Do you feel me and my love ?
Love comes out into the heart20 total reviews
Comment from Uma Prosad Das
Full of mistakes, it needs to be corrected and edited.
i) love your think (ii) Describe the matter of sadness her life. (iii) I was very triad (iv) calling in fild ..etc..etc.
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Full of mistakes, it needs to be corrected and edited.
i) love your think (ii) Describe the matter of sadness her life. (iii) I was very triad (iv) calling in fild ..etc..etc.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
Comment from Artasylum
WOW... what an undertaking this is... a 5/7/5 contest on steroids. great job and mind boggling. Good luck in your contest... Looking forward to more from you. Yours, diana
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WOW... what an undertaking this is... a 5/7/5 contest on steroids. great job and mind boggling. Good luck in your contest... Looking forward to more from you. Yours, diana
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
Comment from Kathleen S.
Very shocking and sad poem. I love how it starts and I am in grief at the end. Very moving and interesting to read. This poem tells a long story, that leads to a very unexpected end.
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Very shocking and sad poem. I love how it starts and I am in grief at the end. Very moving and interesting to read. This poem tells a long story, that leads to a very unexpected end.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
Comment from kiwijenny
This doesn't look like 5 7 5 poetry....5 syllables on the first line
7 syllables on the second line and 5 syllables on the third line.
Since this is a contest maybe you can redo this
Good thoughts
God bless
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This doesn't look like 5 7 5 poetry....5 syllables on the first line
7 syllables on the second line and 5 syllables on the third line.
Since this is a contest maybe you can redo this
Good thoughts
God bless
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
Comment from tfawcus
A poignant expression of love and for the need for love that we all innately share. Perhaps you could get it transferred to a Love Poem contest, as it doesn't conform to the contest rules for a 5-7-5.
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A poignant expression of love and for the need for love that we all innately share. Perhaps you could get it transferred to a Love Poem contest, as it doesn't conform to the contest rules for a 5-7-5.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks love is love; the poet shares his diverse experience of feeling and appreciation of love in these thirteen translated poems have free flow of thoughts exceptional; khoob valo; typos and grammatical mistakes excused; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR (6-STAR)
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This speaks love is love; the poet shares his diverse experience of feeling and appreciation of love in these thirteen translated poems have free flow of thoughts exceptional; khoob valo; typos and grammatical mistakes excused; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR (6-STAR)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
Comment from Nebukadneser
I absolutely love your enthusiasm in writing. You have so many beautiful and pure thoughts that I have to rate you high. As your English improves so will your ability to express yourself. I read between the lines when I read your wonderful work and wish I could read your work in your own language. Keep it up. I love your work my great man of enthusiasm.
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I absolutely love your enthusiasm in writing. You have so many beautiful and pure thoughts that I have to rate you high. As your English improves so will your ability to express yourself. I read between the lines when I read your wonderful work and wish I could read your work in your own language. Keep it up. I love your work my great man of enthusiasm.
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Dear friends,
thanks for your valuable comment.
Comment from Slythytove2
I started reading this piece and came to the conclusion that you do not speak English. The sentiment is sweet and seems to be honest but I can not ignore the missing words and typos and incorrect usage. It makes critiquing impossible. I hate to have to do it but in all fairness to the other writers I can not hold you to a different standard even though the thoughts are beautiful. I have to be able to understand what you've written and I can't.
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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2012
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I started reading this piece and came to the conclusion that you do not speak English. The sentiment is sweet and seems to be honest but I can not ignore the missing words and typos and incorrect usage. It makes critiquing impossible. I hate to have to do it but in all fairness to the other writers I can not hold you to a different standard even though the thoughts are beautiful. I have to be able to understand what you've written and I can't.
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2012
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Dear friends,
I hope you are reads my poetry book.Actually i want
to crate some poetry of free concept.And i feels i am right.But
you want improvement in my writing.Sorry , But i tring to your
expected thought.Thank you for your greatest comment.
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Perhaps if I could read your book in your language I would, what is the English title?
Comment from rydere
This poem got excited to me? Do you feel my love I got tears coming down my face maybe it's emotion counting, but I love them all and it makes me feel happy, sad, mad, but keep up the great work. Love it!!!!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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This poem got excited to me? Do you feel my love I got tears coming down my face maybe it's emotion counting, but I love them all and it makes me feel happy, sad, mad, but keep up the great work. Love it!!!!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Dear friends,
Thanking you for his commitment.Happy Christmas.
ashimpandit
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You are wecolme.
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Hi ashimpandit. I have read all your poetry so far.
I read many times to understand what you say.
I think I see poet trying to get out of your head.
I see your picture as your words trying to grow.
I hope to read more of your words soon.
Happy holidays for Christmas. Eric. from Yorkshire.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012
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Hi ashimpandit. I have read all your poetry so far.
I read many times to understand what you say.
I think I see poet trying to get out of your head.
I see your picture as your words trying to grow.
I hope to read more of your words soon.
Happy holidays for Christmas. Eric. from Yorkshire.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2012
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Dear friends,
I have received your comment . I know,what you say.
actually some useful words was mysterious .But that is necessary
for his poetic ideas.Sorry, you can not understand.So thanking you for his marble comment.
