Creepy Poems
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Comment from strandregs
I like the tempo of this poem, it reminds me of that famous poem the kids learn in school about a train ride.
How about one about a fox escaping from the dogs through the bush and the forest, with this tempo it would be great.Z.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2013
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I like the tempo of this poem, it reminds me of that famous poem the kids learn in school about a train ride.
How about one about a fox escaping from the dogs through the bush and the forest, with this tempo it would be great.Z.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2013
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Thank you strandregs. Good idea.
Comment from Lise Deangelo
I enjoyed your monotetra poem. Skillful work. It didn't scare me too much because the presentation is quite exquisite. Usually, I find this form not easily enjoyable. Brooke's are the other ones I like. Thanks for sharing :) Lise
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2013
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I enjoyed your monotetra poem. Skillful work. It didn't scare me too much because the presentation is quite exquisite. Usually, I find this form not easily enjoyable. Brooke's are the other ones I like. Thanks for sharing :) Lise
Comment Written 09-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2013
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Thank you Lise. Glad you could enjoy it.
Comment from kcross11
This is my first monotetra, and I love it.
The repetitions really added an emphasis I liked. A lot. As for content- I loved it. It's a topic not posted on much (that I've read) and I thought it was original and refreshing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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This is my first monotetra, and I love it.
The repetitions really added an emphasis I liked. A lot. As for content- I loved it. It's a topic not posted on much (that I've read) and I thought it was original and refreshing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thanks for your great comments and review.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good work here with rhyming words and words flowing well. A great tale of how Satan lurks everywhere and is out to get us all. Good message in this poem.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Good work here with rhyming words and words flowing well. A great tale of how Satan lurks everywhere and is out to get us all. Good message in this poem.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thanks very much, GWinterwin.
Comment from Kevin C
This is an excellent Monotetra that reads perfectly. I like the form you chose for your wonderful words. You message is so clear with great artwork (I used the same one for one of my works). It was a pleasure to read and you author notes just add and teaches the reader this form. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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This is an excellent Monotetra that reads perfectly. I like the form you chose for your wonderful words. You message is so clear with great artwork (I used the same one for one of my works). It was a pleasure to read and you author notes just add and teaches the reader this form. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thank you Kevin. I appreciate your read and review.
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You are welcome, thank you for sharing.
Comment from rod007
The use of repetition adds to the haunting effect of this piece. I liked these lines which I think encapsulates the theme of your poem.
"For Satan knows our nature well.
Our weakest wishes, he can tell,
And soon release from cruelest cell,
The Hounds of Hell. The Hounds of Hell!"
Well done. I am back with the living again!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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The use of repetition adds to the haunting effect of this piece. I liked these lines which I think encapsulates the theme of your poem.
"For Satan knows our nature well.
Our weakest wishes, he can tell,
And soon release from cruelest cell,
The Hounds of Hell. The Hounds of Hell!"
Well done. I am back with the living again!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thanks Rod007. Were you sick? I remember you said you were in a bad place. Welcome back.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
OK MR T THIS WAS ONE REALLY GREAT WORK OF VERBAL ART ... YOU PAINTED A VERBAL PICTURE OF THAT DAMN DEVIL AND LIKE MINE HAVE TO BEWARE OF THAT SMILE FOR IT IS A SMIRK !!!!
TK
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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OK MR T THIS WAS ONE REALLY GREAT WORK OF VERBAL ART ... YOU PAINTED A VERBAL PICTURE OF THAT DAMN DEVIL AND LIKE MINE HAVE TO BEWARE OF THAT SMILE FOR IT IS A SMIRK !!!!
TK
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much Tarnished, I am inspired by your review and humbled by the rating. Yes! I thought your smirk and mine very similar. Of course your Joker really is the devil too! Two of like minds.
Comment from Traveler12
There's a sriking rhythm to this poem, almost like a drum beat, so it's easy to follow. The repetitions are effective. First time I've read this particuloar form, and I found it appealing. Must be great for reading aloud too. The photo was impressive also. A superlative job.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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There's a sriking rhythm to this poem, almost like a drum beat, so it's easy to follow. The repetitions are effective. First time I've read this particuloar form, and I found it appealing. Must be great for reading aloud too. The photo was impressive also. A superlative job.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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Thank you Traveler06. It does have a primal beat to it.
Comment from vapros
A neat and conforming monotetra, which I'm glad you explained for me. Rhyme and metre are present, as is a doleful caveat to us sinners, skillfully packaged. Be well and write more.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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A neat and conforming monotetra, which I'm glad you explained for me. Rhyme and metre are present, as is a doleful caveat to us sinners, skillfully packaged. Be well and write more.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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Thanks Vapros.
Comment from LaDonnaCole
I think this is fantastic.
I love the rhythm and feel of the poem. The repeated line gives me a moment to pause and feel a chill at the meaning.
Picture is amazing!
Thanks for sharing this work. Really nice.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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I think this is fantastic.
I love the rhythm and feel of the poem. The repeated line gives me a moment to pause and feel a chill at the meaning.
Picture is amazing!
Thanks for sharing this work. Really nice.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much LaDonnaCole.
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Thank you so much LaDonnaCole.
