Leslie Ann's Exploits
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Comment from sunnilicious
How to tell love from lust... turmoil. And the other sneaky woman meets the wife. The dilemmas Leslie Ann is encountering. Tactful approach. Great emotional tones. The story is unfolding nicely. Great!
reply by the author on 11-May-2013
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How to tell love from lust... turmoil. And the other sneaky woman meets the wife. The dilemmas Leslie Ann is encountering. Tactful approach. Great emotional tones. The story is unfolding nicely. Great!
Comment Written 08-May-2013
reply by the author on 11-May-2013
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Thanks!!
Comment from adewpearl
Sated, satisfied and pleased, - add the comma after pleased
Why the formatting where you end a line after the end of a sentence?
excellent dialogue that conveys intense emotions well
Dramatic dynamics in this love triangle
Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Sated, satisfied and pleased, - add the comma after pleased
Why the formatting where you end a line after the end of a sentence?
excellent dialogue that conveys intense emotions well
Dramatic dynamics in this love triangle
Brooke
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Many, many thanks, Brook. I always appreciate your encouraging reviews and even criticism is given in a constructive way. I appreciate that!
Comment from dmt1967
'Leslie Ann not used to put downs, she shook with unbridled hate,' I would take out 'she'
very well written thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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'Leslie Ann not used to put downs, she shook with unbridled hate,' I would take out 'she'
very well written thank you for sharing
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thanks, my friend! I always appreciate sharp eyes that catch those small snafus that can happen to anyone. Thanks for a great review!
Comment from Steliano
How true to life your story reads, I really enjoy every bit of your writing, full and rich in conversation, and flowing with such interest. cant wait to see what the note said. I will read on.
Thank You
Steliano
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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How true to life your story reads, I really enjoy every bit of your writing, full and rich in conversation, and flowing with such interest. cant wait to see what the note said. I will read on.
Thank You
Steliano
Comment Written 19-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Be blessed, my friend, and thanks so much for this most encouraging review and stellar rating. Please read on -LOL. I hope you're having a wonderful day and a most prosperous week ahead!
Comment from Curly Girly
I wonder what Mary Ann and Thomas are going to cook-up between themselves?
Just a few typos:
Jonathan's stood on shaky legs as he looked from one to the other.
suggest:
delete: 's from Jonathan
Leslie Ann stood motionless, waiting to see how thing would unfold.
Leslie Ann stood motionless, waiting to see how thing[s] would unfold.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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I wonder what Mary Ann and Thomas are going to cook-up between themselves?
Just a few typos:
Jonathan's stood on shaky legs as he looked from one to the other.
suggest:
delete: 's from Jonathan
Leslie Ann stood motionless, waiting to see how thing would unfold.
Leslie Ann stood motionless, waiting to see how thing[s] would unfold.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Curly Girly, for your continuing encouragement, constructive criticism, and ongoing support! I value all that and you! Be blessed!
Comment from Spitfire
The reader is hooked, wanting to know about this plan. Seems Leslie Ann made her point here and doesn't need to go further. Excellent use of rhyme and quatrains to tell this delicious story about seduction.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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The reader is hooked, wanting to know about this plan. Seems Leslie Ann made her point here and doesn't need to go further. Excellent use of rhyme and quatrains to tell this delicious story about seduction.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much, Spitfire!
Comment from angelmagnet
this little soap opera is charming and frustrating, and I want to see the whole script now. I guess this a little Leslie Ann and all of us. That's probably why I find your story so engaging
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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this little soap opera is charming and frustrating, and I want to see the whole script now. I guess this a little Leslie Ann and all of us. That's probably why I find your story so engaging
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Angelmagnet, you are a hoot! I love this review. I hope you continue to like Leslie Ann's exploits.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh such wicked webs we weave when thos we practice to deceive. Leslie Ann treads this ground very lightsly. Jonathon knows what he has.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Oh such wicked webs we weave when thos we practice to deceive. Leslie Ann treads this ground very lightsly. Jonathon knows what he has.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much, Gungalo!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is really a mixed up affair isn't it?
Two love triangles instead of one. Interesting. It is amazing how you tell the story in poem form and do such a remarkable job, Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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This is really a mixed up affair isn't it?
Two love triangles instead of one. Interesting. It is amazing how you tell the story in poem form and do such a remarkable job, Nancy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much, Nancy!
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Dossie,
This is an excellent and suspenseful continuation of the story with the face to face confrontation between Mary Ann and Leslie Ann. Mary Ann's offer of freedom to Jonathan added tension to the events. I enjoyed the read from beginning to the end.
Curtis
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Dossie,
This is an excellent and suspenseful continuation of the story with the face to face confrontation between Mary Ann and Leslie Ann. Mary Ann's offer of freedom to Jonathan added tension to the events. I enjoyed the read from beginning to the end.
Curtis
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Curtis!!