Leslie Ann's Exploits
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Has Leslie Ann nabbed Jonathan?"A spoiled young lady who learns the hard way
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Comment from country ranch writer
OH WHAT A TANGLE WEB THEY WEAVE WHEN THEY PLOT TO DECEIVE,THEY ARE BOTH IN FOR A SHOCK WHEN ALL THIS COMES ABOUT THEY WILL BE WISHING THEY HADN'T LET THEIR VANITY GET IN THE WAY.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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OH WHAT A TANGLE WEB THEY WEAVE WHEN THEY PLOT TO DECEIVE,THEY ARE BOTH IN FOR A SHOCK WHEN ALL THIS COMES ABOUT THEY WILL BE WISHING THEY HADN'T LET THEIR VANITY GET IN THE WAY.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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It seems you enjoyed this part and it warms my heart. Thanks so much for your insight!
Comment from God's Writer
A very well written tale my friend. You have a very vivid imagination. I felt like I was right in the middle of it. Thank you very much.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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A very well written tale my friend. You have a very vivid imagination. I felt like I was right in the middle of it. Thank you very much.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for your complimentary and encouraging review!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I lovvve how the women are plotting against each other. BUt surely Jonathan didn't write that note. Thomas did, to get back at Leslie,right? I hope so. :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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I lovvve how the women are plotting against each other. BUt surely Jonathan didn't write that note. Thomas did, to get back at Leslie,right? I hope so. :)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thomas is not too bright. Mary Ann should have gone at it alone.
Comment from chasennov
Leslie Ann's Exploits. 'Has Leslie Ann Nabbed Jonathan?' I liked the poem and enjoyed reading every word you wrote. I thought your Narrative was excellent. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Leslie Ann's Exploits. 'Has Leslie Ann Nabbed Jonathan?' I liked the poem and enjoyed reading every word you wrote. I thought your Narrative was excellent. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for your complimentary and encouraging review!
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You're always welcome.
Comment from dmt1967
A woman scorned is a dangerous woman very well written I like the way the two woman are plotting I hope they get him back as well thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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A woman scorned is a dangerous woman very well written I like the way the two woman are plotting I hope they get him back as well thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks, dmt1967. I appreciate your comments and rating!
Comment from Spitfire
Wow! Nothing like a fight between two girls, both with claws out. You give just enough information to keep readers curious. What is the wrapping that will give her Jonathan?
And what does Mary Ann plan. Sounds like Desperate Vixens.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Wow! Nothing like a fight between two girls, both with claws out. You give just enough information to keep readers curious. What is the wrapping that will give her Jonathan?
And what does Mary Ann plan. Sounds like Desperate Vixens.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Spitfire. I love it that you are enjoying my Leslie Ann saga! She will soon have an experience she will likely remember for a long time.
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Can't wait to read what your wicked mind has dreamed up. :-)
Comment from Curly Girly
The story poem sounds dangerous. Things are heating up and possibly something criminal is planned? Maybe things are going to go wrong?
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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The story poem sounds dangerous. Things are heating up and possibly something criminal is planned? Maybe things are going to go wrong?
Comment Written 23-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Yes, they are going to go terribly wrong! Stay tuned. Thanks so much, Curly Girly for stopping by and rating this piece.
Comment from adewpearl
Good use of abcb rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to keep the story flowing
a wrapping laying on her - lying
good consonance of F sounds in flaunt their affair
good alliteration in your final line
your story continues to be intriguing :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Good use of abcb rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to keep the story flowing
a wrapping laying on her - lying
good consonance of F sounds in flaunt their affair
good alliteration in your final line
your story continues to be intriguing :-) Brooke
Comment Written 23-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Brooke! I appreciate your encouraging and support
Comment from Twilightspire
What an excellent way to write a story. I love that it is written almost like a poem. The characters all stood out very well, without any of the traditional story tools (dialogue and what not).
There was no spag that I saw, nor advice that I would offer. This was fantastically written and very imaginative. I'm eager to see what kind of trouble Leslie Ann has cooked up in future installments.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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What an excellent way to write a story. I love that it is written almost like a poem. The characters all stood out very well, without any of the traditional story tools (dialogue and what not).
There was no spag that I saw, nor advice that I would offer. This was fantastically written and very imaginative. I'm eager to see what kind of trouble Leslie Ann has cooked up in future installments.
-T.J.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Twilightspire! This started out as a poem, but I believed Leslie Ann had much more to say, and my has she taken me on a trip - LOL. I appreciate this loving review!
Comment from sunnilicious
I'm not really happy about college kids mixing stuff. And label switching too. She's sounds like the perfect girlfriend for that MIT misfit. Thomas and Leslie Ann... I hope they start dating properly, dinner / movies... once per week for 6-months. Then, an engagement. I met someone on the plane, her daughter was 22yrs old and never asked out on a date. I thought that was sad. Socialization of the sexes seems to have changed dramatically over the past couple decades. I like Leslie Ann but she needs a reality check for that behavior. I'm just saying stuff, but still single. Wonderful work.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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I'm not really happy about college kids mixing stuff. And label switching too. She's sounds like the perfect girlfriend for that MIT misfit. Thomas and Leslie Ann... I hope they start dating properly, dinner / movies... once per week for 6-months. Then, an engagement. I met someone on the plane, her daughter was 22yrs old and never asked out on a date. I thought that was sad. Socialization of the sexes seems to have changed dramatically over the past couple decades. I like Leslie Ann but she needs a reality check for that behavior. I'm just saying stuff, but still single. Wonderful work.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thanks, sunni.Leslie Ann is a microcosm of many young ones out there today, they aren't really bad, they've just not gotten the parenting they should have received. Thanks for this well thought-out review, I appreciate it!