Comment from GracieAnn

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myaqoobsabr, since I do not have any idea what language you are writing, I have to just say that the rules of the contest say,

So have fun with the 5-7-5 poetry type. But it must follow the proper syllable count. A 5-7-5 poem has three lines. The first line has 5 syllables. The second line has 7 syllables. The third line has 5 syllables again.

I see different line and syllable counts. There should be three lines total and 17 syllables. If this were in English, then it would also make sense to those on this site. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 28-May-2014

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reply by the author on 28-May-2014

Pholl murjhaty hain aksr shakh sy tutny ky bad.
ma ny us sy kaha mujh sy uon duor na ja.
mana mari ha khtta to ha by jurm khtta.
dy mujhy koi szza mujh sy uon duor na ja.
Mujhy ghayl na kro chup sy uon ba khuda.
kr koi mujh sy villa mujh sy uon duor na ja.
chor sabr ko chlla ik naya drd jaga.
Na koi jis ki dawa mujh sy uon duor na jo.

Comment from kiwijenny

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 Comment Written 26-May-2014

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reply by the author on 27-May-2014

Ha kmal sadgi ka un ky hussn ko hasl.
ha kmal ik trp ka mary junon ko hasl.

reply by the author on 28-May-2014

Ghayl ishq
Nhin ya ho nhin skta.
Ky mujhy bhol jaay
is trha.
Mari chahton ka jo nakhuda.
Bn us ky zinda rhna.
Ha hr ghri sulgna dushvar buht nadan.
Ha mn ka bs jlana.
Ab aao bahar bn ky.
Ujri hoi hain shamyn mari zindgi ki.
Tari muntzir hain kb sy.
Mary gam ka ya fssana.
Ha yahi dasstan hr ik zuban py.
Tari sngdili ki ya dasstan.
Ma ruth jaon tujh sy.
Jasy ky tu ruthta tha mujh sy.
Mujhy tu mnaay us trha.
Sabr ki trp tujhy trpaay.
Bs dua ha ghayl ishq may.
Mujhy chahy tu mari trha.
mari chahton ka jo nakhuda.