Nothing Good
Ambulance in the middle of the night76 total reviews
Comment from damommy
This is writing at its best. A wonderful story about gawking, curious neighbors. Those of us who have been on the receiving end tend to not intrude on other's tragedy.
You take the reader right into the middle of things, almost like being there. I loved the phrases, such as 'Maybe I just want a smoke. Ever think of that, Sigmund?'
and 'When I felt as thin and transparent as Saran Wrap.' That's exactly the way it feels.
Good part where Dick backed Jack off the marital fighting gossip.
I enjoyed this immensely! (Out of sixes)
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This is writing at its best. A wonderful story about gawking, curious neighbors. Those of us who have been on the receiving end tend to not intrude on other's tragedy.
You take the reader right into the middle of things, almost like being there. I loved the phrases, such as 'Maybe I just want a smoke. Ever think of that, Sigmund?'
and 'When I felt as thin and transparent as Saran Wrap.' That's exactly the way it feels.
Good part where Dick backed Jack off the marital fighting gossip.
I enjoyed this immensely! (Out of sixes)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
Comment from smbau
Great writing skills, your characters become alive and named within a dialogue. Liked your authors note. You have described a neighborhood awaken by sirens at night due to an emergency at Mr. Fatal's home. Consider listing your story's characters with their roles under authors notes for your readers.
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Great writing skills, your characters become alive and named within a dialogue. Liked your authors note. You have described a neighborhood awaken by sirens at night due to an emergency at Mr. Fatal's home. Consider listing your story's characters with their roles under authors notes for your readers.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
Comment from Ulla
Hi Lee, this is a poignant story, and it brings the point home in your curiously subdued way. The feelings are understated which have the effect of making them stand so much starker. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
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Hi Lee, this is a poignant story, and it brings the point home in your curiously subdued way. The feelings are understated which have the effect of making them stand so much starker. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
Comment from MJ McIntire
I thought this was excellent and gave it 6 stars. Reason being, besides being really well written and I could visualize the whole scene, is that it struck a personal chord with me.
A time in my life your story was mine, but, I was the neighbor being watched and it was an awful feeling.
Took some time, but, I will be sharing my experience in hopes to help others soon.
EXCELLENT!!!!!
MJ
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I thought this was excellent and gave it 6 stars. Reason being, besides being really well written and I could visualize the whole scene, is that it struck a personal chord with me.
A time in my life your story was mine, but, I was the neighbor being watched and it was an awful feeling.
Took some time, but, I will be sharing my experience in hopes to help others soon.
EXCELLENT!!!!!
MJ
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Lee. This is profound. The writing is so good I've had an emotional response to it unlike most when I read other works. No one wants to deal with this kind of thing but, the way you have handled it lets this reader know there is a sensitive man underneath all the bluster of other things written. Extreme! good luck. xoxo deborah
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Lee. This is profound. The writing is so good I've had an emotional response to it unlike most when I read other works. No one wants to deal with this kind of thing but, the way you have handled it lets this reader know there is a sensitive man underneath all the bluster of other things written. Extreme! good luck. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
Comment from trumby
My mother died in 2013, so I can relate to this story. Very well written and shows a lot of feeling.
Points a finger firmly at the ghoulish nature of your prying neighbors.
I was pleased to notice the character development of "bagging her clothes for goodwill".
Dad never felt comfortable with doing that with Mum's clothes, instead of that, my new wife inherited them.
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My mother died in 2013, so I can relate to this story. Very well written and shows a lot of feeling.
Points a finger firmly at the ghoulish nature of your prying neighbors.
I was pleased to notice the character development of "bagging her clothes for goodwill".
Dad never felt comfortable with doing that with Mum's clothes, instead of that, my new wife inherited them.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
Comment from LIJ Red
This story is too familiar. It stings. Excellent writing, Lee, and excellent people-observing along with it. I hate the sound of emergency vehicles. Someone's world has taken a blow.
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This story is too familiar. It stings. Excellent writing, Lee, and excellent people-observing along with it. I hate the sound of emergency vehicles. Someone's world has taken a blow.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
Comment from royowen
An excellent post Lee, intuitive, perceptive, even when these things have confronted one, it's still like familiar odours, returning one back to long forgotten incidents in one's life. Why is it we humans are so voyeuristic? When the flashing emergency vehicle and police lights are present, and a traffic jam is caused by gawking motorists, who never actually know what's wrong! Well done, a most familiar feel to this, Lee, blessings, Roy
Typo : Familiar (semifor) Semaphore?
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An excellent post Lee, intuitive, perceptive, even when these things have confronted one, it's still like familiar odours, returning one back to long forgotten incidents in one's life. Why is it we humans are so voyeuristic? When the flashing emergency vehicle and police lights are present, and a traffic jam is caused by gawking motorists, who never actually know what's wrong! Well done, a most familiar feel to this, Lee, blessings, Roy
Typo : Familiar (semifor) Semaphore?
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
Comment from frogbook
Wow this was very engaging and while true, was so sad. It's a natural curiosity I guess but some are so overboard about it. When we have been through the situation, it brings our experience back every time. Well written and poignant.
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Wow this was very engaging and while true, was so sad. It's a natural curiosity I guess but some are so overboard about it. When we have been through the situation, it brings our experience back every time. Well written and poignant.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
Comment from Thesis
This is a good perspective and commentary on people, who are drawn for many different reasons, to want to watch tragedy and pain.
I enjoyed how you wrote the story showing Sam's perspective on the neighbors and their reasons for being outside, plus the internal demons he had, trying to reason why he had the feelings he did. The ending was quick, but powerful.
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This is a good perspective and commentary on people, who are drawn for many different reasons, to want to watch tragedy and pain.
I enjoyed how you wrote the story showing Sam's perspective on the neighbors and their reasons for being outside, plus the internal demons he had, trying to reason why he had the feelings he did. The ending was quick, but powerful.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
