Light of my Life
A free verse poem about love and admiration for someone spec16 total reviews
Comment from Starlit Ink
There is a lot of imagery in this poem about light and love. Love is like a light when it is the right one. Loved the misty sunsets and the night glowing with meteors. You used imagination and a tender heart to write a touching and romantic love poem.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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There is a lot of imagery in this poem about light and love. Love is like a light when it is the right one. Loved the misty sunsets and the night glowing with meteors. You used imagination and a tender heart to write a touching and romantic love poem.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your comments and review of five stars. I appreciate it.
Nichola
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a wonderful romantic poem. My favorite part:
Drinking quietness
Sleeping in misty sunsets
Curved around your gentle body
Kisses upon your neck.
~teresa~
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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This is a wonderful romantic poem. My favorite part:
Drinking quietness
Sleeping in misty sunsets
Curved around your gentle body
Kisses upon your neck.
~teresa~
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the five star review. I am glad you enjoyed my poem!
Nichola
Comment from MarjorieAnne
Compliments for this outpouring of personal emotion and affection. Some words and phrases, such as "compete with compassion" and "meteors" are refreshingly original. Others, like "subsequent" and "thoughtlessness/ misunderstanding are too heavy and prosaic.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Compliments for this outpouring of personal emotion and affection. Some words and phrases, such as "compete with compassion" and "meteors" are refreshingly original. Others, like "subsequent" and "thoughtlessness/ misunderstanding are too heavy and prosaic.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Sometimes something very beautiful and sacred can be threatened by misunderstanding and the thoughtlessness of people. I wanted to include that to show thee fragility of the love. I thought about replacing the word thoughtlessness with imprudence, but it does not quite have the same meaning and also I wanted the word to poetically complement the words "restless guests." Poetically, it sounds better that way. Is this the only reason you gave me four stars?
Thank you for your review.
Nichola
Comment from Cookie333
One imagines a 'second skin' but much deeper even than that. The one who completes, the one who makes whole. This one flowed well,
thank you for sharing,
karen
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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One imagines a 'second skin' but much deeper even than that. The one who completes, the one who makes whole. This one flowed well,
thank you for sharing,
karen
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you Karen!
Nichola
Comment from Gert sherwood
Good day Nichola
I must say you know how to show the reader how the one you love--lights up your life, espaciaally when you said--
Nothing can compete with your
Compassion,
Your soul light glows
Lighting my night with meteors
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Good day Nichola
I must say you know how to show the reader how the one you love--lights up your life, espaciaally when you said--
Nothing can compete with your
Compassion,
Your soul light glows
Lighting my night with meteors
Gert
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you for reviewing and reading my poem.
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You are welcome Nichola
Gert
Comment from Zinnia48
This is a great start, and the person who inspired it must be incredibly pleased! you convey your intense feelings. However much of it could be re-imagined with more creative language. My writing teachers are always returning my poems and telling me that they are great first drafts, so I understand how disconcerting that might be to hear. I'd love to see this poem again after you tinker with it a bit.
Favorite lines: forest of my mind//Drinking quietness
Get lost in your rapture
Lost in the covers of your humanness
Thanks for sharing this with us! Caroline
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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This is a great start, and the person who inspired it must be incredibly pleased! you convey your intense feelings. However much of it could be re-imagined with more creative language. My writing teachers are always returning my poems and telling me that they are great first drafts, so I understand how disconcerting that might be to hear. I'd love to see this poem again after you tinker with it a bit.
Favorite lines: forest of my mind//Drinking quietness
Get lost in your rapture
Lost in the covers of your humanness
Thanks for sharing this with us! Caroline
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review.
Nichola
Comment from barkingdog
There is a definite sense of sincerity about this poem. I appreciate your sharing your feelings about the love in your heart.
The following has lovely 's' consonance, adding melody to your free verse:
'Misty sunsets
Our soul searching moments
Never to be replaced by thoughtlessness
Misunderstanding from restless guests'
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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There is a definite sense of sincerity about this poem. I appreciate your sharing your feelings about the love in your heart.
The following has lovely 's' consonance, adding melody to your free verse:
'Misty sunsets
Our soul searching moments
Never to be replaced by thoughtlessness
Misunderstanding from restless guests'
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Yes, it is very sincere. I am glad that was projected. Thank you for noticing the consonance. Thanks for your review.
Nichola
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a very gentle love poem for someone you obviously think a lot of. I like the line 'Kiss my lips gingerly as I remove - Outer layers of my personality - Exposing to you alone - My soul' - lovely. A nice poem for the person you love. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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This is a very gentle love poem for someone you obviously think a lot of. I like the line 'Kiss my lips gingerly as I remove - Outer layers of my personality - Exposing to you alone - My soul' - lovely. A nice poem for the person you love. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your wonderful review! Nichola
Comment from ravenblack
You are the light of my life- I was so prepared to roll my eyes at this one as I can't help but thinking about that song. But as it rolled on deeper into a forest replete with meteors streaking the darkness with light, all that came through is an abiding love.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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You are the light of my life- I was so prepared to roll my eyes at this one as I can't help but thinking about that song. But as it rolled on deeper into a forest replete with meteors streaking the darkness with light, all that came through is an abiding love.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from Titanx9
What a soulful and lovely poem! You have described a love that is all-encompassing and one that has had its ups and downs, but in the end, it's still the light of your life, the love of your heart. This is an "ah" poem! Well done!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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What a soulful and lovely poem! You have described a love that is all-encompassing and one that has had its ups and downs, but in the end, it's still the light of your life, the love of your heart. This is an "ah" poem! Well done!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thank you Titanx9.
