The Jersey Hoard
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Comment from elliejean
I read the story because I am from New Jersey. Is this the are you are talking about? I was intrigued by the hardship of the battles these men fought. They were brave when facing certain death. Great work.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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I read the story because I am from New Jersey. Is this the are you are talking about? I was intrigued by the hardship of the battles these men fought. They were brave when facing certain death. Great work.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you for your review. I think you are asking me if this is New Jersey. Well the answer is it is old Jersey C.I.
The original Jersey, the one whose name you Americans pinched (smile)...
A few miles off the coast of France a beautiful island.
Fighting is what they lived for 'death' comes with the territory... Mel.
Comment from Selina Stambi
I was thrilled come across another chapter in your tale.
I very good read - the descriptions create pictures that make the story alive in my head.
However, I have to confess that the lack of commas and the need for new sentences is very distracting as one reads ... I guess this will be an ongoing cross for me to bear as I look forward to further chapters!
Continues to be an exciting (if bloodthirsy!) read.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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I was thrilled come across another chapter in your tale.
I very good read - the descriptions create pictures that make the story alive in my head.
However, I have to confess that the lack of commas and the need for new sentences is very distracting as one reads ... I guess this will be an ongoing cross for me to bear as I look forward to further chapters!
Continues to be an exciting (if bloodthirsy!) read.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Thank you R.F.T.S. for your kind review. If if I am providing a distraction to your read then I shall have to remedy it.
I am pleased you find it exciting. It is bloodthirsty for I am trying to portray what it was like then and the truth is we can't imagine half of it. Celtic warriors nailed human victims heads to the front wall of their house.'trophies'...Mel.
Comment from robyn corum
The journey continues for these brave soldiers. I can picture it in my mind. I'm anxious to reach the end of the story and find out what happens.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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The journey continues for these brave soldiers. I can picture it in my mind. I'm anxious to reach the end of the story and find out what happens.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you Robyn, for your kind review and continued reading... Mel xx.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written as the citizenery scamble to hide their gold from the Romans. It has a interesting flow of words, making for an exciting read.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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This is very well written as the citizenery scamble to hide their gold from the Romans. It has a interesting flow of words, making for an exciting read.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2012
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Thank you, for your kind review and continued reading... Mel.
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You're welcome, Mel. Charlie
http://www.dailymail.co.uk/sciencetech/article-2164897/Iron-Age-coins-worth-10m-discovered-Jersey-metal-detector-friends.html
Hoard of Celtic coins
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Hi Charlie, yes this is a good article about the find.
I live in Jersey and we all know where the field is. For three days they showed it in the museum here and I was able to get within a yard of it to take photos. Most impressive, an inspiration in fact... Mel.
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You're welcome, Mel. Charlie
Comment from smudge
Very exciting chapter. The hovels and barbarism seem very appropriate to the age you are portraying. The dialogue is excellent moving the action on.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Very exciting chapter. The hovels and barbarism seem very appropriate to the age you are portraying. The dialogue is excellent moving the action on.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you smudge, for reading the story so far. The last two chapters will on the site next week....Mel.
Comment from Eric Corsten
the story seem to be developing nicely and you seem to be Constance throughout..I staring to get into it...Good sign..EricDaGoose
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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the story seem to be developing nicely and you seem to be Constance throughout..I staring to get into it...Good sign..EricDaGoose
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you again for following the story...Mel.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
A lot of tension growing here. We know what's coming and so do they. It's the only thing they can do. The Romans can't be allowed to have the treasure to make them even stronger. Well written, again.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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A lot of tension growing here. We know what's coming and so do they. It's the only thing they can do. The Romans can't be allowed to have the treasure to make them even stronger. Well written, again.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you once again, for your kind review...Mel.
Comment from doris1022
intense action adventure you have penned. nice dialect and wording for realism. fine write, no major errors I see. you are historical and entertaining to my simple mind. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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intense action adventure you have penned. nice dialect and wording for realism. fine write, no major errors I see. you are historical and entertaining to my simple mind. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Thank you Doris, for your kind review...Mel.
Comment from AprilShower
This only proves that some people will stop at nothing to win, even kill their own people and themselves. This is a brilliant writing, write hand blue. It certainly has taken much thought. I have nothing to add that would make this any better than it is. :o)
April
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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This only proves that some people will stop at nothing to win, even kill their own people and themselves. This is a brilliant writing, write hand blue. It certainly has taken much thought. I have nothing to add that would make this any better than it is. :o)
April
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thank you April, I'm so pleased that you like my story. It has been a bit of a challenge with all the research that has to be done first. And a big thank you for the six stars...Mel. xx
Comment from Norbanus
This is a hell of a story. I love this king of historical fiction You have done it well.
Her's a paragraph that need attention:
His shouts disappear as Eudeyrn listens intently for a sign, only the soft sounds of the trees stirring in the breeze, the squeaking of the leather harness and the clink of coins can be heard. These sounds are the only answer in this silent forest.(It begins with "soft souns of the trees'
but ends with 'this silent forest'.
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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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This is a hell of a story. I love this king of historical fiction You have done it well.
Her's a paragraph that need attention:
His shouts disappear as Eudeyrn listens intently for a sign, only the soft sounds of the trees stirring in the breeze, the squeaking of the leather harness and the clink of coins can be heard. These sounds are the only answer in this silent forest.(It begins with "soft souns of the trees'
but ends with 'this silent forest'.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thank you Norbanus, for the kind review, Yes this was a last minute alteration and the spag slipped through. I shall substitute "living" for silent...Thank you Mel.
