Comment from christianpowers

Excellent

Hi,

Well, I'm shocked at the direction this one is taking. Quite a compelling story you got here.

I only found one spag issue...

>>>I wasn't sure what was happening. I was a na¢¿½eve and I really didn't know what was happening. <<< This is redundant and there's something strange going on with the characters in the word 'naive'.

Thanks for posting this work. I hope I helped.

Christian

 Comment Written 03-May-2012

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reply by the author on 04-May-2012

Thank you corrections made.

Comment from Misrael

Excellent

I admire you for being honest about that sort of thing and I can imagine what sort of threats he threw at you. Good read and good job.

 Comment Written 03-May-2012

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reply by the author on 03-May-2012

thank you for your kind review

Comment from MumEsGirl

Excellent

A very well told story. What happened to the camraderie that is supposed to exist in the forces.
I feel sorry for what happened to Billings, but to try and take the heat off by hanging another is a just cruel

hugs
kate

 Comment Written 03-May-2012

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reply by the author on 03-May-2012

thanks for the kind review.