Creepy Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "A Child's Cry"A touch of Fear
12 total reviews
Comment from persevere
I love it! I am always trying to source the noises I hear.A child's cry is daunting especially when you cannot attend to the problem. You have portrayed the haunting aspect so well, particularly in the free verse at the end.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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I love it! I am always trying to source the noises I hear.A child's cry is daunting especially when you cannot attend to the problem. You have portrayed the haunting aspect so well, particularly in the free verse at the end.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you persevere.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
This is a very touching poem and it is well-written. it definitely leaves the reader with food for thought. If we loved mankind as God there would be no hungry or homeless children. since you said you love music and this song ties kind into your them i thought you might have 4 minutes to enjoy it. Our pastor, yes a man of color, wrote and arranged the sone, if I remember correctly. Janie took pictures form church activities and did a slide show to it. I hope you enjoy. god loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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This is a very touching poem and it is well-written. it definitely leaves the reader with food for thought. If we loved mankind as God there would be no hungry or homeless children. since you said you love music and this song ties kind into your them i thought you might have 4 minutes to enjoy it. Our pastor, yes a man of color, wrote and arranged the sone, if I remember correctly. Janie took pictures form church activities and did a slide show to it. I hope you enjoy. god loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you Evelyn. Great song. Wonderful pictures.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is an excellent poem written about the disturbing cries of children in the night. Nobody can get any rest while that happens - and then the reader is left wondering why?
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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This is an excellent poem written about the disturbing cries of children in the night. Nobody can get any rest while that happens - and then the reader is left wondering why?
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you Curly Girll. Yes, you got it.
Comment from 9999pool
Why babies cry indeed? There may be many reasons but definitely due to a need for attention of either hunger, service or affection (of being unwell).
Beautiful Triolet followed by a free verse.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Why babies cry indeed? There may be many reasons but definitely due to a need for attention of either hunger, service or affection (of being unwell).
Beautiful Triolet followed by a free verse.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks Ritchie. Very insightful review, as usual.
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Welcome, cheers, Ritchie. Have a great weekend and try to get away from crying babies - they do irritate at time, smiles!
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from twinklepoems
Hi, I think the Triolet was a good form to put this poem in. I have been working with senryu and in the class and some people have attempted to write about child molestation in senryu form and, for me it doesn't work. (hard to find irony or satire in it) In the triolet with the repetition there is a natural haunting repetition, the theme stays in your head (as it should) without trivializing it. I like your refrain "I heard a child crying in the night" that line alone sticks with the reader. Then you have no idea where the cry comes from so, that is disconcerting and then you lead the reader on your journey to wonder were, why? I enjoyed this.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Hi, I think the Triolet was a good form to put this poem in. I have been working with senryu and in the class and some people have attempted to write about child molestation in senryu form and, for me it doesn't work. (hard to find irony or satire in it) In the triolet with the repetition there is a natural haunting repetition, the theme stays in your head (as it should) without trivializing it. I like your refrain "I heard a child crying in the night" that line alone sticks with the reader. Then you have no idea where the cry comes from so, that is disconcerting and then you lead the reader on your journey to wonder were, why? I enjoyed this.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you very much for your wonderful review and comments.
Comment from Charmane
A CHILD'S UNYIELDING CRY AT ANYTIME IS SO HARD TO HANDLE.
AS PARENTS WE MUST PROVIDE A GENTLE LOVING CONVERSATION AND AS PARENTS WE MUST ALWAYS NURTURE AND EDUCATE THEM.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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A CHILD'S UNYIELDING CRY AT ANYTIME IS SO HARD TO HANDLE.
AS PARENTS WE MUST PROVIDE A GENTLE LOVING CONVERSATION AND AS PARENTS WE MUST ALWAYS NURTURE AND EDUCATE THEM.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Thank you Charmane. Your words are wise and counsel is sound.
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YOU ARE SO VERY WELCOME.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend it reads very well and has so much feeling coming through the poem I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend it reads very well and has so much feeling coming through the poem I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Thank you Jill.
Comment from dmt1967
I hate to hear child cry I think it is pitiful very well written the picture matches the poem very well and I like the wording thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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I hate to hear child cry I think it is pitiful very well written the picture matches the poem very well and I like the wording thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Thank you dmt. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from robina1978
I loved the drawing and then your well written Triolet with strong repeating lines. If you hear a child cry at night you don't know why. Like you wrote at the end.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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I loved the drawing and then your well written Triolet with strong repeating lines. If you hear a child cry at night you don't know why. Like you wrote at the end.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Thank you Ine. I appreciate the nice review. You have a good week, Tom.
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most welcome Tom, Ine
Comment from NicciFaye
Lovely. The cries keep me up sometimes. I have an 11yr old who constantly remind her how fortunate she is; she cries at times too but usually they are crocodile tears. Lol
Once again great work.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Lovely. The cries keep me up sometimes. I have an 11yr old who constantly remind her how fortunate she is; she cries at times too but usually they are crocodile tears. Lol
Once again great work.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Thank you Nicci, an 11 year old. Kids need to be reassured.
