Rewards of the Laughingstock
Trying, even when you have everything to lose37 total reviews
Comment from ruminative scribbler
I like the optimism in this. The author has captured the determination and adventure in her sister's character in just a few lines.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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I like the optimism in this. The author has captured the determination and adventure in her sister's character in just a few lines.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your review and for your time spent reviewing! I appreciate it! :)-Grace
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Oh she is so adorable and it's great she is an individual. God didn't make any carbon copies. Very good poem. God loves you and so do i.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Oh she is so adorable and it's great she is an individual. God didn't make any carbon copies. Very good poem. God loves you and so do i.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and for your time spent reviewing! :) You are right, it is great that Camille is an individual. Bless you and good luck!-Grace
Comment from ronnie k
Say as I have not heart before, blout, honest yet encouraging. A quick look and a answer that is not hard to miss (nothing beats a failure....)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Say as I have not heart before, blout, honest yet encouraging. A quick look and a answer that is not hard to miss (nothing beats a failure....)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing and for the excellent review! Have a wonderful day! Best of luck to you!-Grace :)
Comment from samandlancelot
Grace,
I love the polka dot bathrobe, green knee-length socks, and Camille's cute smile. I always think that to not try is one of the biggest failures we can have in life. I hope Camille continues to try things, even when she must be different to do so and when others just don't understand.
Excellent 5/7/5 poem.
Patricia
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Grace,
I love the polka dot bathrobe, green knee-length socks, and Camille's cute smile. I always think that to not try is one of the biggest failures we can have in life. I hope Camille continues to try things, even when she must be different to do so and when others just don't understand.
Excellent 5/7/5 poem.
Patricia
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you very much for the wonderful review! I hope that Camille continues to try as well, for the world would be a much worse place if she stopped. :) Best of luck to you! Thanks again!-Grace
Comment from wordsareus
This is a wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 poetry contest. It has a strong message. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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This is a wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 poetry contest. It has a strong message. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you very much for the kind review! :) The contest is over, I didn't place, but the reviews I have received have been extremely helpful anyways. Thanks again! Best of luck to you.-Grace
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Grace,
You have selected and interesting set of phrases for your 5/7/5. The seventeen syllables can be used further expanded to a number of thoughts.
No one can accomplish anything if they fail to try. As Yoda said, "try not...do." Trying is the first step to success. Even if some mock and ridicule, a doer will continue to try. It is much better to try and fail than to have given up and not tried.
Those that try may fail,
They will be mocked, ridiculed,
But they would have tried.
Curtis
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Grace,
You have selected and interesting set of phrases for your 5/7/5. The seventeen syllables can be used further expanded to a number of thoughts.
No one can accomplish anything if they fail to try. As Yoda said, "try not...do." Trying is the first step to success. Even if some mock and ridicule, a doer will continue to try. It is much better to try and fail than to have given up and not tried.
Those that try may fail,
They will be mocked, ridiculed,
But they would have tried.
Curtis
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your excellent review and for the time spent reviewing! I appreciate it! Best, Grace
Comment from Ekim777
The only failure is not to try at all. Every attempt bears its own form of success. But as T.S. Eliot wrote;" The last temptation is the greatest treason. To do the right thing for the wrong reason." Be well. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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The only failure is not to try at all. Every attempt bears its own form of success. But as T.S. Eliot wrote;" The last temptation is the greatest treason. To do the right thing for the wrong reason." Be well. -Ekim777
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your excellent review and for the time spent reviewing! I appreciate it! Best, Grace
Comment from Child of the King
Very good. Your sister is soooo cute. The only thing I would change would be the word in the second line to MAY instead of WILL. Will is a word that pre-determines what is going to happen and take place as in I WILL do it. You used MAY in the first line saying that the person still has a chance not to fail and the second line should be also. (in my opinion only) Kudos
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Very good. Your sister is soooo cute. The only thing I would change would be the word in the second line to MAY instead of WILL. Will is a word that pre-determines what is going to happen and take place as in I WILL do it. You used MAY in the first line saying that the person still has a chance not to fail and the second line should be also. (in my opinion only) Kudos
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your excellent review and for the time spent reviewing! I appreciate it! I will consider your feedback. Best, Grace
Comment from Nefarioushibachi
This is a lovely poem. The sentiment is beautiful and each word works in the context of the poem. I love the picture as well. The second "they" reads a bit awkwardly, but I'm glad it is differentiated in the poem with the italics.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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This is a lovely poem. The sentiment is beautiful and each word works in the context of the poem. I love the picture as well. The second "they" reads a bit awkwardly, but I'm glad it is differentiated in the poem with the italics.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your excellent review and for the time spent reviewing! I appreciate it! Best, Grace
Comment from Starlit Ink
Trying and failing is much better than not trying at all. You stated this wisdom perfectly in this 5-7-5. When you try once, it encourages you to try again. It's having the courage that is the most important. Great work on this, and best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Trying and failing is much better than not trying at all. You stated this wisdom perfectly in this 5-7-5. When you try once, it encourages you to try again. It's having the courage that is the most important. Great work on this, and best of luck to you.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your excellent review and for the time spent reviewing! I appreciate it! Best, Grace
