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Pueblo Summer

Haiku

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Comment from Mari_
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I loved it!

You took me to the village in Pueblo. It's summer there and I'm walking down the dusty road. I look to the left and there is...

"Water in cisterns "

Great job. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
    Thank you. I don't normally write in Haiku format. Quite a challenge.
Comment from anne1204
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Nicely done in three simple lines. You created good imagery in the short 3 lines. These short poem can be quite a challenge. You met the challenge. Well done. Anne

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
    Thank you.
Comment from chita
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You have a good flow with your Haiku-you are descriptive and write about how water affects the elderly--I like where you write(Gourd squash growing in the sun) a well penned write-great job.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
    Thank you. Haiku has its challenges, which are interesting to work out.