thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "No Competition"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
12 total reviews
Comment from abbasjoy
Tears spring to my eyes as I am writing this review. Such a powerful testimony about prayer, and choosing to go to the Saviour for help. He is the one who has all the right answers, and is eager to forgive even the unlovely.
You chose wisely.
A well written poem, revealing the raw emotions of one who chose to love the One who first loved her.
Be blessed.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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Tears spring to my eyes as I am writing this review. Such a powerful testimony about prayer, and choosing to go to the Saviour for help. He is the one who has all the right answers, and is eager to forgive even the unlovely.
You chose wisely.
A well written poem, revealing the raw emotions of one who chose to love the One who first loved her.
Be blessed.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and kindness,I am a very blessed woman and know it.God is good.
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
To scared to say a word - Too scared
Jesus, if - add the comma for direct address
if i'm going to die - I'm
good alliteration in fell to the floor
a thoughtful poem about how faith can help a person stand up to any bad situation in order to change one's life around :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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solid use of rhyming couplets
To scared to say a word - Too scared
Jesus, if - add the comma for direct address
if i'm going to die - I'm
good alliteration in fell to the floor
a thoughtful poem about how faith can help a person stand up to any bad situation in order to change one's life around :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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Thanks for the review and helpful comments,I'll go back and correct them.
Comment from cinderbella
This one could have been written about me, and it touched me very deeply. "I thought you were mine" is so revealing, for my ex treated me like I was his possession. Extremely well-written and flows nicely. For me, the message says, we cannot belong to another human being, for we are His. The artwork you chose was perfect. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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This one could have been written about me, and it touched me very deeply. "I thought you were mine" is so revealing, for my ex treated me like I was his possession. Extremely well-written and flows nicely. For me, the message says, we cannot belong to another human being, for we are His. The artwork you chose was perfect. :) Sandra
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you
Comment from joneau2
Whew, what a mixed emotional poem worded so eloquently, and full of feelings. You evoked a feeling of thanks for being saved, adoration of God for answering your prayers and salvation. Then, you introduce the mundane ... the sense of sadness when your husband agrees to the divorce. Very well done.
Oh, one catch. "To scared to say a word ..." - To s/b Too. :)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Whew, what a mixed emotional poem worded so eloquently, and full of feelings. You evoked a feeling of thanks for being saved, adoration of God for answering your prayers and salvation. Then, you introduce the mundane ... the sense of sadness when your husband agrees to the divorce. Very well done.
Oh, one catch. "To scared to say a word ..." - To s/b Too. :)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you
Comment from mickbey
You did follow the prompt well in this poem, it brought out the darker side of love, love gone wrong, strong images and graphic emotions, it brought out inner and outer difficulties, nice work, good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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You did follow the prompt well in this poem, it brought out the darker side of love, love gone wrong, strong images and graphic emotions, it brought out inner and outer difficulties, nice work, good luck.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thanks you
Comment from amanda98653
A very deep and spiritual poem. When there's love, the existence of pain can very well be inevitable.Sigh.
It's often best to move on
God Bless
-AJ
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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A very deep and spiritual poem. When there's love, the existence of pain can very well be inevitable.Sigh.
It's often best to move on
God Bless
-AJ
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you
Comment from Jewell McChesney
She left him with his mean streak,that he hid inside
Witch [which] only came out at home where they did reside
To scared to say a word,her mind just thought a prayer,
Jesus if i'm going to die I'm glad you are my savior.
this is pretty good until the last line. It doesnt fit but perhaps you did that on purpose?
I singed [signed] the papers when they came,now we don't share the same name.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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She left him with his mean streak,that he hid inside
Witch [which] only came out at home where they did reside
To scared to say a word,her mind just thought a prayer,
Jesus if i'm going to die I'm glad you are my savior.
this is pretty good until the last line. It doesnt fit but perhaps you did that on purpose?
I singed [signed] the papers when they came,now we don't share the same name.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and pointing out my mistakes,I went back and made the corrections to it. It was to read we don't share the same last name.
Comment from pipersfancy
I singed the papers
I'm wondering if you might have meant, "signed" the papers?
You describe a frightening and anxious moment - glad it had a positive resolve!
PF
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I singed the papers
I'm wondering if you might have meant, "signed" the papers?
You describe a frightening and anxious moment - glad it had a positive resolve!
PF
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review yes I did I really messed up on this one. I did go back and made the corrections to it
Comment from expressions9
This is a captivating poem dear writer. The imagery is vivid and the story flows with good rhyming couplets. A oouple of spags:
(Which) only came out at home where they did reside
(Too) scared to say a word, her mind just thought a prayer,
Jesus if (I'm) going to die I'm glad you are my savior.
It's so sad to hear of experiences like these which many endure. Your poem has conveyed well the lady's emotions.
All the best in the contest!
God bless,
Christine
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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This is a captivating poem dear writer. The imagery is vivid and the story flows with good rhyming couplets. A oouple of spags:
(Which) only came out at home where they did reside
(Too) scared to say a word, her mind just thought a prayer,
Jesus if (I'm) going to die I'm glad you are my savior.
It's so sad to hear of experiences like these which many endure. Your poem has conveyed well the lady's emotions.
All the best in the contest!
God bless,
Christine
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Christine,Thank you for your review and pointing out my mistakes.I went back and made the corrections to it. Thanks
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You're welcome ..
Comment from barkingdog
Your rhyming couplets read well and have a nice tempo to tell this story of a woman in peril from her estranged husband. She was spared when she turned to God.
Nicely done.
One spelling correction:
-Witch(Which) only came out
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Your rhyming couplets read well and have a nice tempo to tell this story of a woman in peril from her estranged husband. She was spared when she turned to God.
Nicely done.
One spelling correction:
-Witch(Which) only came out
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and pointing out my mistake I went back and fixed it.blessings to you.
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You're welcome.:) e
