Finger Nails
Gotta get clean, get all the mean...beneath54 total reviews
Comment from mumanoon
It's not often that one reads a piece of writing as wacky and as full of gory descriptions as 'Finger Nails,' it definitely deserved first place in the Horror story contest! At times the images you created made me cringe! When I'm reading and have such a strong reaction it's a sign of an excellently written story. Really like your style of writing! Best regards, E
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012
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It's not often that one reads a piece of writing as wacky and as full of gory descriptions as 'Finger Nails,' it definitely deserved first place in the Horror story contest! At times the images you created made me cringe! When I'm reading and have such a strong reaction it's a sign of an excellently written story. Really like your style of writing! Best regards, E
Comment Written 15-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012
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Thanks, I havn't had a review for that in a while. Greatly recieved. :)
Comment from Kokopelli
Congrats on winning the contest. This was well deserved. I found the story very - ah - interesting. Yah, that's a word that might describe your piece.
I must admit - I found it very compelling. It grabbed me right at the beginning, and I couldn't let go until I got to the end. That is great writing. Your pace was perfect. I felt the heat as I read, growing - stronger - and more intense. Perfect story - and production.
Thanks
Until
David
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2011
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Congrats on winning the contest. This was well deserved. I found the story very - ah - interesting. Yah, that's a word that might describe your piece.
I must admit - I found it very compelling. It grabbed me right at the beginning, and I couldn't let go until I got to the end. That is great writing. Your pace was perfect. I felt the heat as I read, growing - stronger - and more intense. Perfect story - and production.
Thanks
Until
David
Comment Written 02-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2011
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thank you kindly David
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Well, definitely a horrific read. Fingernails are my sore spot. can't see them ripped or torn in movies or real life. This was hard for me to read. I like the diary usage as the catalyst in which we see the man's insanity. The whole story was well written as far as him thinking back to hurting her, but he loves his parents. It's all strange. I am just left with a couple questions: Why would the maniac have such a loving relationship with his parents? Seems there would be trouble if he were mental. And two, what is the significance of the fingernails? I would have liked there to be some reason he would be soooo obsessed with cleaning that part of his body after murdering his wife.
Congrats on the award and accomplishments!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2011
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Well, definitely a horrific read. Fingernails are my sore spot. can't see them ripped or torn in movies or real life. This was hard for me to read. I like the diary usage as the catalyst in which we see the man's insanity. The whole story was well written as far as him thinking back to hurting her, but he loves his parents. It's all strange. I am just left with a couple questions: Why would the maniac have such a loving relationship with his parents? Seems there would be trouble if he were mental. And two, what is the significance of the fingernails? I would have liked there to be some reason he would be soooo obsessed with cleaning that part of his body after murdering his wife.
Congrats on the award and accomplishments!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2011
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Hey! As for your first question, I just wanted to intersperse his insanity with doses of sanity, and the parents, was just a way to do this. This may or may not be realistic, but when has horror got to be realistic? a long as it entertains, I think is most important. Your second question is explained in the last diary entry, " I left her in the mud, with the dead staring eyes and the scratches on her thighs." He was cleaning off her skin. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Keri353
Love the title.
??? Since they moved to the Florida their life has just gotten
Is that Florida USA? If it is, one would just say "since they moved to Florida"
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but its all go in work at the moment
And perhaps that is "but its all go into work at the moment"
Now that I have finished.... y i k e s ! That was just creepy and a well deserved win, no doubt! Well done indeed. I have a very vivid imagination and could actually see all that happening. I hope you keep writing so I can get off the edge of my seat! Loved it!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Love the title.
??? Since they moved to the Florida their life has just gotten
Is that Florida USA? If it is, one would just say "since they moved to Florida"
???
but its all go in work at the moment
And perhaps that is "but its all go into work at the moment"
Now that I have finished.... y i k e s ! That was just creepy and a well deserved win, no doubt! Well done indeed. I have a very vivid imagination and could actually see all that happening. I hope you keep writing so I can get off the edge of my seat! Loved it!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Thank you kindly. Your right about the Florida one, I had noticed that but not got round to changing. The second SPAG is OK but could maybe change to 'at work at the moment. Thanks again.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
It was twisted and captivated the reader's attention, and desire to know what would happen next. I suspect you are a 'Criminal Minds' watcher. Enjoyed and thanks for writing.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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It was twisted and captivated the reader's attention, and desire to know what would happen next. I suspect you are a 'Criminal Minds' watcher. Enjoyed and thanks for writing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Thank you kindly :)
Comment from IndianaIrish
Herb, this is a wonderful sicko horror story and I loved it. I liked the diary format,the repetition of his actions and words, and I was captivated by his progression into insanity. Best of luck in the contest. It totally creeped me out..and I loved it.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Herb, this is a wonderful sicko horror story and I loved it. I liked the diary format,the repetition of his actions and words, and I was captivated by his progression into insanity. Best of luck in the contest. It totally creeped me out..and I loved it.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Thank you kindly
Comment from MacNizzle
The fact that I had to literally look away from the page while reading this should tell you how horrifying it is (a compliment in this case:). I like how you have interspersed diary entries in with real time, and how you escalate the action from just scrubbing to chewing off his chicken fingers. Good luck in the contest! M:)
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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The fact that I had to literally look away from the page while reading this should tell you how horrifying it is (a compliment in this case:). I like how you have interspersed diary entries in with real time, and how you escalate the action from just scrubbing to chewing off his chicken fingers. Good luck in the contest! M:)
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Thank you kindly Nizz. x :)
Comment from Recovered
WOW - that was thoroughly disgusting... not in a bad way - but ucky... I love horror/thrillers and I felt every pull and tear of the nails and the blood and gore - I felt like it was happening right in front of me... wow - great story.
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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WOW - that was thoroughly disgusting... not in a bad way - but ucky... I love horror/thrillers and I felt every pull and tear of the nails and the blood and gore - I felt like it was happening right in front of me... wow - great story.
Comment Written 24-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Thank you kindly
Comment from WilliamDeen
Nice haunting work with the "wash and scrub, wash and scrub." Good imagery of an obsessive compulsive. Good horror imagery (chewed at his fingers). Good job.
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Nice haunting work with the "wash and scrub, wash and scrub." Good imagery of an obsessive compulsive. Good horror imagery (chewed at his fingers). Good job.
Comment Written 24-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Thank you kindly.
Comment from animatqua
This is excellent horror. The juxtaposition of madness to madness was very well done. Each heightened the horror of the other, making the entire story exponentially more intense.
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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This is excellent horror. The juxtaposition of madness to madness was very well done. Each heightened the horror of the other, making the entire story exponentially more intense.
Comment Written 24-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Thank you Kindly.