Nothing Good
Ambulance in the middle of the night76 total reviews
Comment from Hamiel
Great. I love to see full moon as what you use in the story. So meaningful and full of expression like your story. Thank you for this sharing. Always keep up the good work.
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Great. I love to see full moon as what you use in the story. So meaningful and full of expression like your story. Thank you for this sharing. Always keep up the good work.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
Comment from doggymad
This was a superb piece of writing and thoroughly deserving of the All Time Best.
The images and language make the story very vivid for the reader. It is easy to see how the entire scenario would bring back memories of all the times you were in the centre of it all.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
Freda
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This was a superb piece of writing and thoroughly deserving of the All Time Best.
The images and language make the story very vivid for the reader. It is easy to see how the entire scenario would bring back memories of all the times you were in the centre of it all.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
Comment from bluedragon776
Loved your writing and think it is pretty professional. Easy and entertaining reading. Jack is an interesting and slightly irritating character. At least the experience encouraged that narrator to action with moving on and clearing out mother's things.
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Loved your writing and think it is pretty professional. Easy and entertaining reading. Jack is an interesting and slightly irritating character. At least the experience encouraged that narrator to action with moving on and clearing out mother's things.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
This was excellent and beautifully written, I found it to be instantly compelling and absorbing, with real emotion, feeling and pathos. As always you write to the highest professional standard. Very well done much enjoyed and kindest regards, Meia x
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This was excellent and beautifully written, I found it to be instantly compelling and absorbing, with real emotion, feeling and pathos. As always you write to the highest professional standard. Very well done much enjoyed and kindest regards, Meia x
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
Comment from Brett Matthew West
An ambulance in the middle of the night is, as you stated, never good.
Losing a mother is never an easy situation to be in. When to "bag up her clothes" is always a tough question.
Seems you were re-inspired by your neighbor's illness to repost this well written story.
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An ambulance in the middle of the night is, as you stated, never good.
Losing a mother is never an easy situation to be in. When to "bag up her clothes" is always a tough question.
Seems you were re-inspired by your neighbor's illness to repost this well written story.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
Comment from jennfoxdanger
I can't say enough about your beautiful gift of description, dialogue and setting. I am new to this and prefer reading non-fiction. Even though there is an undertone of death and grieving, you evoke a sincerity that I find most admirable. I wish I could slow down and smell the roses as you do in your stories. Good job
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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I can't say enough about your beautiful gift of description, dialogue and setting. I am new to this and prefer reading non-fiction. Even though there is an undertone of death and grieving, you evoke a sincerity that I find most admirable. I wish I could slow down and smell the roses as you do in your stories. Good job
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you, jennfoxdanger. I'm always particularly grateful when a readers pick out a piece from the past. And I'm delighted by you assessment of my writings. Thank you so much. Peace, Lee
Comment from Titanx9
An exceptionally moving and riveting story. You will obviously be blessed for your commitment to your beloved mother. I like your choice of words and the forced dialogue between you and Jack and the inner dialogue/struggle going on internally. Excellent read!
reply by the author on 04-May-2012
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An exceptionally moving and riveting story. You will obviously be blessed for your commitment to your beloved mother. I like your choice of words and the forced dialogue between you and Jack and the inner dialogue/struggle going on internally. Excellent read!
Comment Written 03-May-2012
reply by the author on 04-May-2012
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Thank you, Titan. I'm delighted you enjoyed my story. Peace, Lee
Comment from Starlit Ink
So sad, that it was your mom. The dialogue and suspense was well written and provided imagery to take your reader there. Accepting the inevitable was a nice ending.
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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So sad, that it was your mom. The dialogue and suspense was well written and provided imagery to take your reader there. Accepting the inevitable was a nice ending.
Comment Written 02-May-2012
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Thank you, Starlit. I'm delighted you enjoyed my story. Peace, Lee
Comment from Narvik
Dang, Lee, it doesn't get any better than this. Seriously, man. This is right up there with professional writers and annihilates many of them. Hope you're moving beyond just getting brownie points from Fanstory. You got bigger things in your future, my friend.
As for the story itself, you got every word perfectly thought out and perfectly placed. The best stories start with a hook that leaves the reader hungry for more. You definitely accomplished that here. Both the internal and external dialogue were awesome. Imagery and description totally vivid. Good observation of the neighborhood voyeurism.
Hell, I feel humbled even reviewing this work. Almost like it's too sacred to comment on. I am speechless, my friend.
~ CJ
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Dang, Lee, it doesn't get any better than this. Seriously, man. This is right up there with professional writers and annihilates many of them. Hope you're moving beyond just getting brownie points from Fanstory. You got bigger things in your future, my friend.
As for the story itself, you got every word perfectly thought out and perfectly placed. The best stories start with a hook that leaves the reader hungry for more. You definitely accomplished that here. Both the internal and external dialogue were awesome. Imagery and description totally vivid. Good observation of the neighborhood voyeurism.
Hell, I feel humbled even reviewing this work. Almost like it's too sacred to comment on. I am speechless, my friend.
~ CJ
Comment Written 02-May-2012
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Thank you so much, Jack. Sometimes I get lucky. I really appreciate your comments, friend. I'd love to persue publishing opportunities, but I'm so intimidated by the hoops they make you jump through. I'm a writer, not a clerk. I don't have the head for their details. Anyway, Erik, thank you so much. Your approval means a lot to me. Peace, Lee
Comment from BethShelby
Excellent writing Lee. I can see how that ambulance in the night brought back a lot of bad memories. Every mother should be fortunate enough to have a son like you who really cares and it willing to do what is necessary even when the mind has slipped away. The decision to make the first move to get on with your life is real progress. I'm glad you shucked the cigerettes as part of the moving on package. This is a great contest entry for this particular contest.
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Excellent writing Lee. I can see how that ambulance in the night brought back a lot of bad memories. Every mother should be fortunate enough to have a son like you who really cares and it willing to do what is necessary even when the mind has slipped away. The decision to make the first move to get on with your life is real progress. I'm glad you shucked the cigerettes as part of the moving on package. This is a great contest entry for this particular contest.
Comment Written 01-May-2012
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Beth, thank you so much for this generous review. You are one of the few who have taken this whole ride with me. I appreciate your kind thoughts. Peace, Lee
