Human Nature
500 words. Hopefully fiction17 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
The future looks a lot like the past. That must be because the human race never really changes. You make that point extremely clear. Good luck to the general. Somewhere, someone will want a leader that will fight. Like you, I would love to have peace. Unfortunately, trusting that it will happen isn't wise.
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The future looks a lot like the past. That must be because the human race never really changes. You make that point extremely clear. Good luck to the general. Somewhere, someone will want a leader that will fight. Like you, I would love to have peace. Unfortunately, trusting that it will happen isn't wise.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
First, re: your author's notes - I concur!
This is a riveting read. Not only do you tell a story that is uncomfortably close to the truth about many of our elected officials, you do it in such a way as to deliver a powerful moral.
Nicely done!
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First, re: your author's notes - I concur!
This is a riveting read. Not only do you tell a story that is uncomfortably close to the truth about many of our elected officials, you do it in such a way as to deliver a powerful moral.
Nicely done!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from in777wr#
This was a very well written story. It made me think that at times we can be over trusting. This story had me glued from beginning to end. Very interesting.
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This was a very well written story. It made me think that at times we can be over trusting. This story had me glued from beginning to end. Very interesting.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Daedalia
This is a good, albeit disturbing, read. The only spag I saw was "insure" s/b "ensure". The only other thing you might want to consider is making "Silence" its own sentence - for emphasis, an exclamation point after it as well.
That said, your story kept my attention throughout. Snow was a naive idealist - sad, really. I especially like the last few words "people who thought man could evolve out of human nature". Excellent ending! Very solid entry.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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This is a good, albeit disturbing, read. The only spag I saw was "insure" s/b "ensure". The only other thing you might want to consider is making "Silence" its own sentence - for emphasis, an exclamation point after it as well.
That said, your story kept my attention throughout. Snow was a naive idealist - sad, really. I especially like the last few words "people who thought man could evolve out of human nature". Excellent ending! Very solid entry.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much. I will fix that, and you're right. Silence! is much better.
Comment from Delores J. Howard
Oh, what can I say. I know--I would give you six stars if I could. This was so good. It could be a movie--or it could be real life (God forbid). You had me from the get-go and you held me to the end. Wonderful piece.
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Oh, what can I say. I know--I would give you six stars if I could. This was so good. It could be a movie--or it could be real life (God forbid). You had me from the get-go and you held me to the end. Wonderful piece.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. In like the moral. Don not expect humans to evolve beyond human nature. At least, not for a long time. We all wish there were no war but we are no where near mature enough for that. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
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I love the story. In like the moral. Don not expect humans to evolve beyond human nature. At least, not for a long time. We all wish there were no war but we are no where near mature enough for that. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from maggieadams
This is beyond good and so realistic for futuristic writing. I wish for peace too, but just look at the Middle East and Iran who have their fingers crossed behind their backs as they "tweak" their nuclear program just a little so all the sanctions can be lifted and they can start building to the destruction of Israel and the
West.
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This is beyond good and so realistic for futuristic writing. I wish for peace too, but just look at the Middle East and Iran who have their fingers crossed behind their backs as they "tweak" their nuclear program just a little so all the sanctions can be lifted and they can start building to the destruction of Israel and the
West.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from A Matter Of Words
You have presented an very interesting, yet disturbing, dilemma warring nations must always face. This is an excellent flash fiction, describing one such moment. Excellent.
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You have presented an very interesting, yet disturbing, dilemma warring nations must always face. This is an excellent flash fiction, describing one such moment. Excellent.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Sylvia Page
An action for peace is rewarded by deceit. I hate to think of what happened to President Snow and her loyal council members. Good story. Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
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An action for peace is rewarded by deceit. I hate to think of what happened to President Snow and her loyal council members. Good story. Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Brilliant! I wish all those foolish peaceniks who want to disarm us and weaken our military could read this. Perhaps we need a hit movie based on this great story to wake people up.
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Brilliant! I wish all those foolish peaceniks who want to disarm us and weaken our military could read this. Perhaps we need a hit movie based on this great story to wake people up.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014