The Old Witch House
A daring young man makes a fatal mistake34 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Another scary story. I love it.
Excellent entry for the 'Use These Words writing prompt Contest'.
I like the concrete witch and boy images easy to visualize.
You used the words as requested.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Another scary story. I love it.
Excellent entry for the 'Use These Words writing prompt Contest'.
I like the concrete witch and boy images easy to visualize.
You used the words as requested.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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This one is from way back. I entered but alas was not good enough. I appreciate the nod. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
This is a real horror thriller story. It seems you've been on FanStory for a lot of years. I think I was here when you first released this story but I took a nine year leave of absence so somehow I don't remember you from back then.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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This is a real horror thriller story. It seems you've been on FanStory for a lot of years. I think I was here when you first released this story but I took a nine year leave of absence so somehow I don't remember you from back then.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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There were a lot of people I missed the first go around. I took a multi year hiatus as well. Thanks for this awesome review. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Well done Gretchen,
a truly terrifying tale. How do you sleep at night? I bet you were a fan of The Twilight Zone. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Well done Gretchen,
a truly terrifying tale. How do you sleep at night? I bet you were a fan of The Twilight Zone. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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I liked The Night Stalker. And the Sixth Sense (television show not movie) . I like the made up monsters and witches, not the man with an ax. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from jessizero
You have revived yet another intriguing tale! I think I liked the previous one better, but this one was excellent, as well. I see you used the words required. Great job! Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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You have revived yet another intriguing tale! I think I liked the previous one better, but this one was excellent, as well. I see you used the words required. Great job! Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate you're kindness. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
You write the best stories. You never cease to amaze me with your wonderful imagination. Naturally, I thought he was going to prove everyone wrong about the witch. Great surprise ending.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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You write the best stories. You never cease to amaze me with your wonderful imagination. Naturally, I thought he was going to prove everyone wrong about the witch. Great surprise ending.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you. I'm so glad you can enjoy my writing. That hasn't always Bern the case. Lol. Lots of people think I should be on medication. Maybe I should but not just yet. Gretchen
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Don't listen to them.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can see this was a writing prompt entry when it first came out. It's very good. Thank you for reposting it.
If I didn't go inside the witch's house this was all for naught. (comma after 'house')
I built the bed of sticks and kindling, and per her request, (as per her request)
"No lasses for you, lad," she laughed. (lad." She laughed)
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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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I can see this was a writing prompt entry when it first came out. It's very good. Thank you for reposting it.
If I didn't go inside the witch's house this was all for naught. (comma after 'house')
I built the bed of sticks and kindling, and per her request, (as per her request)
"No lasses for you, lad," she laughed. (lad." She laughed)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Barbara. Glad you could enjoy this. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
Another lovely one. Well done. Bit scary but there's a relentless pace about it that takes him, and us, to the inevitable demise. Great writing, again.
John
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Another lovely one. Well done. Bit scary but there's a relentless pace about it that takes him, and us, to the inevitable demise. Great writing, again.
John
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thanks, John. This was a tad darker than normal. Gretchen
Comment from Julie Lau
Congratulations! You have done a great job with this spooky story, incorporating all the required words seamlessly. It sounds like Madam Witchy scores more victims than she can wholly consume, with the smell of rotten meat hanging around. More black cats needed?
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Congratulations! You have done a great job with this spooky story, incorporating all the required words seamlessly. It sounds like Madam Witchy scores more victims than she can wholly consume, with the smell of rotten meat hanging around. More black cats needed?
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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She might be in between housekeepers. Lol. Thanks so much for this stellar rating and nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Pantygynt
This was well done and a fine example of the working of the show don't tell technique achieved in most cases by skilful use of dialogue, first between the three young people and latterly between the witch and the first person narrator.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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This was well done and a fine example of the working of the show don't tell technique achieved in most cases by skilful use of dialogue, first between the three young people and latterly between the witch and the first person narrator.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this poor lad trusted the wrong person here and is paying for it. Being brave is also about being astute and he forgot about that when drinking her potion, a fine chilling horror post Gretchen, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Oh my goodness, this poor lad trusted the wrong person here and is paying for it. Being brave is also about being astute and he forgot about that when drinking her potion, a fine chilling horror post Gretchen, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much. He won't make the same mistake twice. Lol. Thanks for this. Gretchen
