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There is No Place Like Home

A story about the importance of family

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Comment from nancyjam
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Your poem has a lot of potential - it
is full of wonderful images and emotion, but there
seems to be no pattern - you go from childhood to
adult feelings, to childhood again - then your sisters kids etc.
Actually you might have two or three poems possible here.
Lots of material to work with. I like the details you included too.


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Comment from Galactia
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very long poem that need fixing.
Poem on it's own needs editing but not to bad.

But it's not a 5'7'5 poem

A 5'7'5
poem must have, and can not exceed 3 lines.

displayed as follows...

Line 1: 5 syllables
line 2: 7 syllables
Line 3: 5 syllables

and should not be confused syllables to words.

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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