Hedgerow Friends
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Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well told story in aabbcc sestets. It tells how lonely it is without friends because of discrimination. It also tells about how good it is to have friends and how easy it was to make friends if you really get to know a person.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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This is a well told story in aabbcc sestets. It tells how lonely it is without friends because of discrimination. It also tells about how good it is to have friends and how easy it was to make friends if you really get to know a person.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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Thank you so very much, Dragonpoet, for this wonderful review of my Hedgerow Story. you went a long way back to find this one! I am really pleased you enjoyed it and thank you so much for the 6 stars!
xsx Sandra
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You are so very welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from Janet7053
Lovely rhyming pattern. Perfect for little ears, (and big ones too.)
Perhaps a stanza is in order explaining why everyone everywhere thought he was bad. I may have missed something in previous posts.
Children's poetry is filled with imagery. Their quirks, their worries, all came through in this poem.
Millie went to him, and held out her hand,
saying, "Come on now, Whiffy, let's see you stand."
This line gave me a picture of sweet, little Millie.
I'd like to read some more of your poems to my first and second graders.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Lovely rhyming pattern. Perfect for little ears, (and big ones too.)
Perhaps a stanza is in order explaining why everyone everywhere thought he was bad. I may have missed something in previous posts.
Children's poetry is filled with imagery. Their quirks, their worries, all came through in this poem.
Millie went to him, and held out her hand,
saying, "Come on now, Whiffy, let's see you stand."
This line gave me a picture of sweet, little Millie.
I'd like to read some more of your poems to my first and second graders.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Goodness, Janet, thank you for looking my Hedgerow Capers gang up. Yes, Whiffy was in another story earlier, he was a naughty weasel in that one, but the gang gave him another chance in this story. You are very welcome to read them. There are about 25 stories on here, including a Christmas one which I've written in both rhyme and prose. That one has sold like hot cakes! I'm really pleased you liked it.
I have just seen that you only joined us in January, welcome to Fanstory, you will love it on here. :)Sandra.
Comment from Barbara Anne
What a beautiful poem with a lovely message of friendship and caring attached to it. I can almost hear a child care teacher reading it to a class. Lovely rhyme and rhythm. Good luck with the submission.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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What a beautiful poem with a lovely message of friendship and caring attached to it. I can almost hear a child care teacher reading it to a class. Lovely rhyme and rhythm. Good luck with the submission.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Barbara. Gosh, you went back a long way in my portfolio! I'm so pleased you liked it. :) Sandra xsx
Comment from Maguy Daoud
Hello Mrs.. Sandra, I won't put any comments of this poem because I like so, but a friend advice the second book which you published with Amazon named " A short stories why don't you put some lovely illustrations, I think it will much nice because it's for children, and all the children as we know they like to see illustrations with colors before reading, so you can cooperate with your friend the illustration who makes for you the first story book.
By the way can I have your e-mail please, I would like to keep in touch with you if this not bothering you.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Hello Mrs.. Sandra, I won't put any comments of this poem because I like so, but a friend advice the second book which you published with Amazon named " A short stories why don't you put some lovely illustrations, I think it will much nice because it's for children, and all the children as we know they like to see illustrations with colors before reading, so you can cooperate with your friend the illustration who makes for you the first story book.
By the way can I have your e-mail please, I would like to keep in touch with you if this not bothering you.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Hi Maguy, thank you for reading my Hedgerow story, the Hedgerow series will all be illustrated soon, the first book that has been published already has them. The short stories on Amazon are for the grown-ups, not children, that's why they aren't illustrated. These are short stories all with different themes. Romance, humour, thrillers, and others. The other book that has just come out is all spiritual, words that people feel through loss, heart-break, and how God and Jesus helps us through the pain. All of them are written in Rhyme. My e-mail address is
sandramaureenmitchell@gmail.com I look forward to hearing from you. xsx Sandra
Comment from Liz Dunbee
This poem tells an interesting story and has good rhythm. It was fun to read. I read it aloud and it flowed smoothly.
The part where Whiffy says I thought it could be mine was a little clumsy when I read it out loud it did not have the same rhythm as the rest of the story. But otherwise it was excellent.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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This poem tells an interesting story and has good rhythm. It was fun to read. I read it aloud and it flowed smoothly.
The part where Whiffy says I thought it could be mine was a little clumsy when I read it out loud it did not have the same rhythm as the rest of the story. But otherwise it was excellent.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Hi Liz, welcome to FS! I was amazed to see a review on this story, it was written sometime last year. It has been pubished with the rest of the book, which is now the 2nd one. The 3rd is on its way! That you for taking the time to look through my portfolio! :) Sandra
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Hi Sandra, Congratulations. It is a lovery story. Good Luck with the next one.
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Thank you, Liz, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Welcome to FanStory, you will have lots of fun here, make lots of new friends and learn a lot too. Enjoy! xsx Sandra
Comment from quicksandyamurray
I see absolutely nothing wrong with this poem story. It is the most charming and interesting children's poem I have read in a long time. The story ling is quite entertaining, the rhythm of the lines is exceptional. It is a very well compiled poem, and I say "Here you go!", to all the reviewers against long poems, "Too long for you to read? You lose out if you skip this one!" And that is my honest opinion.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I see absolutely nothing wrong with this poem story. It is the most charming and interesting children's poem I have read in a long time. The story ling is quite entertaining, the rhythm of the lines is exceptional. It is a very well compiled poem, and I say "Here you go!", to all the reviewers against long poems, "Too long for you to read? You lose out if you skip this one!" And that is my honest opinion.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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That is one of the nicest reviews I've received, quicksandyamurray, thank you so very much! And a really big thank you for the super 6 stars, you are so kind, thank you! xsx Sandra.
Comment from Maria C.
Goodness that is the cutest story. I love the characters and the teaching lessons in the story. Good dialogue throughout. Great descriptive wording. Excellent rhyming couplets with good proximate rhymes too.
I loved the ending.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Maria C.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Goodness that is the cutest story. I love the characters and the teaching lessons in the story. Good dialogue throughout. Great descriptive wording. Excellent rhyming couplets with good proximate rhymes too.
I loved the ending.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Maria C.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for this amazing review, Maria C!! I am really pleased you enjoyed this story and thank you also for the super 6 stars! Sandra. xsx
Comment from Sally Carter
Strong meter makes the poem easy to read, and it sounds as if your characters are well established, with personalities the reader would by now be familiar with. I certainly didn't notice any spag.
I did find the poem a little "dense" in its length, but perhaps when it reaches book stage it would be split up with illustrations? I am sure it would lend itself very well to pictures capturing all the characters' expressions. There's some wonderful material there for an artist to work with.
Fun to read, and I wish you the best in the contest.
Yours
Sally
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Strong meter makes the poem easy to read, and it sounds as if your characters are well established, with personalities the reader would by now be familiar with. I certainly didn't notice any spag.
I did find the poem a little "dense" in its length, but perhaps when it reaches book stage it would be split up with illustrations? I am sure it would lend itself very well to pictures capturing all the characters' expressions. There's some wonderful material there for an artist to work with.
Fun to read, and I wish you the best in the contest.
Yours
Sally
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much, Sally for your kind review. The first of the Hedgerow books comes out at the end of October, I commissioned CorrinasCreations on FanArt to illustrate it, as I wanted to have some input in them and as the illustrator the publishers use for children's books lives in Scotland, they were quite happy for me to use Corrina, and they were so impressed they have now put her on their books. This story, 'Is That Our Cart' is in the second book, due to come out next year. And now I am working on a third book. This group of friends are through the whole series. I am pleased you liked them, and thank you for your best wishes although just to be in the contest gave me a buzz. LOL, :) Thank you again! xsx Sandra.
Comment from nomi338
This is one of the very best children's poem / stories that I have read or heard ever. It is very lyrical, the rhymes are immaculate the verses are evenly matched, the theme is maintained all the way through. And lessons are taught in such a subtle way that most children will not even realize that they have just learned some valuable lessons. 1: Never go near a body of water when you are alone. 2: Even when you think that nobody likes you, somebody does. 3: Just because you think you have found something that can be yours, when the rightful owner claims it don't argue or fight about it. 4: Most people are nicer than you think they are.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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This is one of the very best children's poem / stories that I have read or heard ever. It is very lyrical, the rhymes are immaculate the verses are evenly matched, the theme is maintained all the way through. And lessons are taught in such a subtle way that most children will not even realize that they have just learned some valuable lessons. 1: Never go near a body of water when you are alone. 2: Even when you think that nobody likes you, somebody does. 3: Just because you think you have found something that can be yours, when the rightful owner claims it don't argue or fight about it. 4: Most people are nicer than you think they are.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you so very much for your lovely review, Nomi,I am so pleased you liked this story, I try to put a little lesson in all these stories, but at the same time try not to make them feel they are being treated like children, they all think they are grown up!! My grandson is now, 4 and three quarters!! That makes him a big boy now!!LOL Thank you again for your lovely review and for awarding it a super 6!!!! Sandra. xsx
Comment from jlsavell
sandramitchell, this is absolutely fantastic. I loved every word of it and cannit wait till you publish. My grandchildren would love this series. This is an intimidating contender for the contest. Perfect flow, rhythm, cadence and uplifting whimsical tone. Never missed a beat. Loved it, loved it, what more can I say? jlsavell..
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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sandramitchell, this is absolutely fantastic. I loved every word of it and cannit wait till you publish. My grandchildren would love this series. This is an intimidating contender for the contest. Perfect flow, rhythm, cadence and uplifting whimsical tone. Never missed a beat. Loved it, loved it, what more can I say? jlsavell..
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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aww, thank you so very much, jlsavell, I am really pleased you liked my story. The first book is coming out at the end of this month, it is called, Hedgerow Capers, which is all about these furry friends. This one with another 9 stories 10 in all, will be out next year. I have been amazed at how well they have received on FS! Thank you again, I so appreciate your kind comments. Sandra. xsx
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Loved it, truly.. cannot wait for the book,
