reviewing this piece. The thought of a six is quite nice and I am happy to see that you took such a close look and received the perspective that I was going for. very cool.
Comment from Lizizme
Very good cadence and word usage. This is one of my favorite lines "Rum river currents from posh uptown taverns" great description. I don't really know where I can help it be improved. Draws a picture and carries you through it. Nice job!
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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Very good cadence and word usage. This is one of my favorite lines "Rum river currents from posh uptown taverns" great description. I don't really know where I can help it be improved. Draws a picture and carries you through it. Nice job!
Comment Written 04-May-2011
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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Thank you so much for your effort and time to review this piece.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the dealings that take place behind closed doors. full of imagery, i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the dealings that take place behind closed doors. full of imagery, i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 04-May-2011
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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Thank you so much for your effort and time to review this piece.
Comment from alawyer
Well written but not sure that I should need such a lengthy explanation to understand your symbolism and artistic points. Also - I can be a bit harsh on the upper classes but your poem seems to detract the humanity of these beings and stereotype them and their lives and motives. Perhaps you don't mean to be this way, but I almost felt badly for the targets of your poem.
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reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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Well written but not sure that I should need such a lengthy explanation to understand your symbolism and artistic points. Also - I can be a bit harsh on the upper classes but your poem seems to detract the humanity of these beings and stereotype them and their lives and motives. Perhaps you don't mean to be this way, but I almost felt badly for the targets of your poem.
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Comment Written 04-May-2011
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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*The targets were the wealthy, and the thieves were just that, thieves... cultured and cunning and though they dispersed a portion of the plunder to the settlement of less fortunate, the focus was solely insight on the band of criminals of the late 1700's to the early 1800's in Europe as poetic expression manufactured from imagination, not humanitarian classification of wealth or lack there of. I think there is a chance that you misunderstood the piece, or missed the author notes, though I thank you so very much for your time and effort in reviewing this piece.
Comment from Mara del Mar
An excellent poem in couplets and very fluently. Message that denounces the hypocrisy of people who hide their dirty life crimes behind a facade of dignity. They pretend to be something they are not. I liked the image of the shoe shining above and below broken. Great work, congratulations!
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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An excellent poem in couplets and very fluently. Message that denounces the hypocrisy of people who hide their dirty life crimes behind a facade of dignity. They pretend to be something they are not. I liked the image of the shoe shining above and below broken. Great work, congratulations!
Comment Written 04-May-2011
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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Thank you so much for your effort and time to review this piece.
Comment from Janie King
I certainly couldn't write something like this. You have a grand command of words and how to place them, one of the awesome abilities that a poet has, that I admire. The picture is grand and the color scheme and yellow lettering works very nicely. Good job. God bless.
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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I certainly couldn't write something like this. You have a grand command of words and how to place them, one of the awesome abilities that a poet has, that I admire. The picture is grand and the color scheme and yellow lettering works very nicely. Good job. God bless.
Comment Written 04-May-2011
reply by the author on 04-May-2011
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Thank you so much for your effort and time to review this piece.
