Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Several days later, she pondered her next move,
Of bailing Jonathan out of his financial distress.
Snow-white teeth, vast chest, and muscular thighs,
Tormented her dreams, causing her physical unrest.

Hmmm she thinks she has it made now and can call the shots. I think Jonathon has other plans and will show them soon.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, Gungalo, I appreciate this great review!

reply by Gungalo on 16-Apr-2013

So good Titan.

Comment from alexisleech

Excellent

You can almost feel her reeling him in - poor man! So she is still on a mission to entrap him? I have a feeling she wont rest until she does!

Alexis x

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks!

Comment from steevie

Excellent

Jonathan, wake up. Ya she is a vixen but OMG, she is so hot for you!!! This story is awesome, Dossie. I am enjoying it immensely. You have a great scrip going on and its heating up quickly. I'm off to read the next chapter. Naughty girl! LOL

smiles
steve

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks MILLION! I'm sorry I'm so backed up with my thank you responses!

reply by steevie on 16-Apr-2013

No apologizes necessary, Dossie.

I like to keep the site fun and so never stress yourself with writing or reviewing.

I look forward to your next write, buddy.

smiles
steve

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

All her efforts was - were
good alliteration in beamed believing
good use of abcb rhyming
good character development and interrelationships among characters
Brooke

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, Brooke. Sorry to be so backed up with my responses.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Wow... You have an innate ability to tell a sensual story, in clean writing, keep the readers interest, wanting more and doing it in poetic fashion... That's difficult to pull off but you are doing it....
My children's story I posted combines prose and rhyme. It's a fun way to write.
Keep up the good writing... John

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, John. I'm so sorry to be so late responding to this stellar review. I'm delighted you liked it. Dossie

reply by jmdg1954 on 17-Apr-2013

Don't worry about timeliness, we all get overtaxed at times, we take on to much.

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I haven't been following this as I generally avoid romance stories. But this one is easier to swallow because you have done it in verse. Have to admit that Leslie sounds like a stalker. I'm impressed by the challenge of writing a love story as a poem.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013

Thanks so much for reading this one, Spitfire. I wrote the first part and then the second, but by then Leslie Ann had become a character in my head. My muse is working overtime this week - LOL.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Dossie, That does have to be hard. I don't think I like Leslie Ann though. She is a vixen and everything I always disliked in some women I have known. Good job. Nancy

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013

Thanks so much for reading this one, Nancy. I wrote the first part and then the second, but by then Leslie Ann had become a character in my head. My muse is working overtime this week - LOL

Comment from angelmagnet

Excellent

This one could be a little more clear. I got lost in family history and what who knew about who. Someone's getting bailed out of financial problems, that sort of came out of nowhere. I'd say this isn't done yet.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013

Thanks for the stars, but you were pretty rough - LOL. If you remember in part three, I mentioned Jonathan and his financial difficulties. Jonathan was at the bus stop lamenting his financial woes when Leslie Ann placed her personal card in his chemistry book. I also mentioned Thomas, who is Leslie Ann's lab partner. And also, Mary Ann, Jonathan's wife. Thanks for reading. Dossie

reply by angelmagnet on 10-Apr-2013

I forgot that. I will revise my rating. Thanks for telling me.

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

Dossie,

The poem is beautifully written, and the story is clear for the reader to see Leslie Ann's intentions. Her ploy for a married man seems to be making progress. She is one more conniving female, and she goes after what she wants with a passion. Is it really the man she wants, or is it just the chase?

Curtis

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013

Thanks so much for reading this one, Curtis. I wrote the first part and then the second, but by then Leslie Ann had become a character in my head. My muse is working overtime this week - LOL

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this s well written my friend I liked the way you write this is poetry form it makes it so much easier to follow for me I enjoyed well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013

Thanks so much, Jill. I appreciate your comments and rating.