Comment from Winslow

Excellent

Dear Dallas,

Good rhyming and suspense in this poem. However, I want to know why it was the Gate of Hell? Did she know what happened there? Did her mother forbid her to enter? It generated a lot of questions for me.

Warm regards,

Winslow

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2011

Dead silence fell...Could her mother have been mudered?

Comment from Terror2s

Excellent

Your rhymes were fluid and unforced. You did a nice job of telling this from the perspective a child. Good luck in the contest. T2

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011

thanks for the review.

Comment from Kuruti

Excellent

Wow. You take an x-rated theme and make it general exhibition so cleverly. I applaud your ability to tackle such a taboo subject so beautifully and concisely.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011

Thank you.

Comment from ernesto escarro

Excellent

Behind Door to Hell

The poem is worth telling about
the girl who experienced
extreme hurt feelings
when her mother was taken away.

Door to hell where dead has to pass
for her last time, is called Door to Hell
for it burns image of living for the child.

This is another piece to commend.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011

Thank you for the review.

reply by ernesto escarro on 19-Jun-2011

Okay. You worth it. God bless.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing about the little girl who heard her mother's entertaining and her death, good luck in this contest

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011

Thank you.