thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Boys will be boys"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
2 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a cute poem about mischievous boys. I think you mean 'breathe' and not 'breath' in line 8. Check punctuation in that area, too.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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This is a cute poem about mischievous boys. I think you mean 'breathe' and not 'breath' in line 8. Check punctuation in that area, too.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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thanks for pointing that out I am just starting to get this computer thing down I wonder if I
could find a way to go back and fix it
Comment from DanielEkine
A nice job by the author. Though it fails to read more as a poem, but definitely a dairy or story.
My best part.
"They were so cute, nice, clean and white,
now I see them and it's a scary sight.
Covered in mud from head to toes,
how can they breath, where is their nose? "
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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A nice job by the author. Though it fails to read more as a poem, but definitely a dairy or story.
My best part.
"They were so cute, nice, clean and white,
now I see them and it's a scary sight.
Covered in mud from head to toes,
how can they breath, where is their nose? "
Comment Written 29-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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thanks for the review just found out that I left the e off of breathe this computer thing is all new to me
