Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

That looks like a bunch of gargoyles in a fountain. If I remember correctly, they're actually suppose to be protectors. Still, great visual imagery. Excellent poem.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014

Thanks Alicia, yes, I used a bit of poetic license..

Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

I like how you took this picture to the extreme with the word choice.

Spewing Devils spit...pretty hardcore..love it. vile wicked demons...can you say more..lol always a pleasure to read your work.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thank you so much NicciFaye.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Was horrified to hear on the evening news some days back that there has been a move to have a statue of Satan placed next to the monument to the Ten Commandments outside the State building in Oklahoma City.

How horrifying! Tt wasn't passed, but who knows what's to come?

Your poem reinforced the mood I've been in since then.

p.s. The signs bode bad ... very American! I guess it's poetic licence on 'bode ill' ... :)

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thanks Sonali, yup, and much more alliterative too.

Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT

Excellent

This is kind of like my "don't play cards with the devil" cause your gonna lose.. Very well written never heard of this format but hell I have never heard of a lot of things lol
KUDOS MR T
TK

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thank you Sir T. Always ready to enlighten you.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

You brilliantly turned a simple ornament into an ode of warning with these powerful words, "spewing Devil's spit." Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thank you rod.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

You have taken a great photo of a fountain, and it has brought about this lovely poem. The words you have used, sit well with the demons that are encased in stone on the fountain itself. A really clever one, Tom. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thank you Sandra, I bet you've seen lots of similar fountains in Spain.

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 09-Jan-2014

Yes, the Spanish really love their fountains. You would think that with the water shortage there, they wouldn't have them, but every village and town has at least two. The cities have many more. x

reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

I bet England seems very drab compared to Spain. I hope you are adjusting OK. Closer to family and friends.

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 09-Jan-2014

Oh, yes. I miss the warmer climate, but my family more that make up for that. There are lots of holidays we can take in the sun though. :)

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

OOOO a little Gothic verse. I can see where the inspiration stirred the poet in you. Good vs evil will always be around us. Well done Treischel. An enjoyable, thought provoking verse. Smiles, Robin :)

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thank you Robin, always good to get your input and appreciation.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi,Treischel,
"Omens" is a good 5-7-5-7-7 poem that adheres to the specified syllable count and expresses coherent thought.
It has good flow, rhyme, figurative language and imagery.
Preston

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thank you Preston.

Comment from amanda98653

Excellent

A great write, Treischel.

I'm not as superstitious as my relatives...but I do believe in karma.

Perfect syllable count

Hugs

Amanda

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thanks Amanda.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

I'm a little shocked- demons in our water fountains, danger to humans...
Certainly a change from the usual topics but written with style and flair for the dark side.
The image perfectly matches the words and adds to an amazing overall effect.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2014

Thanks Shirley, a bit different. Just reacting to the image.