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Just Daisy, Part 1

Inspired by 'through a child's eyes' prompt

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Comment from Sis Cat
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Jimi, this is a delightful little true tale about the conversation you had with your youngest when he was four. Children and their crazy logic are good sources for stories and poems, and this is a fine story about a boy trying to wheedle his way out of preschool. I enjoy your humor,

"Son, don't ever try to understand girls. You'll be happier." Well I'm not happy right now.

I can imagine this child as I have once been one myself.

Thank you for sharing this story again.




 Comment Written 25-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Sis Cat,

    thank you so very very much.. I appreciate you so very much.. jimi
Comment from Father Flaps
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Hi Jimi
We're not quite there yet, looking after our granddaughter who will be 3 years old on December 16th. But I'm sure little Princess Lissie will be a handful. Next month, our daughter, Laura, has enrolled her in a play school for 2 hours in the mornings, 3 days per week. It will be a help for my wife who is on the verge of going completely mad!
I love the way your son said, "It's time to make her day just daisy."
Nicely penned!
Hugs
Kimbob

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Kimbob,

    Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. your fan forever. She will soon have you on the floor laughing with her antics. jimi
Comment from Mark Valentine
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Though not an official entry, you certainly nailed the prompt. I love the phrase "just daisy" - beats "just dandy" if you ask me. I may have to start using that one.

You've chosen a great vignette to illustrate a child's "theory of mind" . I can still remember doing that as a child, and I certainly remember my own children faking illnesses. You capture the child's POV and wishful thinking beautifully as the scenario unfolds.

I'm dropping my middle child off for her first year at college tomorrow - my wife and I were just recalling all of those wonderful idiosyncratic sayings she had, so the "just daisy" thing really struck home.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Mark, how are you? Yes, children are so funny. I know its hard to watch them grow and to drop them off at college!! thank you for stopping by, thank you... jimi
Comment from Kelly2
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I think you were able to get into a child's head and interpret it perfectly.

What does it mean, that this story is a revival? Can you repost an earlier story that you posted?

I was going to ask what "just daisy" meant. Then you explained it. I love it! I think I will start using that, maybe even on a daily basis. Out of the mouth of babes. They are so funny and cute. You really captured that.

kelly

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Kelly2,

    Yes, this is an old swork and was reposted but not as a new swork. again a huge thank you... jim
Comment from Cumbrianlass
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This was so cute, Jimi! Loved it. My son never went to daycare, but my granddaughter does (she recently turned 2) and despite her young age, she's a clever little thing. I can just imagine this scenario playing out in her head!

The questions this little boy asked were precious - and not without logic!

Thanks for the smile.

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 Comment Written 23-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    AV, they are so very clever, so very clever.. again a huge thank you.. jimi
Comment from Mary Wakeford
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What a sweet story using the voice of your once five year old son. I was so confused on the Daisy comment, until it was clarified in your notes, adding to b the cute factor. I wondered how I had never heard that expression being this old! Very sweet v and enjoyable, Jimi, and very relatable as a working mom!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Mary,

    Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. You are such a fantastic writer. Thank you so very much.. jimi
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Jim

= Oh, this is adorable!
= I love that you used his verbiage--perfect touch.
= It's too funny how kids interpret words.
= My oldest always said--sketties--for spaghetti.
= Things like that are priceless.
= Great story. Thanks so much for sharing.
= It will be fun reading the next part.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Jax, once again!!!!!! a big big thank you.... jimi
Comment from catch22
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Hi Jimi, this is a very clever and insightful look at the exchange between yourself and your son through his POV. You kept the view constant throughout the piece and really seemed like you got in the child's head. I did think you might want to ask someone more knowledgeable about the speech tags--especially when the child remembers something his father said. I am not sure the way you have presented it is acceptable. Either way, this is an excellent write.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Pam, Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jimi

    I am trying to send you M.A. but it won't attach. I will try again...
Comment from Mabaker
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Another fun story Jimi loved it. Kids can be real little shits at times I had five and I know all about someone not wanting to go to school. Thankfully they only one at a time tried it on. Anyway great story. Sincerely Anne

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Anne,thank you dear dear friend. thank you. I know the thank is very late but your review is very much appreciated.. jimi
reply by Mabaker on 28-Aug-2016
    I loved Just Daisy he you are allowed to be late no apologies needed, we're friends. Love Anne.
Comment from PaulRoberts68
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I think the author captures hypothetically what goes on in the mind of a child. As adults we are always having internal dialogues with ourselves. It is no different from when we were children.

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 Comment Written 22-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jlsavell