Martha
contest for Lady in Black15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Whoa. Chilling! This was not at all heading where I expected ~ good for you and your original twists and turns! If I'm looking at the reviews right, I think one more review might boost you into the "Recognized" category. Where this should be!
You're a double threat! Poetry and prose!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Whoa. Chilling! This was not at all heading where I expected ~ good for you and your original twists and turns! If I'm looking at the reviews right, I think one more review might boost you into the "Recognized" category. Where this should be!
You're a double threat! Poetry and prose!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much for the boost? and your comments. I?m better at poetry than prose but I do dabble writing stories ? once in awhile. This was definitely a fun write. Glad you enjoyed the teust ending.
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I try prose now and then...an occasional "Flash" -- but, like you, my preferred genre is poetry.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Jerri
I love this story and in my case, I voted it as the winner. I loved the closing lines and the black aviator glasses pulled down to the tip of her nose as she blows a kiss for good luck. Superb. Best wishes in the contest
Bear
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Hey there Jerri
I love this story and in my case, I voted it as the winner. I loved the closing lines and the black aviator glasses pulled down to the tip of her nose as she blows a kiss for good luck. Superb. Best wishes in the contest
Bear
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Bear, thank you so much for your wonderful comments. I so appreciate the vote. Thanks, it's greatly appreciated. Jerri
Comment from Curtis Hatch
You have written a charming story and told it vividly. You brought me along so skillfully my mind could see the curtains, the seats, Martha in her aviator glasses, etc. The story is done well...I felt sad at the end. Curtis
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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You have written a charming story and told it vividly. You brought me along so skillfully my mind could see the curtains, the seats, Martha in her aviator glasses, etc. The story is done well...I felt sad at the end. Curtis
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Curtis, thank you for your heartfelt comments and review.
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your well written poem. It was long, but not too long. It flows well and your story is deeply emotional. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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I enjoyed reading your well written poem. It was long, but not too long. It flows well and your story is deeply emotional. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thank you angel. You first said thanks for my poem, but it was a story. Maybe that was a typo. I'm happy you enjoyed it in any case. Hopefully it wasn't too long, as it needed time for the story to unfold. Thanks for you best wishes for the contest.
Comment from HeartsDesire2012
Your description of the beauty and character of your beloved Martha and the theater, inspires a new desire in the arts. The artwork selection for this piece is absolutely stunning. I also enjoyed your author notes. "A love that never ends in the mystic world of theater." Poetic. Good luck in the contest. Thank you so much for sharing. Be encouraged.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012
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Your description of the beauty and character of your beloved Martha and the theater, inspires a new desire in the arts. The artwork selection for this piece is absolutely stunning. I also enjoyed your author notes. "A love that never ends in the mystic world of theater." Poetic. Good luck in the contest. Thank you so much for sharing. Be encouraged.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and rating. It is greatly appreciated.
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You are more than welcome.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello gramalot8. I really love this story. It has a wonderful edge to it and is believable. I can easily imagine a woman who loved the theater and building from her grandfather, sitting in the seats wearing black. I thought this was a delightfully realistic read. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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Hello gramalot8. I really love this story. It has a wonderful edge to it and is believable. I can easily imagine a woman who loved the theater and building from her grandfather, sitting in the seats wearing black. I thought this was a delightfully realistic read. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 12-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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Kiwi, thank you so much for your wonderful comments and review. It is always appreciated. Jerri
Comment from cabinwriter
This is nice, memoir story, but it needs more description of Martha - what she looked like, how she moved and talked, what was she like with people. What made the narrator fall in love with her? Why is her presence so easily sensed in the theater even after her death?
Watch out for repeat phrases, such as, "If you look closely." Good luck!
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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This is nice, memoir story, but it needs more description of Martha - what she looked like, how she moved and talked, what was she like with people. What made the narrator fall in love with her? Why is her presence so easily sensed in the theater even after her death?
Watch out for repeat phrases, such as, "If you look closely." Good luck!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your comments and suggestions.
Comment from FREE-ONE
This is the story that never ends...the haunting of a memory and the tragedy that created it...I found this a very interesting write...the sheer magnitude that surrounds the theater and the many tales of how they are often haunted by spirits that refuse to leave their last curtain call....You keep her spirit alive in your words and the ending is superb...I enjoyed it tremendously...FREE-ONE
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
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This is the story that never ends...the haunting of a memory and the tragedy that created it...I found this a very interesting write...the sheer magnitude that surrounds the theater and the many tales of how they are often haunted by spirits that refuse to leave their last curtain call....You keep her spirit alive in your words and the ending is superb...I enjoyed it tremendously...FREE-ONE
Comment Written 01-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
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Free-One, thank you so much for your wonderful comments and review. I so happy you enjoyed it so much.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is really a lovely and touching story, well written without any spag that I noticed. You did a fine job of matching a story to that photo!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This is really a lovely and touching story, well written without any spag that I noticed. You did a fine job of matching a story to that photo!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Phyllis, thank you so much for your comments and review. I had the idea from the prompt and found the picture and got inspiration from there. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from visionary1234
What a beautiful tribue to the mysteriously lovely Martha ... a story well told ... and one of life's tragedies, yes? Just one typo in "rehersal" should be "rehearsal". I love the haunting image of the art work!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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What a beautiful tribue to the mysteriously lovely Martha ... a story well told ... and one of life's tragedies, yes? Just one typo in "rehersal" should be "rehearsal". I love the haunting image of the art work!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you. I kept looking at rehearsal and thinking it looked wrong. Glad that you enjoyed the story. Thank you for your comments and review.
