Comment from mr elis

Good

This is a wonderful fiction paper,the character went through so many stages,he remembers actors and actress of yesterday and today, even mentioned a female-who was the second on board,in the last election.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012

Thanks!

Comment from ScarletClearwater

Excellent

This was an absorbing read. Great job with the use of descriptives, as they lent to great imagery, which made the piece flow nicely.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012

Thanks!

Comment from Crystal Carey

Excellent

LOL It was very funny. I did enjoy reading this chapter. Although I wish it had been broken up a bit more, maybe separate the end into a new chapter.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012

I think you're right. I do have difficulty choosing chapter breaks. Thanks, I'll work on it!

Comment from Misrael

Good

For the life of me I could not figure out what this was all about. It was very confusing and I was never able to figure it out. If you could help me understand what it is about it would help. Keep on writing.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012

Wondering if you read all four chapters?