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A Wife's Plea to Fanstory

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Comment from GWinterwin
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What a funny little story, or maybe you are serious. I don't have that problem because my wife is on her computer. If it is a problem I suggest he listen to his wife.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
    No. Just for fun. Well, I hope so anyway. I do listen to her. After twenty eight years I am fairly well trained. Well, a work in progress I guess. mikey
Comment from boxergirl
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Ha!Ha! Love this but it is the end of the week- you guessed it- no sixes. 8-) They said I have to write more so great job mikey

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
    Glad you liked it. Of course this gets a great response and my piece that I spent hours sweating over sits there gathering dust. HAhaha!! Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from rama devi
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I lvoe that you used fanstory as a VERB! Hilarious. What an entertaining read for FS friends. Superb satire.

This is a fun satire and well-told from Mikey's Wifey's POV.

Do tell my the truth:
Did you write it, or did she?


LOL-- And then he announces that he is enjambing the hell out of me. (assonance--lol)


ROTFL:

I had to load him up with Haldol the other night. A "banner advertisement supreme" has got to be part of a delusion of some sort. That is certainly not something that exists in a sane world.

!!!!!!!

Star day Saturday! he he he


A few typos and suggestions:

*with the understanding that he would finally have someone, other than me, (to) read and comment on his little writing projects.

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The problem is that he now does nothing,(no ,) but sit at his computer and "Fanstory".

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He has always been strange(,) anyway.

* Lately(,) though(,) his behavior has become much worse.

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I have to tell you, I(i)t is pretty damn boring to be honest.

* The look in his eyes is a bit frightening(,) to be honest.

*Right now(,) you are the be all and end all of his life.


Knowing you'll fix obvious spag, I'll give five stars in advance, especially since tomorrow is Friday - I woudl not want you feeling 'starless'.

*wink wink*

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    Well, I wrote it. But, she came in, behind my back, and messed up the punctuation to make me look bad! I will fix it. I am pleased that you enjoyed it. It was fun to write. It does amuse me though that I sweat for hours over my "serious" writing and it goes unnoticed, but this gets a wonderful response. Hahaha. Such is the irony of Fanstory. mikey
reply by rama devi on 06-Feb-2014
    Ah yes, Fanstory is full of irony, as is your write. :)
    Love, rd
Comment from Spitfire
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Your wife thinks like me. I have chuckled at the Peter Pan syndrome you have--mikey, indeed.
By the twenty-fifth birthday poem, however, the novelty does wear off a bit. Ha,ha. Face it, you married a cheapskate.
Chanting in bed, then "enjambing the hell out of me."

Not only is the well written, but hilarious with sexual innuendoes : "member cent pump" sounds a little perverted to me.

Wish I had a six left. This is worth a ten! Oh well, a high five will have to suffice.



 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    A high five will do. I can't spend the funny money and he has all the imaginary stars a grown man should ever have. Ha!
Comment from Tatarka2
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This answers so many questions. I think your name is Donna? (Mike posted a nice picture of the two of you). Go, Donna! I say. Fanstory is fun, and encouraging sometimes, but it's a total timesuck, and there has to be more to life. I know. I've gotten sucked in myself. So, get him away! In my humble opinion, he does his best writing when he doesn't post everyday, anyway. Go, Donna! Free Mike! There are, unbelievably, other things in the world besides Fanstory!

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    I will try. I made need power tools. Hahaha. Thank you kindly.
Comment from country ranch writer
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Oh my you did it this time my friend Mikey, you must listen closely for I will not repeat it again. SHHHH DON'T TELL A SOUL I TOLD YOU. You have to do what I do, I spend five to ten minutes with hubby and then later on he wanders down to the office and does the same for me. I get coffee, cookies, soda and all kinds of I love you's. This softens one up for a bit and keeps peace in the kingdom. And by the way only sweet nothings in her ear buddy noting more. She loves you so be gentle with your love kitten. You know you will never get rich on here so stop pulling her leg or I will let the cat out of the bag and you will be "King" no more!

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    I know you know what you are talking about. Okay, more popcorn breaks. We love popcorn. She has already figured out that she can't spend fanstory dollars. Hahaha. I will take your advice. mikey
reply by country ranch writer on 06-Feb-2014
    okay
Comment from MelReyn
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You nailed the character voice so well you had me fooled... until I did a little investigation and looked at the older reviews. I'm envious! The ability to set aside your own 'voice' and use a character's is pure awesome. (And if I may be so bold, it's the whole point of writing fiction.)

Well done. You got my goat. ;)

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    What a wonderful compliment. Thank you so much. It has always been one of my favorite things to do. I used to make my characters be writers or poets so I could write like I thought they would. It made for some interesting pieces and ones that I wouldn't write normally. Great thoughtful review. Big Smile!! mikey
Comment from Sankey
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ha ha ha! Good work Mrs Mikey. So funny, and once again jmate you and I must be twins alw=most ecept I think oyu are thinner than me. Although with all the fried chicken and stuff you eat over there I am not sure. Do you still have your gall bladder? Most Amurrikans don't I believe.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    I am on a buttered popcorn diet. My doctor is horrified. But, it works. That is basically all I eat for the most part. Buttered popcorn. A couple bags fills me up and curbs my appetite. And, I like it!! I have everything but tonsils. They took those out with ether. That's how old I am. Hahaha. mikey
reply by Sankey on 06-Feb-2014
    Did you see my typos in my last to you. Buttered popcorn do you eat the shells too? I am Diabetic so no butter for me :( by the way did you answer when I asked about the bib or the raincoat? You said you had everything so may you got the rain coat too hehe. Can't remember if you said you had kids?
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    Hahaha. Trying to visualize the bib and the raincoat. I'm deducing bib since I don't "Have everything" in that respect! No kids, just me. I eat the half popped ones, my favorite. I lost a lot of weight that way, but that is all I eat. The weight loss helped my aching knees a lot!
reply by Sankey on 07-Feb-2014
    OK we are the same and Medico's are debating whether boys are better to have the bibs again after all these years of proclaiming the "raincoast" the way to go. Got it now?
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
    I think so. HAhaha.
Comment from Darkhorse555
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ha ha mikey is addicted to writing there is no cure smiling I provide him with food that can be held with one hand leaving the other free, he will eat.well i laughed almost choked when i read this mikey you need to stop rolling your eyes and take your wife out as this can be very consuming at times smiling

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    Yep. I guess I will have to untie her and give her a break from reviewing and take her for a burger somewhere. Hahaha mikey
Comment from poetbear
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Not fair to comment on the situation or the story.
It took guts to write it.
Some have used FS as a launchpad and some have been published.
You have to decide if this warrants talking to somebody ( a professinal)and perhaps a writing class live and in person.
Good luck!
Perhaps, a Life Coach.,

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
    I have seen quite a few success stories here. That is encouraging. I am looking at publishing and thinking seriously about it. That is something new and something that never occurred to me until this site. Appreciate the insights. Thank you very much,