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Comment from Maguy Daoud
Lovely as always my friend, I want to ask you a question, did you learned the poetic structure and kinds here in fanstory or you've studied the poetic literature out there because your explanation is so good and comprehensive.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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Lovely as always my friend, I want to ask you a question, did you learned the poetic structure and kinds here in fanstory or you've studied the poetic literature out there because your explanation is so good and comprehensive.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2013
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Thank you Maguy. I learned it here on FanStory., never been formally trained.
Comment from ravenblack
Ahhh, Lynyrd Skynyrd. I feel like holding my lighter up for an encore. They 're-united with who is left and really, your poem is what they should be playing.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Ahhh, Lynyrd Skynyrd. I feel like holding my lighter up for an encore. They 're-united with who is left and really, your poem is what they should be playing.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thank you Ravenblack. That's a wonderful compliment.
Comment from NicciFaye
Very nicely written Treischel...truly....I love the whole worn-out-son-of-a-gun....to seek my pot of gold and the lat stanza...well written and always creative from you.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Very nicely written Treischel...truly....I love the whole worn-out-son-of-a-gun....to seek my pot of gold and the lat stanza...well written and always creative from you.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thank you Nicci. I alway keep trying.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Excellent poetry expressing an indomitable spirit in beautiful figurative language. To many retirement is the end of life worth living. I salute you for trying the new;
thoughts,images,poetic forms, wonders of nature etc; Being retired I will try to emulate your example as expressed here.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Excellent poetry expressing an indomitable spirit in beautiful figurative language. To many retirement is the end of life worth living. I salute you for trying the new;
thoughts,images,poetic forms, wonders of nature etc; Being retired I will try to emulate your example as expressed here.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thank you Preston. I think you already do.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Like it? I absolutely LOVED it! Such an inspirational message, one that anyone, not just retirees, can relate to quite easily.
We all chose to reach higher, climb faster, go harder than we ever had before, at times. What separates the successful from the one's that aren't successful is that they never stop trying, pushing, scratching and clawing to be the best that they can be.
I can see why you are successful. Messages like the one you've written here make it very apparent...
Dean~
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Like it? I absolutely LOVED it! Such an inspirational message, one that anyone, not just retirees, can relate to quite easily.
We all chose to reach higher, climb faster, go harder than we ever had before, at times. What separates the successful from the one's that aren't successful is that they never stop trying, pushing, scratching and clawing to be the best that they can be.
I can see why you are successful. Messages like the one you've written here make it very apparent...
Dean~
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Wow! Dean, I am blown away with your review and am very humbled by your words. It is a great honor to receive these stars and I want you to know in appreciate it very much.
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It's such an inspirational message! Especially for a retiree like me...
Comment from sunnilicious
That poem came out wonderful. Good flow of rhythm. Nice simple and easy to understand rhymes. You followed the poetic form and it worked out great. Excellent.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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That poem came out wonderful. Good flow of rhythm. Nice simple and easy to understand rhymes. You followed the poetic form and it worked out great. Excellent.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I like the new form. It is very expressive. Thanks for the introduction.
Comment from barleygirl
Bravo! You've done a great job following a complicated format, while also conveying a lot of feeling & everything flows well, too! I really love your message & I think it can be inspiring to many retirees. I read a poem earlier by someone who sounded so bored & depressed in her retirement, I wish she could see her life as you've shown in your poem! You are to be admired for such an awesome poem!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Bravo! You've done a great job following a complicated format, while also conveying a lot of feeling & everything flows well, too! I really love your message & I think it can be inspiring to many retirees. I read a poem earlier by someone who sounded so bored & depressed in her retirement, I wish she could see her life as you've shown in your poem! You are to be admired for such an awesome poem!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you barleybitl. You comments make me happy!
Comment from jjstar
Great job on the Roundabout. I've often wondered the same. My husband is getting ready to retire and wants nothing more than to lie in a hammock on a beach somewhere drinking boat drinks. I wonder how long that will last.
My mother retired many years ago, but still works her butt off fundraising for our local college, volunteering at Habitat for Humanity. She's got her fingers in just about every pot.
I think retirement is what you make it. So go for it! Do whatever you can, whenever you can.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Great job on the Roundabout. I've often wondered the same. My husband is getting ready to retire and wants nothing more than to lie in a hammock on a beach somewhere drinking boat drinks. I wonder how long that will last.
My mother retired many years ago, but still works her butt off fundraising for our local college, volunteering at Habitat for Humanity. She's got her fingers in just about every pot.
I think retirement is what you make it. So go for it! Do whatever you can, whenever you can.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks jjstar. Yes, exactly.
Comment from SteveY
Nicely done. A man an poem after my own heart. I have always wanted to learn to fly, but it's alwyas been too expensive, but I fly with my mind anyway!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Nicely done. A man an poem after my own heart. I have always wanted to learn to fly, but it's alwyas been too expensive, but I fly with my mind anyway!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks SteveY. Me too, so far.
