Pappa's Memories and Ramblings
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Poems of Prayer and Hope"Poems, Rants, Short Stories and Ramblings
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Comment from Jean Lutz
Quite a collection you have of life experiences. Please don't keep them all in your head. Put pen to paper so that others will learn from your past. I guess my favorite is the one about the scars. Remember Jesus kept the nail scars in his hands but had forgiveness in His heart.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2011
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Quite a collection you have of life experiences. Please don't keep them all in your head. Put pen to paper so that others will learn from your past. I guess my favorite is the one about the scars. Remember Jesus kept the nail scars in his hands but had forgiveness in His heart.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2011
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Thanks and Blessings for the review.
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Thanks and Blessings for the review.
Comment from Judian James
I never give less than five stars BUT I'm always honest.
For 2cents, this is a LOT of reading and reviewing that you are expecting, especially when each piece is so different. There are meter issues here and there ... too much repetition, here and there ... All in all, I like your work. I'm not crazy about near-rhymes used quite so much and I do think with aabb rhyming patterns, meter is important, especially if the piece is short. Tons, and tons of repetition is not my thing. I find it distracting rather than effective. And that is my 2cents worth!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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I never give less than five stars BUT I'm always honest.
For 2cents, this is a LOT of reading and reviewing that you are expecting, especially when each piece is so different. There are meter issues here and there ... too much repetition, here and there ... All in all, I like your work. I'm not crazy about near-rhymes used quite so much and I do think with aabb rhyming patterns, meter is important, especially if the piece is short. Tons, and tons of repetition is not my thing. I find it distracting rather than effective. And that is my 2cents worth!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the honest review.
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I would appreciate your input on my piece that you reviewed. Usually when awarding less than five stars, the reviewer offers constructive criticism. Thanks so much. Jude
Comment from TRACEYMARIE
This is awesome writing and talent. what i like the most about it is the truth behind your verses!! i love to write myself about todays reality in this crazy world!! love it!!:)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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This is awesome writing and talent. what i like the most about it is the truth behind your verses!! i love to write myself about todays reality in this crazy world!! love it!!:)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you!
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your very welcome!
Comment from missyvamp
"for or hate" doesn't make sense to me, sorry...I think the 'or' needs to go...and 'sole' in this sense should be 'soul.' Overall, a lovely poem! Enjoyed the message of peace! That said, not all music is hate-filled...check out Everlast's "What It's Like" or at least look at the lyrics...bad language in it, but the message IS one of peace and not judging ppl...
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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"for or hate" doesn't make sense to me, sorry...I think the 'or' needs to go...and 'sole' in this sense should be 'soul.' Overall, a lovely poem! Enjoyed the message of peace! That said, not all music is hate-filled...check out Everlast's "What It's Like" or at least look at the lyrics...bad language in it, but the message IS one of peace and not judging ppl...
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you - I meant to spell out 'our hate"
