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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Some dad's are a disgrace to their gender. I think I'd have made a different phone call, perhaps to his wife to let her know what type of man she was married to! Luckily, she knew she had people like her to help put things right. Women can be the same, dump the baby on the dad and walk away. Well done, Bill, this was a real thought provoker! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Some dad's are a disgrace to their gender. I think I'd have made a different phone call, perhaps to his wife to let her know what type of man she was married to! Luckily, she knew she had people like her to help put things right. Women can be the same, dump the baby on the dad and walk away. Well done, Bill, this was a real thought provoker! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you, Sandra. It was well received for its simplicity, I think.
Comment from Capricorn30
A "feel good" ending to this nice 200 word fiction;helping one another and supporting one another in times of need is so important,particularly for this group of women;
What a life these women need;a good story idea you have created--I liked your story,great little writing
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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A "feel good" ending to this nice 200 word fiction;helping one another and supporting one another in times of need is so important,particularly for this group of women;
What a life these women need;a good story idea you have created--I liked your story,great little writing
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes I liked this short story it is well written it shows there are people around to help when they are needed this starts on a sad note and ends positive well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Yes I liked this short story it is well written it shows there are people around to help when they are needed this starts on a sad note and ends positive well done regards Jill
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good story about how woman pull together and help each other out in a crisis very well written and thought about thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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This is a good story about how woman pull together and help each other out in a crisis very well written and thought about thank you for sharing
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Bill. This is a great contest entry. In a very short space, you are able to convey a story with a strong emotional uncurrent. I thought your ending, with the women coming to help one of their own, just right! Good luck with this excellent write. Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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Hi, Bill. This is a great contest entry. In a very short space, you are able to convey a story with a strong emotional uncurrent. I thought your ending, with the women coming to help one of their own, just right! Good luck with this excellent write. Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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Bev, Thank you for the kind and enthusiastic review. I missed the contest deadline though. Thanks again. Bill
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Aw, shucks. I think you had very good chance of winning!
You're very welcome, Bill.
Comment from justatuna
That was really good. Powerful message. I could have used more description in the house and character. Would have created better imagery. Flowed very well. Great job.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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That was really good. Powerful message. I could have used more description in the house and character. Would have created better imagery. Flowed very well. Great job.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2012
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Thank you for reviewing me. It was a 200 word story so I needed to eliminate a few adjectives. Bill
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That's what I figured. Great work.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, bill, you did a great job writing this story about the women who banded together to fix things, i enjoyed reading this story. can you send some ladies over here to help me put everything in place>
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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this is very well written, bill, you did a great job writing this story about the women who banded together to fix things, i enjoyed reading this story. can you send some ladies over here to help me put everything in place>
Comment Written 04-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Louise33811
This story is a reflection of an all too common story in society today. We know from real life how this woman's plight ends. Fortunately in this story she has the sense to use a resource available to her for help. I especially like the way this story ends. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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This story is a reflection of an all too common story in society today. We know from real life how this woman's plight ends. Fortunately in this story she has the sense to use a resource available to her for help. I especially like the way this story ends. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Stalking Wolf
Much info passed in so few words. Good drama and smooth action. This is a story but could be true, too many dead beat dads. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Much info passed in so few words. Good drama and smooth action. This is a story but could be true, too many dead beat dads. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Fluffyhead
what a nice story. Wish it happened more often in real life. They should have these all over so single mum's and dad's can join.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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what a nice story. Wish it happened more often in real life. They should have these all over so single mum's and dad's can join.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind and extremely generous review.
