Leslie Ann's Exploits
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Leslie Ann goes to room 10"A spoiled young lady who learns the hard way
23 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Jonathan is such a sneaky man. I never liked him. Leslie Ann is in for some heartbreak. Love the details. This chapter felt like it was completely all real. Nicely done. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 11-May-2013
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Jonathan is such a sneaky man. I never liked him. Leslie Ann is in for some heartbreak. Love the details. This chapter felt like it was completely all real. Nicely done. Excellent work.
Comment Written 08-May-2013
reply by the author on 11-May-2013
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Thanks so much, Sunni!
Comment from chasennov
Leslie Ann's Exploits.' Leslie Ann Goes To Room 10.' Who knows if she will survive the cadavers, we hope to find out in your next installment. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Leslie Ann's Exploits.' Leslie Ann Goes To Room 10.' Who knows if she will survive the cadavers, we hope to find out in your next installment. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Chasennov, I appreciate your continuing support and this encouraging review. Thanks so much! Dossie
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Entirely my pleasure, Dossie.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Titan,
Oh that evil Jonathan who went and set her up. This makes you feel Leslie Anne's terror, it is palpable and real. Well done.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Dear Titan,
Oh that evil Jonathan who went and set her up. This makes you feel Leslie Anne's terror, it is palpable and real. Well done.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 26-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for a stellar and encouraging review! Dossie
Comment from EmberSnowcat
Wow! Now I'm terrified. I have an unhealthy fear of zombies and if I was locked up in the anatomy lab with all those bodies, I would die from fright thinking they would rise and eat me! I love how you make this a story poem. It's amazing work, and the story plot is just as awesome. I think I like this one better then the last chapter LOL. Great job!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Wow! Now I'm terrified. I have an unhealthy fear of zombies and if I was locked up in the anatomy lab with all those bodies, I would die from fright thinking they would rise and eat me! I love how you make this a story poem. It's amazing work, and the story plot is just as awesome. I think I like this one better then the last chapter LOL. Great job!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, EmberSnowcat. I would be terrified, too. I don't know where these ideas are coming from because I am not a very brave person that way. I'm enjoying writing it however. Thanks so much for your encouraging comments, I appreciate them!
Comment from adewpearl
strong use of abcb rhyming
smirk/stomp/assail - lots of excellent action verbs to add drama to your story
You create an atmosphere of suspense/danger/tension extremely well
It is easy to imagine her terror in the room of cadavers
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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strong use of abcb rhyming
smirk/stomp/assail - lots of excellent action verbs to add drama to your story
You create an atmosphere of suspense/danger/tension extremely well
It is easy to imagine her terror in the room of cadavers
Brooke
Comment Written 26-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Brooke, for continuing to following Leslie Ann's exploits, I appreciate it!
Comment from Spitfire
What a wonderful way for mousy Mary Ann to get revenge. Great description of her response to the staring cadavers. I can't wait to see if this changes her for the worst ever! Great story poem.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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What a wonderful way for mousy Mary Ann to get revenge. Great description of her response to the staring cadavers. I can't wait to see if this changes her for the worst ever! Great story poem.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thanks for this great review, I appreciate it!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Goodness gracious .... is Jonathan planning to have her go insane after a night with cadavers??
Most interesting, Titan! :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Goodness gracious .... is Jonathan planning to have her go insane after a night with cadavers??
Most interesting, Titan! :)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for your support and encouragement!
Comment from country ranch writer
WHERE WAS MOUSEY MARYANN WHILE THIS WAS GOING ON WAS SHE GETTING PAY BACK OF HER OWN. HOW WILL LESLIE ANN BE AFTER SPENDING THE NIGHT IN THE LAB. WILL SHE BE A CERTIFIABLE BASKET CASE?
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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WHERE WAS MOUSEY MARYANN WHILE THIS WAS GOING ON WAS SHE GETTING PAY BACK OF HER OWN. HOW WILL LESLIE ANN BE AFTER SPENDING THE NIGHT IN THE LAB. WILL SHE BE A CERTIFIABLE BASKET CASE?
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Country ranch writer, whereas I don't mind getting four stars if warranted, I still like to know what could I have done to make this chapter better? Thank you. Dossie
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SORRY MY FAULT HIT WRONG ONE SORRY
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No problem, thanks a million. Be blessed!
Comment from gene roush
This is a remarkable genre.
The story flows well - at times I forget the rhyme scheme, yet it definitely influences the view of the scene.
The character is well drawn,
Nice job -- thanks for sharing
gene
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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This is a remarkable genre.
The story flows well - at times I forget the rhyme scheme, yet it definitely influences the view of the scene.
The character is well drawn,
Nice job -- thanks for sharing
gene
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for your complimentary and encouraging review!
Comment from steevie
That was sinister for sure, who ever came up with the plan to stick her with cadavers.
Mind you, the cadavers have about as much warmth as Leslie Ann does. LMAO
Awesome write, Dossie. Looking forward to more.. Hugs steve
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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That was sinister for sure, who ever came up with the plan to stick her with cadavers.
Mind you, the cadavers have about as much warmth as Leslie Ann does. LMAO
Awesome write, Dossie. Looking forward to more.. Hugs steve
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Steevie. I'm going to try to respond in a more timely manner in the future.