Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 91 "Pinching Crabs"My book of poems and stories
11 total reviews
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, poet
This is a fun poem and one, oh so true, for
beach goers. One must avoid the crabs and other
things in the sand while at the beach. you've made me
want to go back to the shore before it gets too cold.
A good poem. Thanks for sharing.
Ray
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Good Evening, poet
This is a fun poem and one, oh so true, for
beach goers. One must avoid the crabs and other
things in the sand while at the beach. you've made me
want to go back to the shore before it gets too cold.
A good poem. Thanks for sharing.
Ray
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for your review and comments.
Comment from adewpearl
Great pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
Good use of enjambment to make this one continuous statement
I like the tone of warning and the strong visual you create :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Great pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
Good use of enjambment to make this one continuous statement
I like the tone of warning and the strong visual you create :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much. I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from Sally Carter
A delightful little 5-7-5. It's rather liberating to have a contest that just focuses on the syllable count, without other rules to work out.
I enjoyed the evocation of senses - I was feeling my toes in the sand, the cold water at my feet, and seeing those creatures walking sideways along the beach.
Nice personification of the crabs. It sounds as if they are very prolific in this place. Or perhaps they are so confident in their claws they know no one will challenge them.
Best wishes for the contest,
Sally
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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A delightful little 5-7-5. It's rather liberating to have a contest that just focuses on the syllable count, without other rules to work out.
I enjoyed the evocation of senses - I was feeling my toes in the sand, the cold water at my feet, and seeing those creatures walking sideways along the beach.
Nice personification of the crabs. It sounds as if they are very prolific in this place. Or perhaps they are so confident in their claws they know no one will challenge them.
Best wishes for the contest,
Sally
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for your review and comments.
Comment from Sueellen11
Ha ha,,,, I guess they do own the beach shore line,,, so blessed I never got pinched by those red claws,,, great entry,, true to count,,,good luck,,blessings,,sueellen
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Ha ha,,,, I guess they do own the beach shore line,,, so blessed I never got pinched by those red claws,,, great entry,, true to count,,,good luck,,blessings,,sueellen
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for your review and comments.
Comment from Always enjoying
The message is clear - the warning is expressed directly. Interesting theme, I like it. Works as a metaphor when you think about it.
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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The message is clear - the warning is expressed directly. Interesting theme, I like it. Works as a metaphor when you think about it.
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Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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There is no rhyme to this type of poem which was stated in the rules for this contest. I thank you for reviewing but would you please redo your review. It would mean a lot. Thanks.
Comment from boxergirl
You have done a good job with your 5-7-5 writing prompt.
The picture compliments the poem and helps us visualize that crab scurrying all over the beach. Yes, watch out for those pinchers! Good job and good luck!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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You have done a good job with your 5-7-5 writing prompt.
The picture compliments the poem and helps us visualize that crab scurrying all over the beach. Yes, watch out for those pinchers! Good job and good luck!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for your review and comments. I do appreciate your time.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the crabs that rule the beach and you have to watch your step. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the crabs that rule the beach and you have to watch your step. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for your review and comments. I do appreciate your time.
Comment from brentman99
Interesting poem. The picture supports it, but one with a whole bunch of crabs would have been even better. Too bad there wasn't a footprint beside the crab.
Thanks for sharing, Brent.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Interesting poem. The picture supports it, but one with a whole bunch of crabs would have been even better. Too bad there wasn't a footprint beside the crab.
Thanks for sharing, Brent.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for your review and comments. I do appreciate your time.
Comment from Silent1rose
I agree those crabs are everywhere. LOL And believe me when I say some are down right fierce little creatures. Great poem. It flowed very well. Thanks for sharing. ~ Rose
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I agree those crabs are everywhere. LOL And believe me when I say some are down right fierce little creatures. Great poem. It flowed very well. Thanks for sharing. ~ Rose
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for your review and comments. I do appreciate your time.
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My pleasure. ~ Rose
Comment from Nosha17
The picture and the words convey the image perfectly. The last line with the crabs owning the beach is definitely a sting in the tail! I would be interested to read other longer poems of yours some time. Commendable.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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The picture and the words convey the image perfectly. The last line with the crabs owning the beach is definitely a sting in the tail! I would be interested to read other longer poems of yours some time. Commendable.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for your review and comments. I do appreciate them.