Comment from EMB

Excellent

So in the red corner, we have Mary Ann. In the blue corner, we have Leslie Ann. The referee is this delusional dude named Thomas. Well, I say sound the bell, and let's get ready to rumbllllllllllllllllllllle! LOL

Very entertaining. :)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks so much, Edward. I'm enjoying where my mind is taking me on this one. I'm also delighted you find it entertaining! Dossie

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

This chapter does a great deal to build on plot and characterization, setting the scene--possibly--for a big catfight between two strong women.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks so much for your insightful and encouraging comments, Janice. Both are appreciated.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good use of alternate-line rhyme and proximate rhyme
an intriguing story of love triangles and resentments and revenge :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, Brooke. I love your comments. I needed to hear them!

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Good chapter Dossie...
It's all beginning to unfold and things coming to a climax ... Lets see how MaryAnn puts Leslie down and in her place.
Should become even more interesting and heated...
John

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, John!! I really appreciate your engaging comments and your insight into my Leslie Ann saga. Dossie

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Having a strong family to back you and yours is always a good thing. Trustworthy and steadfast family can help others in the clan stay together and make it.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

You're so right, Curly Girly! I like your thoughts on family. If you are lucky enough to have a great one, you're extremely lucky!

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Have to admit you hooked me with the photo. If that's Thomas, how can Leslie resist him. The rejected lover seems to know about women. He can tell Mary Ann is a match for Leslie.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, Spitfire. Leslie Ann is driven by getting whatever she wants. Even though Thomas loves her madly, she wants Jonathan, her happily married professor.

Comment from sunnilicious

Exceptional

The story is unfolding well. I like how to let us get a complete glimpse of all the characters. Leslie Ann is complex outside of class, but she seems average in college. I'm baffled as to why Mary Ann and Thomas James have such a relationship. Shouldn't it be Jonathan with Mary Ann. Their marriage is looking shaky. What will happen next?

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013

Thanks so much for this great review - I LOVE those star!!! I am really exuberant knowing you think the story is unfolding well. As for the characters, Leslie Ann is one of those folks who can always step up to the plate, and, usually, succeed if its something she wants. That's why she smarted up and learned chemistry. Thomas is a family friend of Jonathan and Mary Ann. I noted that in an earlier chapter. Thomas loves Leslie Ann, but she's obsessed with Jonathan, that is why he felt it necessary to squeal on her. He tutored her in Chemistry and now that she knows the course, he is feeling used.

reply by sunnilicious on 14-Apr-2013

Yeah, I got that, but I appreciate the synopsis. I may have to go Florida and visit my mother. I don't know when with my luck I'll leave at a moment's notice. So excuse me in advance for not getting around to read. Mobile phones can be so tiny. I may release plenty NaPoWriMo stuff just to meet the 30 poem requirement.

Okay, take care. Keep in touch.

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

Dossie,

This is another absolutely outstanding chapter. All the conniving Leslie Ann is capable of now that she has all that money to play with remains to be seen. Mary Ann is not one to take Leslie Ann's threat lightly. Now that she knows, the action is bound to become intense. We are about to learn what kind of metal Jonathon is made of. As for me, I'm routing for Mary Ann and the children.

Thomas' actions may backfire on him.

Curtis

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, Curtis. I appreciate your continuing support.

Comment from angelmagnet

Excellent

Go, Mary Ann, put that little troublemaker in her place. Work it out without her money. Let's bring some values back into this world! Fun to read

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, angelmagnet, I agree. Marriage is still, as far as I am concerned, the foundation of civilized society.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Yesss! I love Mary Ann. Can she outwit Leslie? Getting exciting now. And good for Thomas, I say!

>>For her to think she can utterly toss

Use "could", not "can".

>>And the wretched wench, somehow

Remove comma.

>>Her fine skin, spiky eyelashes and beautiful flaxen hair
Plays havoc

Change "plays" to "play".

>>True Leslie Ann

Need comma after "True"

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks, Phyllis. I appreciate your review and help.