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Comment from honeytree
I enjoyed reading these words a lot
I particularly liked the words
"withered green leaves dance"
Great entry.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I enjoyed reading these words a lot
I particularly liked the words
"withered green leaves dance"
Great entry.
Honey tree
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
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I am glad you liked the review
I liked reading your writing.
Honey tree
Comment from Dutchie
Wonderful, this well written 5-7-5 poem. A haiku about the approaching Autumn. Well expressed with lovely described imagination. Well done Fia
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Wonderful, this well written 5-7-5 poem. A haiku about the approaching Autumn. Well expressed with lovely described imagination. Well done Fia
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from yhorse
I creates an image in my mind about leaves that are dancing in the breeze. Love the detail it makes it seem to come to life and put on a play inside my head.~yhorse
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I creates an image in my mind about leaves that are dancing in the breeze. Love the detail it makes it seem to come to life and put on a play inside my head.~yhorse
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from sunnilicious
That is the worst type of winter. Good alliteration of W words. Creative and descriptive. Good visual imagery created. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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That is the worst type of winter. Good alliteration of W words. Creative and descriptive. Good visual imagery created. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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thank you!
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
excellent alliteration and assonance in winter wind/withered
vivid detail of setting with strong sensory appeal and good use of personification
Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
excellent alliteration and assonance in winter wind/withered
vivid detail of setting with strong sensory appeal and good use of personification
Brooke
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from Sylvia Page
dry win ter wind swirls 5
a cross hushed bo ny fo rest 7
with ered green leaves dance 5 = 17 syllables. Well done!
Even though it is 3 lines it speaks volumes
Best wishes
Sylvia
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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dry win ter wind swirls 5
a cross hushed bo ny fo rest 7
with ered green leaves dance 5 = 17 syllables. Well done!
Even though it is 3 lines it speaks volumes
Best wishes
Sylvia
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from allborn66
This is a very strong entry. I had only one problem with my mental image, green leaves. Usually the leaves turn colors before they drop, which would be a boney forest. Evergreens typically had needles not leaves, which is why they don't have to drop then in winter. It could just be where I live, but in my mind dropping green leaves is a sign of disease not winter.
Barbara
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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This is a very strong entry. I had only one problem with my mental image, green leaves. Usually the leaves turn colors before they drop, which would be a boney forest. Evergreens typically had needles not leaves, which is why they don't have to drop then in winter. It could just be where I live, but in my mind dropping green leaves is a sign of disease not winter.
Barbara
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from michaelcahill
Meets the strict requirements in every way. I love this depiction of a stark winter. Nice take on the forest as being bony. A striking and accurate image implying so many things, undernourishment amongst them. well done piece, mikey
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Meets the strict requirements in every way. I love this depiction of a stark winter. Nice take on the forest as being bony. A striking and accurate image implying so many things, undernourishment amongst them. well done piece, mikey
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
dry winter wind swirls 'w' allits
across hushed bony forest LOVE 'hushed' 'bony'
withered green leaves dance " 'withered/dance
Meets all strictures. Well done.
Regards:
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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dry winter wind swirls 'w' allits
across hushed bony forest LOVE 'hushed' 'bony'
withered green leaves dance " 'withered/dance
Meets all strictures. Well done.
Regards:
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from livelylinda
Author: excellent 5/7/5 poem about winter wind has met the contest requirements and nicely described the dry (I would have used 'cold') winter wind and its effects on a forest.
Especially like the description, ". . .bony forest. . .". This piece is a contender. livelylinda
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Author: excellent 5/7/5 poem about winter wind has met the contest requirements and nicely described the dry (I would have used 'cold') winter wind and its effects on a forest.
Especially like the description, ". . .bony forest. . .". This piece is a contender. livelylinda
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)