Monster Spray
A girl learns to deal with monsters in the night.29 total reviews
Comment from Leen1
Oh, how I did enjoy this, as it did bring back memories of my "monster days." So, well written it immediately takes you right into the youngsters world of uncertainty. I did think you really nailed the stark sense of reality after the can was found on the shelf. Great story! Loved it!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Oh, how I did enjoy this, as it did bring back memories of my "monster days." So, well written it immediately takes you right into the youngsters world of uncertainty. I did think you really nailed the stark sense of reality after the can was found on the shelf. Great story! Loved it!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2012
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from robyn corum
I did enjoy reading your delightful tale. It was told with good imagery and from a great perspective, but I had trouble with the number of times you swapped verb tenses. Revise?
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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I did enjoy reading your delightful tale. It was told with good imagery and from a great perspective, but I had trouble with the number of times you swapped verb tenses. Revise?
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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I was attempting to tell the story by the child's point of view, first in the past tense. Then speaking as she is telling the story the way my kids speck to me, such as, "Then she says blah
blah blah..." And I say "Blah blah blah." And I thank you for taking the time to point out my errors.... I know tenses can be tricky (especially for me.)
Comment from adewpearl
I love the scenarios that would pop into your head at bedtime after reading these scary stories.
What a fun story - I love resourceful parents who can figure out just how to reassure their children in a clever way :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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I love the scenarios that would pop into your head at bedtime after reading these scary stories.
What a fun story - I love resourceful parents who can figure out just how to reassure their children in a clever way :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind words and review.
Comment from Chris Davis
I remember being a teenager and reading books like The Amityville Horror and Stephen King books and scaring myself so bad I couldn't come out from under my covers once the lights were out. What was I thinking?!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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I remember being a teenager and reading books like The Amityville Horror and Stephen King books and scaring myself so bad I couldn't come out from under my covers once the lights were out. What was I thinking?!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2012
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I think we've all been there. Thanks for the review.
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You're welcome... :)
Comment from Rob Caudle
Made me laugh! Well penned you have done a very nice job with this every child should have parents who are so kind it was sorta like finding out about Santa Claus but their deception was far more personal well done.
Rob
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Made me laugh! Well penned you have done a very nice job with this every child should have parents who are so kind it was sorta like finding out about Santa Claus but their deception was far more personal well done.
Rob
Comment Written 01-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thanks for the review and kind words.
Comment from Gungalo
This was so cool. What a way to save face and be bravely not afraid of monsters any more. Too bad she had to find the other label but at least it was later on in life.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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This was so cool. What a way to save face and be bravely not afraid of monsters any more. Too bad she had to find the other label but at least it was later on in life.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Glad you liked it. thanks for the review.
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My pleasure.
Comment from 4hisglory
Very good story! I like how she felt she was undetected but through the conversation of the parents you knew, they knew. Very clever. Also the ending was great with Old Blue paying $10 for the can of spray. I did enjoy it very much and I'm sure it will give parents an idea on how to help their children sleep. I also hope it will encourage them to prevent their children from seeing those horrible movies. Blessings LaVonne
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Very good story! I like how she felt she was undetected but through the conversation of the parents you knew, they knew. Very clever. Also the ending was great with Old Blue paying $10 for the can of spray. I did enjoy it very much and I'm sure it will give parents an idea on how to help their children sleep. I also hope it will encourage them to prevent their children from seeing those horrible movies. Blessings LaVonne
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Yes, she "spied" on us often. thanks for the review.
Comment from Espresso momma
This was so adorable. I can't imagine my mother doing anything like that. She was so strict and wouldn't allow any of us kids to speak of monsters or the like. So this was fun to read. Thanks.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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This was so adorable. I can't imagine my mother doing anything like that. She was so strict and wouldn't allow any of us kids to speak of monsters or the like. So this was fun to read. Thanks.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Monster spray. Oh, yes. Used it with our kids, too. In their case, it was spray cologne. A weapon that belongs in every parent's arsenal. Well written from a child's POV. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Monster spray. Oh, yes. Used it with our kids, too. In their case, it was spray cologne. A weapon that belongs in every parent's arsenal. Well written from a child's POV. :) Nancy
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from WLHall
Oh, how funny. The extent our parents will go for us to make us feel safe is undeniable a proof of their love. Too bad it embarrassed you. This was a great read, I enjoyed it a lot. Glad y'all got a lot of money for it! Didn't see any spags, great job!
Wanda
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Oh, how funny. The extent our parents will go for us to make us feel safe is undeniable a proof of their love. Too bad it embarrassed you. This was a great read, I enjoyed it a lot. Glad y'all got a lot of money for it! Didn't see any spags, great job!
Wanda
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind words and review.
