Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Moonshine"A collection of my children's poems
80 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, I must tell you, kiwisteveh, while it is, indeed, nonsensical and very silly, it's also quite good. I could see why it was picked as the winner for the contest.
I caught a strong Dr. Suess-like influence here, or perhaps it's just me. I'm a huge fan of Suess and have every single book he's ever written...
Very well done!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Well, I must tell you, kiwisteveh, while it is, indeed, nonsensical and very silly, it's also quite good. I could see why it was picked as the winner for the contest.
I caught a strong Dr. Suess-like influence here, or perhaps it's just me. I'm a huge fan of Suess and have every single book he's ever written...
Very well done!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thanks, dean.
It is a great honour to be mentioned in the same breath as the late, great Dr Seuss.
Steve
Comment from Areeba Faraz
Absolutely mind blowing. Wonderful characters and a lot of animation. It reminded me of Enid Blyton and took me back to my childhood. However, I think the vocabulary is a little difficult for most children.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Absolutely mind blowing. Wonderful characters and a lot of animation. It reminded me of Enid Blyton and took me back to my childhood. However, I think the vocabulary is a little difficult for most children.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Areeba
Yes I mainly write for grown-up children, but I'll run this past my 5-year old granddaughter when she comes to stay in a couple of days.
Did Enid Blyton write any verse I wonder - I guess you're just referring to the funny characters - maybe Noddy and Bigears could have fitted into the little flat as well....
Steve
Comment from vapros
Steve, this is a wonderful, magical, imaginative, lyrical creation. This cast of strange people might be saved for future use, next time you feel this way. Well done.
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Steve, this is a wonderful, magical, imaginative, lyrical creation. This cast of strange people might be saved for future use, next time you feel this way. Well done.
v
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thank you!
Wow-Wow and Grumpy are alternative names for our two cats - no reason why they might not appear in another poem one day.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Steve. I am Bear Smith and I have just become your newest fan. This is absolutely superb, and a great contest entry. Your rhyme scheme is wonderful, and it looks like you took top honors. Congratulations
Bear
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Hey there Steve. I am Bear Smith and I have just become your newest fan. This is absolutely superb, and a great contest entry. Your rhyme scheme is wonderful, and it looks like you took top honors. Congratulations
Bear
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Hi, Glen.
yes, I sneaked a win here by a narrow margin. I have always had some facility with rhyme and meter, not to mention a liking for nonsense poems....
Steve
Comment from Malerie
Very funny, I read it a few times and it has the perfect name and I like the artwork. Congratulations on the win this is a very creative piece. Thanks for giving me a good evening laugh; could be a children's book?
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Very funny, I read it a few times and it has the perfect name and I like the artwork. Congratulations on the win this is a very creative piece. Thanks for giving me a good evening laugh; could be a children's book?
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Mal
I have a few pieces now that might work in a children's book - I'll work out how to do this publishing thing one day.
Steve
Comment from ELumpkins
It may be nonsense but it is an excellent read. I enjoyed it very much. It must have taken some to come up with this one. An excellent post. Your poem doesn't rhyme but then neither does Grumpy's old mother. Good work
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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It may be nonsense but it is an excellent read. I enjoyed it very much. It must have taken some to come up with this one. An excellent post. Your poem doesn't rhyme but then neither does Grumpy's old mother. Good work
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thank you.
Doesn't rhyme?
Steve
Comment from allborn66
This is a very cute poem. I loved how you worked the "non-sense" in your poem. The tone is appropriate throughout. The picture is cute.
Barbara
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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This is a very cute poem. I loved how you worked the "non-sense" in your poem. The tone is appropriate throughout. The picture is cute.
Barbara
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Barbara.
Steve
Comment from JM daSilva
You made me think about a bunch of friends I had sometime ago. One was into sci-fi and aliens, the other into fantasy, and the other ones were always talking about different stuff like superheroes and many conspiracy theories.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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You made me think about a bunch of friends I had sometime ago. One was into sci-fi and aliens, the other into fantasy, and the other ones were always talking about different stuff like superheroes and many conspiracy theories.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thanks.
Sounds like you have material for a poem right there!
Steve
Comment from kiwijenny
Brilliant .....so goofy so sensical for a nonsensical poem if you know what I mean.....I am so proud you won the contest......well done .thats a huge accomplishment .....
God bless
Kiwijenny
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Brilliant .....so goofy so sensical for a nonsensical poem if you know what I mean.....I am so proud you won the contest......well done .thats a huge accomplishment .....
God bless
Kiwijenny
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Jenny.
You should like my next effort which has a real kiwi flavour via a whole bunch of wetas!
Steve
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Mum made me take a weta to school when I was about 8 . It tore the paper off the jar and started for me...left it on the path and fled
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Well maybe you'd better not read my next poem then - it will be real nightmare territory....
Steve
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This is a fun, nonsense poem. I have only attempted one so far, but you have given me inspiration to try another. This is fun. Well done!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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This is a fun, nonsense poem. I have only attempted one so far, but you have given me inspiration to try another. This is fun. Well done!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thank you - by all means give it a go - there is a certain freedom in not having to make sense - allows you to focus more on rhyme and meter and playing with words.
Steve