Mermaid
A mermaid's human lover has left her forever.3 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form
I really like how you are able to tell an entire story with effective emotion in only 15 words
good consonance of hard C sounds in tickle my skin
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form
I really like how you are able to tell an entire story with effective emotion in only 15 words
good consonance of hard C sounds in tickle my skin
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the feedback! I hadn't considered the consonant C, and I'll be sure to consider the different sounds of words in future poems. Thanks! :)
Comment from ernesto escarro
Mermaid
Knowing sorrow spills all tears as she no longer come
back, missing her is loneliness for her lover who belong
to the surface of the sea like a mermaid.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2012
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Mermaid
Knowing sorrow spills all tears as she no longer come
back, missing her is loneliness for her lover who belong
to the surface of the sea like a mermaid.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2012
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Thank you!
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You are welcome. God bless.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Awww it's so sad when a mermaid cries. Wonderful job with this short as you told a great story of love in just three lines. Wonderful work.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2012
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Awww it's so sad when a mermaid cries. Wonderful job with this short as you told a great story of love in just three lines. Wonderful work.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2012
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Thank you, that means a lot to me! :)
